I can't do more than agree. A little too sumary in ending, I feel, but honest and deeply heartshaking. And yes, I cried too.

That's incredibly funny! Marginally confusing sometimes (for the reader; obviously a little more so for the characters); and the three voices work great. Also quite nice how the different levels of insight are set off from each other: Rogue, then Logan with only a bit of his voice, and last Scott - quite efficiently goading the reader on.

Author's Response: Your satisfaction makes me most content. Sorry, I got tired of repeating the phrase \"glad you like it\" and thought I\'d try to spice it up a bit. Sorry if it was confusing in areas. The whole thing confused me, as I had no idea where any of it was going. I\'m just lucky this plot bunny gave me three characters that work as such good foils for each other, much like the three-way swordfight in the second Pirates of the Carribean movie.

Great one! Bobby is a real person here, perfect how him observing things and mulling them over tell the story - at last, he is more than a prop.
Just perhaps a little too wordy in his descriptions of the movie senes for my taste - but then, I am an impatient person.
Love your take on the end of the R/B relationship - I can easily imagine how he tries, very inexpertly and not without hurting both her and himself, to end it.
Wonderful how he is true and perecptive all the time, and how he gives the less than romantic end a twist towards the dark.

Fun, September, so much fun! And perfec to the last stroke how she feels; can definitely step right into her head there.

Author's Response: LoL - that\'s probably because she stepped right out of mine. I\'ve so been there *g* Thanks :o)

Umm... Categories? Check. Series? Check. Genres? Check.
Feedback welcome? Hmm.
Well, if you didn't want any, tough luck, you're getting it anyway ;-)

Loved how it alternate between short, descriptive passages and conversation. Perhaps there is a little too much description sometimes: "Logan was in his sleeveless undershirt at the card table and the other guys were in short sleeves". You capture the feel of the scene so well, I'd say you can dispense with being overtly detailed.
The late-night/early morning feel about the setting comes across really well.
It seems almost fairy-tale'ish ("Pete the plumber") black-white in the way Logan's poker company and Rogue are set off from each other (late in the night and very early in the morning; the loud backroom of a bar and the quiet bedroom; the grime in atmosphere and "ideas" in the one and the sleepy kindness in the other, etc). The one-track conversation and the fairly conservative shot at the roles of all protagonists nicely underlines the fairytale feel.
Logan is the only one who crosses from the black to the white (with a shower and linen).
Wonder why he doesn't act on his love? Also wonder if it would be a good idea. His fantasies about her are strictly backroom, and that whole paragraph breaks the flow of the whole thing a bit - it reads a little out of character (of the story, certainly not Logan's). But that might be just me.

Great! how he gives up his "title" to Rogue - your summary sentence is absolutely the filet part of this story.

Thanks for sharing!
BC

Just re-discovered this one after AGES. What a great, wonderful, hilarious laugh. Thanks for it again!!!

Wheeeow. Wow. They are getting into dark regions all right here.
Good for all of us who thought the Wolverine attractive in the original sense of the word: Flirting with the dark soon gets you into some ugly mess.

But also: Marie loses all this goddamn virginal innocence. Might be good, might be bad - depending whether she can handle the experience and mature, or whether it will breed some weird progeny inside her soul.
She might come out Logan's equal - whatever he will be after his own mutations.

Well, Marie, don't wring your conscience too much over it. There are more things than one needs than just safety and care, and more people than just the one love.

She had stated quite clearly what she wanted and needed, giving her man all the info he needed to work things over - even the chance to think them over with HER, which is something many women (unwisely) refrain from.
If he then stubbornly wants to interpret as "YOU change it all for e or your are not good enough for me any more", tough luck. "Keeping your woman happy" sometimes takes much less than the guys tend to think - he just has to stop trying to do all the keeping himself and take the chance to let her participate in the keeping. It's called partnership, gentlemen!

Still, I wonder what he's up to now.

Author's Response: Still, I wonder what he\'s up to now. - Bancainte 05/11/07 You\'re not the only one. But I have a feeling that there was something more behind this than just his hurt pride and need to keep Marie safe. And as for Marie, I think there\'s something new coming along her way. :)

With such helpful neighbours, I would be suspicious enough at this stage to consider running again ;-)
But at least I could imagine what Anabel and Mick are up to here.

I swear, this Rogue girl is a pain in the arse and all the way up to the tonsils!
She's confusing lust and love, she's demanding loyalty where she doesn't grant it, she wants companionship from a guy to whom she went for pleasure alone and she demands sincerety when she is playing little games.
I am quite run out of patience here, and I am beginning to think that she's a long way from becoming enough of a woman for ANY mature relationship. Guh.

Having said this, it's a great story - I didn't follow it so far, but got taken in just a few chapters ago and have now read it in one go - great job!

Style-wise, these two chapters might actually the best I've read from you so far! With very few exceptions, register and grammar fit Logan very well indeed; great how his moods flow and turn.
The sparse descriptions, the terse language and the strong reliance on dialogue work great together in giving us Marie, Logan (outside view) and Logan (inside view) and even Jean (through the eyes of Marie) - all intricately woven and welded together like damascene steel.
Though there is not much action, it makes an exciting read as the story challenges the reader all the time to look for small clues, to figure out what happened on the basis of some remark. Lovely exefcise for the imaginary powers of your readers, and the story does not once let them down by being unclear or openly secretive. The device also nicely illustrates how much more important than the outside world their inside world is to them right then.
Lovely!

Author's Response: Thank you! I think this whole fic was my muse\'s revenge for \"Cold Shower\". I\'m glad this works. for a moment I was worried if I left this a bit too vague. :)

what a wonderful, quiet story! I haven't a clue about zodiacs, but I can see how the trashy mag horoscope and the serene dinner span quite a bit of ordinary, everyday life at the Mansion - it's nice to see that for them in a while.
Also lovely how the story has many of the common characteristics (it's got Rogan, it's got a scheming Jubes, it's got ice-cream and insinuations of chocolate) without ever becoming cheesy or distasteful - I quite agree with Wolf 's assessment there!
Wonderfully painted little vignettes, too - Logan staring at a paper hat, the view from the windows.
Very much a round, complete little story.

Author's Response: Thanks Bancainte! I was just trying to get a bit of a handle on how things could be for them both. Birthdays are emotional things and I think even though he hides it he must *feel* the loss of it sometimes. Thanks again, Jo.