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How might things have changed if Logan knew all that Charles knew about his past.

Rated: Mature
Categories: X1, X2, X3, AU, X-Men Origins Wolverine
Characters: None
Genres: Shipper
Tags: None
Warnings: None

Series: To Touch the Moon
Chapters: 21
Wordcount: 35899 - Hits: 61438
Complete?: No - Published: 02/05/2011 - Last Updated: 03/12/2011
Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 03/11/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: What Charles Knew

Trying to go back and review each chapter...there's quite a few things I like about this. Of course Rogan is always good, and Rogue's quiet disappointment with Bobby and Kitty and Logan being protective but not over-the-top about it is great. I also really like the Hank/Logan interactions, brief as they are. There is so much that is understood between them, even though they have not known each other for long. And you really get a sense of how Hank's loyalties are torn between loyalty to Xavier and his own sense of what is right.

Author's Response: Thanks alot for reviewing I am working on the next chapter, but at the moment seem to have the stomach flu which accounts for being awake at this ungodly hour. Thank you for looking it over and sending the fixes...Hank was a last minute addition for me. Originally, I had Storm slated to play the kitchen scene, but as I was writing I couldn\'t see her doing or saying things the way the story needed. Beast was inspiration and I have to say he fit the story so much better than Storm would have.

Rogue could almost taste his presence. Feel his hands as he guided her through the postures, see the bead of sweat making its way down the planes of his back as he turned away from her. She had to blink to chase away the fantasy: he wasn’t here yet. He might not want to come with them. With her. She had left him for dead, after all.

Rated: NC-17
Categories: AU
Characters: None
Genres: Action, Adult, Drama
Tags: None
Warnings: None

Series: None
Chapters: 30
Wordcount: 81308 - Hits: 166915
Complete?: Yes - Published: 02/23/2011 - Last Updated: 07/01/2013
Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 02/23/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Target: Wolverine

I'm liking this a lot...SO curious to find out what happened in the past and how Logan is going to react to seeing her again! *Definitely* worth finishing, and I see epic potential for sure!

Author's Response: Sorry, you\'ll have to wait on that Logan reaction. I need to be inspired to write me some reacty Logan. I have to have it fixed *just* right in my head. But I\'ll be working on it this weekend, I promise. (Australian weekend, even. Sooner than most!)

Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 02/28/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Target: Wolverine

Ooh...drama! Very intriguing so far (What happened in Pasadena? Was Logan really just manipulating her?). Logan isn't coming across so likable, but that's okay...I'm very interest to see where it goes!

Author's Response: I think we\'ll find out about what happened in Pasadena in the next chapter ... possibly. He was definitely manipulating her - but to what end? And why? That\'s why I need quite a few chapters more, yet. And no, this Logan isn\'t likable Logan. He\'s infuriating!Logan and ambiguous!Logan and love-to-hate-him-but-I-really-want-to-jump-his-bones-anyway!Logan.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 03/05/2011 Title: Chapter 4: Demons

Argh, you're like "Lost," every chapter brings more questions instead of answers, but I'm still loving it! Hopefully you'll give us a more satisfying conclusion than "Lost" did. ;-) This chapter was poignant, but I am still liking the weird tutor/pupil dynamic between these two. I read back over the prior chapter just to get oriented again, and was struck again by the part where she thinks, "Stupid girl. Dead girl." I know we've only got a hint of what Logan did to kill that hope in her, but it'll be angsty goodness when we get there. And surprisingly, the thing that has creeped me out the most so far is the idea of Logan in linen pants and silk shirts. :-D

Author's Response: I really was intending on providing some answers, they just got pushed out of this chapter. But I do think the fact that Rogue was abused is a fairly big answer, and as I said elsewhere, it\'s something I always thought HAD to be behind such an anti-social mechanism. (Mutation is random, of course, but evolution would rule THAT particular mutation out of the genepool pretty damn quick.) And yes, I\'m with you on the silk shirts ... I think that threw me so much the first time around I *gasp* got blocked!

Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 03/19/2011 Title: Chapter 6: The war without

Yum! I liked it a lot! Very interesting to see the difference between how Rogue is appearing to Logan (her takedown of Joe, for example) and how she is really feeling about things. And their fight was very...intense.

I was confused about this, though: “Rogue,” he corrected, sliding his tongue down over her ear. “I’m not going to pretend I don’t want her.” He pressed closer, his hardness nudging her somewhere that might her convulse and gasp. “But I can’t pretend I don’t want you either.”
Is the first "her" Marie, because he used that name and then corrected himself? I guess I'm not used to thinking of them as so separate, but Logan really does seem to feel that way. Very cool story, can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Yes, that\'s right. He\'s trying to keep it all about Rogue, atm, because Marie is scared to be Marie, basically. I can\'t seem to get away from the multiple-personality aspect to her mutation, and often write her that way. And in this particular story, where that aspect of her mutation might have arisen from trauma, it could almost be a disassociative thing. Quite a few of my stories revolve around that difference between Marie and Rogue.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 03/26/2011 Title: Chapter 7: Victories

Wow, what an awesome chapter -- and covering so much ground! But so evil to leave things there...on such a sensual cliffhanger in both past and present! Not fair! ;-)

Author's Response: But just imagine diving off that particular cliff. I suspect the next chapter\'s going to be very ... fulfilling. It\'ll be a nice technical challenge writing two different sex scenes like that ... glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 04/10/2011 Title: Chapter 8: Wolverine and Rogue

Wow. Forgive you for the smut? I'll try. ;-) This was superb. Poetic, and raw, and sexy as hell. I love this:
a hot tide of honest appreciation, and the warm buzz of amusement
and
The type of man who would fuck you into the floor and not even offer you a hand up afterwards.
and

Rogue and the Wolverine. It sounded like music, and felt like a car crash. They were at terminal velocity, hurtling through the night, towards something inevitable.
and
the languor seeping into her blood was punctuated by the memory of his voice
And, well, just about every line in that description of their kiss. Bravo, my friend. Just awesome.

Author's Response: I used to have an ongoing argument with another writer (Laenwyn) about poetry. I know I can do raw and sexy, but she thinks that has its own poetry, whereas I\'m still not sure. I\'m generally happy with a few corker lines in a fic that bring everything to a head ... and yes, \"the type of man\" is another one I\'m happy with, along with that entire flashback. Glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 04/20/2011 Title: Chapter 9: Peace?

Dayum, woman. I don't know how you do it. In every chapter, you just hit all the notes. Hot as hell, so sweet it makes me "Aw...", intriguing plot points, beautiful language. I had to read it three times just to make sure I was catching it all.

Favorite lines:

That had been fucking coming home, and she knew it.

He didn’t say a word, didn’t move a muscle, but fuck it all, he prayed.

lips and teeth and stubble sensitising her so much that she felt like live current

she had let go completely, and he had seeped into her, just enough to share his awe, and tenderness, and the ferocious, hungry desire that always, always lurked beneath

Author's Response: I am too much of an egotist to post a chapter that doesn\'t have some good lines, or a high spot of some sort. Hence my lack of updates recently - I wasn\'t happy with what I had, so stuck it all in the misadventures file and started again. Hopefully I will finish it by the weekend. Thanks for sticking with me :D

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 05/14/2011 Title: Chapter 10: Morning glories

Absolutely loving it. I read the chapter, then backed up to read it all in a row with the three before it again. Your creation of Wolverine and Rogue are just...mesmerizing. I don't know how you manage to make every chapter so electric, with their emotion and longing and want. It's an amazing talent.

Author's Response: Thank you - that\'s a beautiful thing to say. I\'m not sure if its talent, or practice, or having a very, very vivid imagination. Probably a little of each!

Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 05/14/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Target: Wolverine

Oops, I forgot my favorite line. There were a bunch of good ones, but I think this wins:

The sort of friend you knew nothing about, and couldn’t really trust, but liked anyway.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 01/28/2012 Title: Chapter 20: ... gonna get bit

Hooray for an update, and hooray for Bancainte if she helped make it happen! And, I can't even complain about the time between updates, because it's the perfect excuse to go back and start reading again from the beginning. The backstory is so intriguing...I am dying to see how these pieces come together.

Whatever it takes to keep writing...please do it! This story is worth the wait.

Author's Response: I\'m glad the backstory is working. I did feel I was being neglectful in stomping into the action without fully integrating the rest of the in-between times, so I needed to find a way to reintegrate. I WILL keep on writing ... I\'m hoping to finish this up fairly soon, to free me up for the Heroine BigBang in March-June. (I\'ll be writing a Veronica Mars/NCIS crossover ... step over to my LJ if that works for you :D)

Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 05/10/2012 Title: Chapter 22: Shatter

Aw, poor Gil. Snuggling with his dead mother, and having to leave his friends behind. This line was very touching: "Here, he had learned to sleep deeply, and eat slowly, and laugh out loud." I loved Rogue coming to Logan's rescue, even as pissed as she was. I can't say I'm entirely clear on what's going on, but I don't think I'm supposed to be...yet.

Author's Response: Hmmm,I\'m hoping things will crystallise at some point! Sometimes I do tend to forget that what lives in my head and one comes out on paper aren\'t the same thing ... can make things obscure at times. Glad you liked Gil; I don\'t usually like to waste time on OCs, or even secondary characters, but he grabbed me for some reason. And I figure chaps without Rogan smut need some character development :D

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 07/31/2012 Title: Chapter 23: Shards of truth

There is so much awesome in this. This part is genius:

Didn't mean she wanted to see the man dead, though, and walking in hand in hand with his supposed killer … her mouth twitched. Awkward.

And poor Hank, having to do Xavier's autopsy. And Phoenix using Xavier's body to punch him...ouch.

Still a little fuzzy on what happened (e.g. who killed Charles) but hoping I'm meant to be and it'll be clearer later. And I can't wait to see how Rogue responds.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 07/31/2012 Title: Chapter 23: Shards of truth

There is so much awesome in this. This part is genius:

Didn't mean she wanted to see the man dead, though, and walking in hand in hand with his supposed killer … her mouth twitched. Awkward.

And poor Hank, having to do Xavier's autopsy. And Phoenix using Xavier's body to punch him...ouch.

Still a little fuzzy on what happened (e.g. who killed Charles) but hoping I'm meant to be and it'll be clearer later. And I can't wait to see how Rogue responds.

"It is harder to love than to find someone to love."

...The path of the Xmen has become much darker in recent years. Rogue finds her way to the mansion one night and meets our favorite surly Canadian--but has she been there before? And what exactly do they want with her?

Rated: R
Categories: AU
Characters: None
Genres: Angst, Drama, Shipper
Tags: None
Warnings: None

Series: None
Chapters: 11
Wordcount: 26484 - Hits: 21987
Complete?: No - Published: 02/27/2011 - Last Updated: 02/09/2018
Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 03/31/2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

I loved, loved, LOVED this chapter. The reason it's taken me so long to review is that I really could not narrow down my favorite lines. I managed to get it down to -- what, 5?

"to Jean, following as dedicated and useless as a shadow"

"the flurry of bitter sparks in his chest"

"Logan expected her to fall against him, into him, with the ease and the sharp relief of a puzzle piece finally submitting to its designated niche"

"the sidelong glances of those who had not fully left childhood but had been transformed into weapons through necessity"

Just a beautiful, amazing, lyrical, evocative chapter, so packed full of goodness it didn't seem short to me. Can't wait for more.

Author's Response: I crowed aloud at this, danced happily (and probably frighteningly) in my chair. Thank you, thank you, thank you!

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 02/28/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Love it! So many unanswered questions set up so elegantly -- where is Ororo? Why has the mansion gone to seed? And I agree about liking the potential for sassy Rogan action. I am so excited you started a new fic so soon. :-D

Author's Response: So soon? Lord, I\'ve been stressing out over how long it has taken me to write this chapter. :~D I am immensely glad that you liked it, and hope you continue to do so.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 03/06/2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Hooray for a new chapter! I'm really liking it (no big surprise). So rough to see the mansion beset with hard times, but oppression does make for great stories. I hope you're wrong about this being a short one. ;-) And how mean of you to tease us by ending on the first real Rogan interaction!

Author's Response: I\'m very glad you\'re enjoying it (and relieved--I\'m really wrestling with that rambling instinct in this one; will hopefully tone down on the over-description for the next chappie). Am unaccustomed to working with this kind of time setting, so it\'s great to have someone as incredible as you on board.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 03/16/2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Love, love, LOVE this chapter. Where to start? Fascinated by the idea of Rogue using her powers in a different way.

These lines are so exquisitely wonderful, if you had posted them alone this would have still been a 5-star chapter:
Logan breathed in the fumes of what he had done, watched particles only he could see swirl, a dance just for him. His heart was pounding, a furious, fleshy beast, the determined engine of a ship in turbulent water.

I really like the moment where you comment on the rarity of Wolverine restraining Logan rather than vice versa.

One thing did confuse me. Did you really mean to say home twice here, or was the ivory-something meant to be something else?

civilian in a war-zone who's just watched an ivory home turn his home into dust

Author's Response: Oh, yes. Definitely a typo! Ugh.That first \"home\" was supposed to be \"explosion\". My bad... :~) I\'m so very glad that you liked this--your review sparked a pretty good day for me. >hugs<

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 04/23/2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Okay, let's take this in order.

1. Darlin', please stop apologizing and stressing out about updates! People like me who update regularly are painting a house, and you are painting a Rembrandt. Do it at your own pace. I know people are supposed to suffer for their art and all that, but I also know if this stops becoming fun we are going to miss out on all your wonderful future work. So, deep breaths, take care of yourself, and we will happily accept your work whenever you can supply it!

2. A lovely chapter, and the idea of Rogue as an addict is so intriguing.

3. So much beautiful language in this, it's going to be enormously difficult to narrow it down. Is there a character limit on reviews? I guess I'm about to find out.

a quiet that filled his ears like sun warmed wax

Rogue looked up at him, a slow and almost lazy sweep of her vision, down, away, and back again

was the tall glass her request, or did the bartender see something in her face, and deem it and her too delicate for a bottle?

she made a sound incredulous and aghast, like one who has been saved from drowning only to find a the rescue boat has sprung a leak, like discovering the character of a book she didn't like in one she did.

Her voice was a stack of unweighted pages in a sudden wind

Rogue set her glass down on the counter--carefully, as if there was some designated and important niche

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 06/12/2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Rose, Rose, Rose. The only thing I didn't like about this chapter was the Author's Note -- stop apologizing! Good fic is worth the wait. :-D

This chapter was amazing, so acutely heartbreaking, the connection and pain between Logan and Rogue that has been glimpsed in previous chapters so fully, starkly revealed. So many great lines in this, it would be ridiculous if I quoted them all, but I'll try to weed it down.

His voice was warm with the pleasure that came from denying Logan something, anything.

Dealt with quickly because Scott like to maintain the element of surprise, that grey and tense calm for as long as possible.

There was Scott, saying, "Enough. Enough, Logan," though not half so insistently as usual. The young team member who'd accompanied them, trying to look brave and and not to puke with an equal lack of success. A hand that reached out as if to restrain the bloodier, clawed one, but knew better than to actually do so.

Thin and distinct as a line of thread, cutting through all the space and material that separated Logan from it's source. A thought, no firmer than smoke. Intuition, that was considerably stronger. Realization, recognition of what should have been obvious.

(Yes, I'm cheating by quoting multiple lines as one. Wanna make something of it?)

All this he saw in a moment's forward shadow, that special breath of silence before the opening note of a song begins.

Jean was livid, enraged...but underneath, underneath ran a current of shame that the harshness of her voice could not hide.

...blinking in a way that spoke of glasses crushed somewhere in the room-...

She was curled in a ball, huddled against the forever motionless legs of friend--still warm, of course, because what felt like ages passing in this room had only been a span of minutes

During a mission Wolverine and Rogue end up of the bitter edge with one of them slipping.

Rated: NC-17
Categories: X-Men Origins Wolverine, X1, X2, X3
Characters: None
Genres: Drama
Tags: None
Warnings: None

Series: None
Chapters: 1
Wordcount: 593 - Hits: 3130
Complete?: Yes - Published: 03/02/2011 - Last Updated: 03/02/2011
Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 03/02/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Don't Let Go!

Um, yeah. MORE!!!!!! NOW!!!!

Author's Response: Ahh, hell! Now you\'ve awakened my Wolvie!Muse!

Jean's dead and gone, and Logan took off without saying goodbye to his X-Men--especially one in particular. But instead of Rogue pining over his absence, she eventually learns to move on with her life, and in time gains the affection of Scott, the Cyclops.
Logan returns and finds Rogue is a beautiful woman, young and in love with his former enemy. Will he be able to handle the possibility that his gorgeous, rebellious little Marie may not want him? Will Rogue get over her attraction to Logan once and for all, or will the powerful lust that dwells between them become too great to ignore, and she inevitably succumbs to it?

Rated: NC-17
Categories: X3
Characters: None
Genres: Adult
Tags: None
Warnings: Character Death

Series: None
Chapters: 2
Wordcount: 7572 - Hits: 4484
Complete?: No - Published: 03/08/2011 - Last Updated: 03/13/2011
Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 03/11/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Goodbye

I like it! The dialogue was good, both external and internal, and you weren't too heavy-handed with the internal dialogue. Still getting my bearings though...when you say, "Logan is nowhere to be found because he was the one who had to kill Jean at Alkali Lake," did you mean at Alcatraz? I thought at first that the first scene was just meant to be an "outtake" but fit in with the movies, but now I'm not sure what from X3 was meant to have happened or not, especially with Scott alive but Xavier dead. Maybe you'll clarify later, though. And I know you said to ignore spelling/grammar, but if you could add space between the paragraphs it would be *much* easier on the eyes!

Author's Response: first of all, lemme just say i NEED to get on your fanfic PRONTO. you have some juicy plots that i must discover :D \r\ni thought she was killed at Alkali Lake cos that\'s what i\'ve read from other fics and from sites, but i double-checked and you\'re right; she was killed at Alcatraz. i shall fix that, thank you :) \r\n\r\nand also, someone else mentioned the spacing and i can\'t figure out how to fix it manually, so i\'m gonna try to upload it from a document. i have a mac, so idk if that could be the problem? O.o eh, whatevs, i\'ll get on it. thanks for reviewing!!! <3

So on the old WR website there was a tab called Challenge, when you clicked on the page it would give you one situation and one object which you have to try and write a story about. See if you can guess before reading the answer at the end.

Rated: R
Categories: X3
Characters: None
Genres: Foof, Humor
Tags: None
Warnings: Not Beta Read, Not Spellchecked

Series: Challenge Generator
Chapters: 1
Wordcount: 1099 - Hits: 1655
Complete?: Yes - Published: 04/11/2011 - Last Updated: 04/11/2011
Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 04/11/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Logan shouldn't Eavesdrop

Okay, I know I can be picky about typos, but..."drinking a bear"? That one is just hilarious. Almost as funny as the fanfic where Logan had a "bugle" in his pants. ;-)

Author's Response: I though I had changed that, must Of been anOther part. Thanks for pointing it out, I\'ve fixed it

Post X3. Professor Xavier returns to the mansion. Tries to help, and be helped by, two people. About bodies, and how to live in them.

Rated: R
Categories: X3
Characters: None
Genres: None
Tags: None
Warnings: None

Series: None
Chapters: 2
Wordcount: 7085 - Hits: 2404
Complete?: No - Published: 05/07/2011 - Last Updated: 06/18/2011
Reviewer: doctorg Signed
Date: 05/07/2011 Title: Chapter 1: ONE

Haven't read the chapter yet, but I just wanted to tell you I'm so glad to see you writing new stuff! I've really enjoyed reading your other stuff. They left me with so many thoughts I know I composed a bunch of reviews in my head, don't know if I ever posted any of them. ;-) I know for sure I was up until 3 a.m. one night finishing the Anti-Romance Story!

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star
Date: 05/07/2011 Title: Chapter 1: ONE

Wow. You got Xavier's voice wonderfully right. And the brutal insight of his thoughts -- no illusions about what's going on or his place in it. Exactly what you would expect of both a brilliant thinker and a telepath.

Your description of his episodes of locked-in syndrome more or less are one of my deepest fears. I have sleep paralysis, where -- luckily *very* rarely -- I wake up from sleep but the muscle paralysis of REM doesn't switch off, so I'm awake but I can't move or speak. It's freakin' terrifying.

So, favorite lines:
Xavier thinks of the girl—can it only have been three years ago—escorted into the mansion on Scott’s arm, coat damp with melted snow, twitching like a wild cat, speaking only to give her fake name, and to ask where Logan had been taken.
[In all the Rogan fic I've read, somehow I've never read a description of Rogue coming to the mansion -- or at least a memorable one -- and this one was spot on]

Or during the day, between one blink and the next, he suddenly loses hold of himself; he can feel himself slipping out of his flesh like jelly, or can feel the body unfastening from him, can see the skin of his skin dissolving into powder.

“Very good,” he says, then curses himself for sounding like a third-rate butler.

He wishes he were like Jean, able to move himself with his mind, instead of being trapped like an infant within this dumb husk—

—focus, Charles, Christ, get it together, man, the hand, the hand, this is your hand now, get it, back, back—

What had he meant when he had said to Logan, Least of all to you? “I don’t have to explain myself, least of all to you.” Why least of all to Logan?

Author's Response: I am so sorry for apologizing late to this wonderful comment!! Thank you for the comments about Anti-Romance Story, I\'m honored you sacrificed your sleep for it. And I get sleep paralysis, too. It\'s SO TERRIFYING. I love Xavier, and what you very aptly call his \"brutal insight\"; particularly the brutal part. He\'s just fascinating. And he\'s always ended up forming very interesting triangles in various relationships in the series; especially Jean/Scott, Jean/Magneto, Rogue/Logan.