*Nods agreement with White Dove*
Pity that Logan veers a little to the silly side; but interesting Rogue. Glad that she's strong and wild for once; very promising plot-wise.
I would have imagined Jubes a little less easily fazed, but her voice works grand - there might even be a little more insight into how people feel and think in this one. I hadn't missed it, but the one paragraph of Jube's thinking showed the dimension that might be added to this.

Greatly looking forward to updates!!!

Oh mwhrrlglb.... wohaammmbl...

No. Feedback. This definitely gets proper FB, never mind the dinner blackening quietly.

Will you forgive me for saying that the fic seemed to me to start a little like a run-off-the-mill high-school fantasy?

And then it goes and becomes completely hot and totally un-trite. Logan is resigned and accepting, and you keep it credible without ever falling for the (to me rather lame) image of an experienced guy who can't hold his horses because the girl is so hot. (She might be, but this is not about a perfect ass alone.)
And the claws... wow! Erotic? SO yes! Has he ever explored that potential before, I wonder? He might have - no drama there, just assertive sexuality... and reverence for her, no less. From that she should have know he wouldn't have any second thoughts about her "category" - he certainly takes her very seriously as a woman. No better indicator than that he actually teases her a little, perfectly secure in the knowledge that she has passed that stage: "You have a thing for my claws, little girl?"

Great how the tension and closeness of the one very hot shower scene is relieved (before it becomes tediously over-heated) by giving us the next step in retrospect through Marie's POV and her musings on her emotions and consequences - the narrative manages to balance perfectly between delightful smut and deep emotion (in real life, one of the trademarks of a good strong love).

And then the whole wonderful, well-seasoned mix that gives the writing such a true ring: She isn't so overly ecstatic that she cannot notice how uncomfortable she is on her knees, the revelation it is to her (despite all the second-hand memories she has) that passion has a life of its own and can drive you beyond mere likes and dislikes ("And then there was that weird thing with your cum, she added mentally. What was that about, Mother Nature?") I also note with satisfaction that she has quickly grasped what to say and what to keep silent about - clever girl!

Her introspection nicely lightened by a spicy sense of humour: "sometimes she seemed to be channelling Mother Nature"; "Was it polite for the newly de-virgined to ask?"

Glad how you weave his experienced attitude, so sure of what to do and when, together with her bright, brave charting of new territory (loved the detail about her buying condoms... and then forgetting all about them until much too later). And though she is less experienced, she is not the weaker partner (THANKS for that, well done!), as clearly shows when the whole scene darkens gently into a view of his self-perception. She might be new to the game, and still very young, but they can indeed be partners. She's wise enough for that, wiser than him maybe.
Riding into war? Yes, and I hope for them they realise it's not against each other. If they manage to become comrades in arms, they can make it.

And how wonderful that you don't stop here, when so many shippers would just insert an "and they lived happily ever after"!

(For restless youngsters, please allow me to point out the follwoing website to you: http://www.lullabies.co.uk/
I'm only having your baby's welfare in mind, of course. It's not like I have this urgent desire to shake the PC in the hope another, as yet hidden chapter will fall out. No.)

Author's Response: Wow. GREAT feedback. Take a step into the Gamma hall of fame!!!! \r\n\r\nI\'m glad you picked up on the high school fantasy aspect. That was intentional: I\'ve never actually written a story where Teenage Marie gets Logan. I loved reading about it, like anyone, but my poor, adult-feminist-mother brain needed to find some serious justification before I put the two together. (She was still young in The Bargain, but that was FAR from realistic, and in the end, it wasn\'t Marie that got Logan.) This is my attempt to approach Marie-Logan without my Wolverine/Rogue alterego fixation, and without the Lolita elements.\r\n\r\nI wanted it to be as \"real\" as possible; none of the romance novel fadeouts, or the porny \"they had teh sex in 56 ways her first time evah\". And I like to think Marie, in particular, is adult enough to be able to laugh at the ridiculousness of life at times.\r\n\r\nRe youngsters, I\'m in heaven today. My eldest has been taken to the museum by my very brave sister in law, and the youngest is asleep. BLISS! (And a bit of charcoal in the dinner never hurt, either.) \r\n

... and here I should be working...
Yes, he's a great one for saying the wrong things and not hearing the bombs drop, now isn't he? Love the graphic image of the baby chewing away at his jacket, and Rogue's teenage moodswings. Perfect how her mind and his have priorities lightyears apart, and how she flares about the thought of a baby sucking at a dirty X-jacket. In time she'll be able to kick his butt all right!

Author's Response: I just couldn\'t resist that baby image. I know, I know, pairing Logan with a baby is a cheap way to get foofy thrills, but what can I say? I have gone soft (from my head). :)

Just found this now - it's beautiful!!! So very gently and careful of your characters' hearts. A little too well-turned sentences may sometimes, if you allow me. but best of all, touching in the real, clear sense of the word - Marie in Xavier's office actually made my eyes wet. hope you keep on writing!!!

Author's Response: \"A little too well-turned sentences\", yes? *smiles* I guess that means what my beta\'s saying... that I\'llalways be more Xavier than Logan. But I still think I got the essence right. Thank you very much!\r\n\r\nCúthalion

Oh, am I relieved, you MAKE it! The last chapter was, forgive me, kind of the average shipper stuff, and it seemed to have so much pink icing and "cutey Jubes makes it all right", I got seriously worried. Well, shame on me, I could've known better.
And no Moviemom, Logan isn't patient, it's "tenacious" you are looking for!
:-) And yes, after so much shattering pain, you need to take it slow, and you need to go back to being 16, just to heal those old wounds before you can start growing any further. WELL done!!! (For whatever my praise it worth... :-)

What a beautiful story. Just rediscovered it after thinking that chapter three had completed it. You don'T need to hear about your comand of language, style and tone, I'm sure. Just wanted to let you know that I really appreciate the careful pacing of it all, and how deeply respectful the story is of real emotions and the pain of living, and the joy that makes it worth while. Thanks for releasing such a story into this fandom.

Author's Response: hey, glad you enjoyed it. what can i say? as much fun as beating on jeannie is, the woman has her reasons... hobbits away, hey!

Yay, badass rogue finally starts to re-emerge from the coy embarassed blushing, the meep-ing and eep-ing and the comfy cotton dress! I'm waiting eagerly for her to shake the rest of the girly subservience to male domineering! :-)

This is a totally wonderful story (have read chap 1-3 but didn'T want to stick i review halfway), really well-written, lots of suspense that works, at last a story again that trusts its readers to understand things all by themselves. GREAT to have the three "Logan's girls" work together, unusual and fascinating to see him in the role of pack leader! Do keep it on, hobbits-ho!

Have never tried crack, but can easily believe these two are better, especially in your hands. GREAT to see Rogue's punch at PornSmurf (love that one!!) coming out of nowhere the last chapter. As for the drama: it's amazing of what people can convince themselves, but at least we can stand by and see Truth. It's when there's two truths that life gets really difficult. Yes, she loves him, no she can'T trust him. The only solution I now is to admit both truths and then go beyond knowing. It's called faith. And it can result in a really beautiful, strong, wise love... or in a really stupid, painful mess. I'm still not quite sure if it's worth it, myself. But it's wonderful to have a story again here that comes up with these issues without having to spell them out. Thanks!

Oh, I never said porn WITH plot was a bad thing... ;-) Really very much enjoy your girls fighting, though. They are tough and inventive and can stand their own - such a relief from so many "I need him to protect me" girls.
Oh, and Wolverine? With the "I'm not letting her go again"? Not your decision, I'm afraid.
And now the boyfriend is saving her life. It's about time he became a little less of a type (much as I enjoy bashing him), if you don't mind me saying so. Anyway, Logan does know about obligations, and his own shortcomings, and he'll have to chew on this one quie a while, I'd imagine. Ha, angst!
Hobbits away indeed!

Oh, breathtakingly beautiful!I keep loving "LoganS' girls", how much consideration shows in the trio's characterisation. Great how each plays a role and yet never becomes a type, wonderful to see Kitty getting some space in this, relievingly interesting how the "barfly incid could ent" is resolved. (I never did believe that Logan of the staunch loyalties would be someone to fall for the "oops, I cheated" dumbness.)
Hm, and Callum really stps at nothing mean. Will Rogue feel betrayed? It would provide her with a feasible reason forLogan not meeting her eyes when he went from her and with KitKat. I wonder what Callum thinks her reaction will be. Demure heartbreak, probably. Has he ever seen Rogue throw a good honest fit? This might be a great chance. Go on Rogue, you can't have forgotten all your instincts, you KNOW the difference between an up-front fighter and a mean-spirited, crawling, spineless... but I get carried away. Yayy hobbits! :-)

Ooops, I someow managed to miss THREE chapters of this story! How did that happen? Probably my scheme of disciplining myself into not checking for updates (which was seriously interfering with real life)worked a littel to well. Anyway, I'm glad I'm back with your great humour and adept psychology! Yes Marie, that's the problem, isn't it? Now we have what we want, but what in heaven's name DID we want again? And have we been wanting it for so long that we got used to the feeling and can't tell if it's not true anymore? What if we got so used to hurting over a failed love that we don'T realise we don't even want it anymore when we do get it back? Oh yes, life can be fun.
Still find it wonderful how you write Stark (even through others' eyes), still true to character though he's in love.

Yay! Congrats on finishing this story, and on making it a happy end with so much snarky flavouring it doesn't even feel sappy! Please do keep writing, your characters and tone work yo wonderfully well in this one, it would be a shame to waste them!!! Any thanks a lot for some good times in this place! :-)