great roller coaster ride.. Logan wanting to protect her from the helicopter people, then getting angry that she lied to him, then feeling sorry for her when she says she's a monster, then Marie wanting to save him from 'Fangs', and being loyal to him when he's unconscious. Great stuff!
and gotta love that nickname.. 'Fangs' ;o)

Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad it caught you and kept you interested. :)

Really good chapter.
I like how you take your time revealing things to the characters, like how only now Logan finds out how badly Rogue could have hurt him with that 'kiss' he wanted, and how they still don't know the whole story about Danvers, or how much of the victim's life force Rogue acquires. Very well paced and interesting.
Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Very well paced and interesting. Yay! I hoped people wouldn\'t feel like I was just being coy. Thanks!

your Logan - Marie scene was good;
sexy, playful and hot.
I like a badly behaved drunk logan ;)

The 12 paragraphs of backstory were a little much though, it's rather tiring to read reams and reams of 'thoughts' rather than have the relevant information unfold during the story.

Author's Response: LOL this was a good review because I was scared the way I wrote it all out seemed to verbose but I appreciate you telling me that because I was thinking it but I was so happy after I edited it I didn\'t want to butcher it- I don\'t have very good editing skills, If I\'d been in charge of editing the film from the Titanic it would have been a 30 minute movie- oh and thanks a bunch I was agonizing over my Logan Marie scene so your input really fueled me

Wow, that was hot and heavy and angsty, really great!

They really hurt each other so much in this one it was almost painful to read (that's a good thing!).. Logan effectively laughing at her for thinking she's what's keeping him there yet trying to get her to have sex with him anyway, and her telling him how she knows all his past actions and making him feel like shit 'cause he knows he's done sick twisted things that he can't even hide from her 'cause she's seen it all.

I can only assume he left after that, but dying to see why he's back and what's going to happen next..

Oh, and how Did he feel about Jean then if he claims she doesn't know what she's talking about yet she's got memories of him lusting after her, etc, and he said (in his thoughts) he killed her out of love. Is he trying to lie to Marie about Jean? I hope he has to explain everything to her.

Re the writing there were just a couple of things that jumped out at me..

1) when Marie resumes reminiscing she thinks "Speaking of things which were good about Logan, Logan tossed her head back a little and started thinking about their steamy encounter last year. She wondered if he ever thought it about it too…"
and then proceeds to remember the painful ending rather than good things, so that was odd. Also, you wrote Logan instead of Rogue ^^

2. The paragraph where Logan thinks about why Rogue stopped him:
"Logan sat regarding her for a moment, he admired that she would stop something he knew she wanted.. "
This paragraph really bugs me for some reason. At first I thought it was because you were spelling things out to us in his thoughts, but then I re-read and noticed that after this you also have various paragraphs were Rogue spells her thoughts out, so it can't have been that. I think it's because in His thoughts we're being told what Rogue did / why she did it, and he can't know, so that just feels wrong.

Author's Response: August Dawn my dear your reviews reflect your pen name perfectly. Let me explain, I find dawn to be one of most sedate and beautiful times of day, especially in the summer when almost every day is sunny and the light at that time is unusually golden, from my location. However, even though dawn is wonderful, it only lasts for so long, before the sun rises completely and the day continues. Now in August, the sun is scorching, I\'ve had days where i live that have gone up to 98 degrees and usually the hottest and most unpleasant weather comes in August, and it is here that I find your reviews to mirror your pen name perfectly. See in the beginning of every review you always leave a tid bit of a nice information, something you liked and it\'s very pleasent to see just like the sun rising. Then at the end of the review you always slide in a little criticism and ironically enough it always rivals your compliments in length or comes out about equal. \r\n\r\nI love reading your reviews, you\'re one of the few people who actually properly reviews because so many people just write \"that was good\" or \"keep it up\" which doesn\'t provide and real substance for the author, but your reviews do. I don\'t mean for this comparison to shock you as insulting, I\'m just appreciating the irony of your pen name and way the you review, I\'m glad I\'ve snagged such an insightful reader and thank you for your advice. \r\n\r\n\r\nOh before i forget! 1) Good catch, did write Logan instead of Rogue when I said she tossed her head back and was reminiscing but the flashback isn\'t over yet, so she wasn\'t just remembering a painful ending. I\'m just trying to seize your previous advice about not making an 11 paragraph story filled with flashback information, I want the details to unfold naturally, it\'s important to the way I\'ve formulated future chapters-sorta, I\'m not sure how to explain it in a terse way without spoiling my to-be-plot. But there\'s a final installment of that flashback, things didn\'t just end that way between them and now he\'s back, I didn\'t think they\'d be realistically on cordial terms if they had ended that way. \r\n\r\n2. The part about her stopping something, he knew she wanted, well he knows she wants it because he smells her arousal, and he can hear her heart beating unevenly and see he\'s affecting her. However, I wanted to clarify and I\'m actually glad you brought this to my attention b.c I can be more careful about it in the future, sometimes when Logan is speculating about Marie\'s behavior he thinks he knows EXACTLY what she is doing and why and he\'s usually, for the sake of this story, going to be wrong. I want my Marie to be chuck full of surprises for good ol\' Logan so there will be times when he gets the rug pulled out from under him and there will be times when he does have the right idea, but hey those are yet to come-thanks again for the review!

A dedication! My first !! Wheeeee :D
I got so excited I jumped up and down in my seat!! Thanks :) *blush*

Then I couldn't help but laugh when I read this line, whether intentional or not... "felt the thick stifling heat of a Mississippi August itching its way up over her skin and biting at her nerves." lol!

I have no idea how many introspective paragraphs you hacked away at ;) but the ones you left hung together well, especially the first 6 as the memories triggered were linked to the moment by their associations to the weather, the breeze, and the wish for a hammock.

Though this line in par.6 "not the horny drunkard who’d fingered her on the couch" make me twitch / feel sorry for Logan because it made him seem such a lech! Like she hadn't wanted it, even though she had!

Par7 followed on well and I was totally intrigued by the last line "Now though she’d gotten her fill of experience and she longed to show the Wolverine what she’d learned."
However, it was short lived as the subsequent paragraph killed the intrigue, so I would have left it out ("The first time with Bobby.." along with the second paragraph after that ("He'd come to her like a crying child..") because it's s just a bit too much on the 'Logan is so great/sexy' front which she then touches on again in the following paragraph just before she looks up to find him there.

The scene of them together was very light, which was nice. Lots of fun bits like..
them talking about the weather, and
"he wondered what she would do if he just jumped her. Just a little." and
"he had just winked at her in broad daylight no less… was Logan a closet winker?"

I can't believe he's inviting her to his room when he's also trying to keep his hands off her! I hope they end up drunk again so he can be totally out of line, and I can't even begin to imagine what he's going to think up to surprise her.. a gift? a candle-lit dinner?
Looking forward to it myself.. ;)

Wow, this is really good :)

This chapter was really fun and very hot! Logan being all over her yet not jumping her bones at her offer was great. You've got us wanting more too!

I'm glad he didn't take offence when Jean said Bobby was the kind of guy their parents would approve, but I hope he picked up on it and realises he's got his work cut out for him ;)

Oh, and the first 6 chapters despite being fun were torturous due to the minimal Logan appearances.. I'm so glad I found this story at this stage where I get to enjoy the fruits of patience without the wait, hee hee ;)

Warren is hilarious, but such a letch!
I wonder if Scott and Jean have met yet or if they will spark when they do..?

What else? Oh yeah, I hope the story will tell us why Logan was attracted to Marie from just seeing her with Bobby.. since he couldn't have known she'd be anything special at the time. It's intriguing, since we're told he's so hot and all the women are interested, what made her stand out to him?

Author's Response: oh good, you caught all sorts of little things i threw out there. ;) and you have so many good questions---- but i don\'t want to give anything away just yet

Oh, poor Logan!
She pushes and pushes and then shoves him away :( At least she's being honest though. Nicely done!

I hope he doesn't call her now and she hsa to call him if she's interested ;)

I don't think I liked the museum visit though. It works for the purpose of Logan showing Marie that he wants a soul mate and isn't just a sex bod, which seems to be what she currently sees him as, but it doesn't seem to fit.
Not because Logan can't be wordly as well as brawny, but because it seems that you're trying to give him a depth which will make him approvable to the parents. I would prefer it if if wasn't approvable but Marie loved him enough to tell her parents to stuff their requirements.. much more romantic ;)

Oh, and when did Logan and Marie first meet? We only saw him show up when she was breaking up with Bobby, but when did he first see her and know she was the one? and why did he think she felt it too.

ps: I like how Jean is so competent she can make Marie what she considers a complicated cup of coffee ;)

Author's Response: hey, thanks for the review. as for the museum thing--- that really wasn\'t my intention at all, but because i\'ve tried to keep this story pretty airy, i can see how it\'s open to that interpretation. i wasn\'t trying to reflect any of marie\'s parental approvement requisites on the date. it was just logan sharing something of himself with her.

Wow, that was a fab chapter!
Maybe you should go solo pity drinking more often ;-)

Really loved how Marie had to face up to all her sneakiness. I hope she has to do a lot of crawling before Logan takes her back.

I was really sad and *disappointed* in her ;-) that she hadn't made her mind up to ask Logan to the family dinner until she heard how successful he actually was. I don't know how you can have her make up for being so materialistic!

Author's Response: i have a definite love/hate relationship with this story. i\'m not completely happy with how all the characterizations turned out, especially Marie. But i molded them all in one fashion and to change them into something else would leave my mind whirling too much. this is all still new to me and i\'m not comfortable/practiced enough to do anything about it right now. and again, all of this is happening in the span of 2 weeks in the story. people just don\'t normally change over night. maybe i\'ll be able to redeem her by the end of the story, or maybe i won\'t. but i\'m not going to stress about it because this is a light, cheezy fic. :)

Ooh, can't wait to see what the Plan is!

I can't believe Rogue was calling Logan before 6am on a Sunday morning... that's a sure fire way to drive a guy off!! Crazy woman.

I loved Bobby's line "He’s better off without you. I wouldn’t subject an enemy on you, much less a friend."
followed by Kitty's self-assured, woman in charge, “Tell me what you want and I’ll have Bobby do it.” ha ha

Sad to hear that this story will be coming to an end soon, you sure you don't want Logan to get into some boxing circuit trouble or conglomerate takeover bid for his gyms and Rogue have to help him out with her super techie skills and mad planning? ;-)

Looking forward to your next A/U already... hats off to you, I'm totally impressed that you work so hard and still find time to write so well!

Author's Response: alright, you\'re totally pushing for a sequal. and with great ideas, too! but i think it\'s pretty safe to say that when this one ends it ends. however if someone else wanted to write a sequel... *hint hint* i\'m sure something could be arranged. ;)
thanks for the wonderful review. any ideas for the next AU?

ooh, what a teaser!
great stuff, wanna read more.. ;)

That was really good and engaging,
Very well written :)
Particularly the first half, you write a very good Logan and I was impressed at how you managed to weave in 'memories' without it getting dull.
Marie wasn't quite as good as Logan, perhaps because you wrote her in the 1st person, I'm not sure, perhaps just because your Logan was so good.

It dipped a bit from when Scott came in up to the point where Marie punched Logan; I can't say exactly why but it just seemed a little off, maybe OOC or maybe just rather rushed / forced, but then it picked up again after that.
Very cool :D

Ooh, this is just too fun!
I love the new annoying kid, and also how you kept Logan's reminiscings of Rogue relatively short.. almost ;-)

3 paragraphs on the 'warmth' factor was probably 1 too many as they did manage to snap me out of the scene with Star.
I would have left out this whole section "Constantly and more frequently then he would have liked .... as you can see drastic difference between the two. " which didn't add anything, whilst the following 2 paragraphs did fit in well with the scene.

I liked at the end how you kept Logan's summary of the Mystique / Kelly fiasco to a single paragraph, that worked well.

So much good stuff in this one, and lots of great lines..

“GOD! You’re so growly! It’s like driving with a god damned bear!”

“gee sorry I almost roasted you alive back there, hope that didn’t hurt, hey did you want a new shirt?”

"..he was defending his furry friends"

"..there was a slab of bullshit with a side of useless."

"..he was fresh out of stale beefy jerky. Of course he should have had some on hand, here he is driving around in Canada, it was only natural that he’d run into another mutant teen on the run, and of course it was almost inconceivable that he hadn’t thought to stock his pick up full of teenage girl goodies. "

Well, I'd say this was a chapter in 2 parts!

The first part I really enjoyed.. Everything up to the hotel was good and then the hotel scene worked really well at getting Logan and Star to soften towards each other a little.
Then I thought you handled the arrival at the mansion really well, all the introductions seemed fresh and I liked the short perspective you gave Star on each member of the team.. Hank, Scott, Storm, etc. I think it's hard to do these arrival and introduction scenes without rehashing old ground and being boring. You managed to summarise the meeting with the Jr X-Men well and her getting all excited about the school and stuff.
I was also intrigued by the hint that she may not have been completely honest with Logan about her lack of memories!

Then, Part 2.. the story comes to a halt and Logan sits down with a beer to think about his past for about 14 paragraphs! I know you tend to do this and I tend to complain ;) but it felt even weirder here when the story had been flowing so well for 4 chapters and then you suddenly change tack and move into Logan reminiscing about Rogue mode. I'm starting to think that it's your way of trying to put across his deep feelings for her and his inner conflict, etc, but unfortunately we've heard it all before. I couldn't help just skim-reading this second part.
I'd much prefer to see this feeling and conflict expressed through fresh, ingenious, interactive scenes instead. With maybe paragraph or 2 of memories interspersed along the way ;)

Author's Response: Oh man August, you keep me laughing! Seriously I read the last four reviews you gave me and I hope you can appreciate this long response I\'m about to write you. Oh and I\'ll apologize that it\'s all in one big block thought as well because for some reason I can\'t make spaces between my review responses. Digressing, you really do flatter me with your reviews, I mean besides complaining about my verbose choice of reminiscing style. Honestly, I love that you got the slap stick humor of the previous chapters, every one else was like \"Bring on Rogue\" but maybe it\'s me being cocky but when I re-read what I write, after I\'ve posted it, I laugh my ass off just reading it. I love the idea of Logan having a handful of teenager whose just a normal-well normal mutant teenager- who likes to bug and irk him. I think the humor of the situation was lost on some of my stellar Rogue/Logan fans but I really appreciate you commented on how you enjoyed it and that you understood it. \r\n\r\nSecondly, I laughed out loud when you left this particular review. \r\n\"Then, Part 2.. the story comes to a halt and Logan sits down with a beer to think about his past for about 14 paragraphs!\" You\'re so dead on balls accurate-pardon my, My Cousin Vinny vernacular, but what you said was exactly true. I like writing more in dialogue but sometimes I get a little carried away, like a 14 paragraph peak into the mind of Logan. Usually I catch myself and edit the hell out of my chapters, toning it down a little. Sometimes though when I\'m up late writing really big chapters I get a little lazy and post without editing properly. When I re-read what I posted I literally wanted to cut out a ton of it, which is kinda one my list of things I\'ll never accomplish where Wanted is concerned. I really want to tackle those first three chapters (of Wanted) and fine tune them, take out all the extra unnecessary stuff. \r\n\r\n\r\nJust want to say I really love and appreciate your feedback, makes my day all the time! Thanks lady!