He DOES deserve a medal.......a big shiny smuty one!

I feel strongly about this chapter. I strongly desire more. A lot more. Just keep that brand of awesome going and we'll be good friends, real fast. Thankyewsomuuuchsquuuueeee!

~Mia

Author's Response: Ha, I thought you'd like that one, my new BFF. ;-)

I have to agree with Capt_Mackenzie here. Logan's recovered his "pre-lab" self *really* quickly, and he seems to have formed entirely too much of an emotional attachment way too soon. This chapter and the last have dragged the story from the rescue and recovery of a lab-tortured Wolverine into a mundane, wham-bam action piece with some PWP thrown in. Nothing wrong with some good smut, but after the wonderful character set-up of the first several chapters, this just doesn't ring true and cheapens what you'd created before. With this chapter, I feel that the story has fallen off the tracks, and what was terrific has now become pedestrian.

Also, in writing dialog, you should begin a new paragraph for each character speaking. This makes the conversation clearer to read.

Sorry.... I wouldn't say this if your beginning chapters hadn't made me care so much. You are capable of so much better, but it's your story and your choices.

Author's Response: Yeah, it's hard to know how to respond -- if it's even possible to explain my thinking without sounding defensive. I had a very clear idea for the early chapters, and they turned out just how I wanted them, all the way through "The Beer" chapter. I realize there has been a shift and I am in fact less thrilled with the recent chapters, but here's how I think about it. At a certain point I needed Logan to recover. The scientific mechanism I developed for his recovery meant that he would recover completely and suddenly. At that point, there is nothing to keep him with Marie except a.) an external threat or b.) an emotional connection. I'm trying to balance the two, but if it's ending up as action / PWP / sap then that's probably how the rest of the story is going to feel. I'm glad (I guess) that people liked the beginning of the story enough to feel that I'm ruining it now, but unless I wanted Coherent!Logan to say, "Okay, nice meeting you, thanks for the brew, I'm off to go cage-fighting again!" I think this is where the story is going to go from here. Maybe I just wasn't creative enough to think of a reason for him to stick around and be all UST-y with Marie after his recovery, but that ship has sailed. Like I said, there will be some more shipper-y parts coming up, and if it helps in my mind a lot of the sappier things he said to her were under extreme circumstances and when she was not actually in a position to actually hear them and not necessarily things he would look her in the eye and tell her, but if people are waiting for a return to Feral!Logan that's probably not in the cards. I do appreciate all the reviews, both positive and negative, though! rnrnThanks for the tip about the dialogue/paragraphs. I read on my phone and lots of little paragraphs drive me up the wall, so I don't know if I'll adopt that style now, but I'll keep it in mind for future stories.

i love it. i mean you could have taken it so many different places but this one feels good to me.

can't wait til Logan gets his... in more ways than one. LOL

Author's Response: So glad you liked it!

Yum.

Author's Response: :-)

oh i hope she doesn't freak out or that things get awkward between them! great update, love the smexiness!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I won't keep you in suspense for long. ;-)