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[Report This]Date: 03/28/2007 6:11:55 AM Title: Chapter 12: And So the Story Goes...
Loved it hun! Jamie was so cute...she reminds me of some of the little girls I work with, very clever :)
Date: 02/11/2007 11:38:53 PM Title: Chapter 12: And So the Story Goes...
“She asked for a pony last Christmas, do you think I bought it for her?! God, I bust my ass on a daily basis for lousy tips… I can’t afford to get Jamie expensive toys, but I do with what I got. Now you mosey on in like some kind of year round Santa and give in to her fantasy. I worked hard to teach my daughter the value of things that money can’t buy… you’re ruining that. Stop trying to buy her… she needs a father, not an ATM machine!”
Hehe - genius. I love your Rogue. Very articulate. Strong. Not willing to take crap. And also, sometimes, wrong.
This was my favorite Marie moment:
“Are you lying again?”
“… Yes.”
That's so wonderful! I really dig that self-deprecating, humorous honesty. Heh. Oh, and if only Logan were to hear, I'm sure he'd fall in love, too.
Sweet at the end. I'm glad they made a go of it. I'm not entirely certain it was love that drew them together. In fact, I'm pretty sure it wasn't. But I can funnily enough see it working anyway - see the love developing because they both want family and stability and love so badly. Because they're both survivors, honest, compromising, and willing to work hard. They're both willing to listen, as evidenced in their second make-up conversation, and they're both open to love, too.
So...*hugs them*...this was rather wonderful. So glad it ended well, after you were so mean to them at first. :)
Date: 02/11/2007 11:31:42 PM Title: Chapter 11: Logan's Hope
“I get to have both?… That means I’m lucky right?”
Children are so wise sometimes. And then not, too. *lol* I love the way you write Jamie - oblivious and selfish and a bit of a babbler. Like a lot of children I know. Takes it all in stride as the parents fall apart a bit. Yup - that's what happens.
"How she looked, the way her hair stuck up in certain places, her scent, how small her fingers were.
Logan wanted to remember it all.
He wanted to remember just in case it was all a hideously cruel dream.
At least that way, he’d have a very developed figment of his imagination to work with; something he could at least pretend was his. "
Great ending to the chapter. It's the small details that make it powerful - the "hair stuck up in right places", the smallness of her fingers.
And it's much more real and moving that Logan is still processing this. He's not thinking of the future. He's not thinking of how much past he missed. He's thinking that this moment must be the moment that he remembers every part of. And I think his fixation on pretending, on what's *his*, shows that this fic is really a journey about Logan losing himself. He doesn't really know who he is. He's lost it. He doesn't believe good things happen to him. And he's been pretending, even after his escape, that it's alright.
New possibilities. Eager to see what happens next.
(Oh, and by the way!, I love the way you deal with plot so pithily. *admiration*)
[Report This]Date: 02/05/2007 5:54:15 AM Title: Chapter 12: And So the Story Goes...
“I have to go to the bafroom.”
Oh my *ROFLAMO*
Really good ending!
(“Is it okay if I Jamie now? I mean, if you’re busy of something I could-”
Is there a word missing?
I know now why I find the typos... when there is only one in a chapter I notice it, if there are many I don't see them.)
Author's Response: the word is "see".
there are more typos that i have to fix... i noticed, but the heat's out in my place and the computer is connected next to a drafty/broken window. Hence me not wanting to spend a lot of time at my keyboard last night.
anyway thanks for noticing and i'll get to making the changes.
P.S. You've given me the most reviews... you rock!
[Report This]Date: 02/04/2007 4:17:44 AM Title: Chapter 11: Logan's Hope
Awww cute chapter - next one please ^-^
Date: 02/03/2007 8:45:46 PM Title: Chapter 11: Logan's Hope
Aw, so cute. *sniffles*
Date: 02/03/2007 4:02:10 PM Title: Chapter 8: Introducing Jamie...
Lovely tension in this chapter. The thud of the 'TAP', the tension as Logan realized what no one else did, the ordinariness of the actual dialogue compared to what was going on inside.
I'm hooked. Can't wait to find out what happens next.
Date: 02/03/2007 3:59:27 PM Title: Chapter 6: Tying Up Loose Ends
Your plots move along quickly. I like the way we're getting motivations behind the actions, too. Makes the story much richer.
Date: 02/03/2007 3:57:15 PM Title: Chapter 5: The End of Corruption... Finally
What a twist! It's incredibly hard for me to write dialogue. And I think a story that is written almost entirely in dialogue is even more difficult. You're pulling it off. Congratulations!
But WHERE are my favorite mutants?
Date: 02/03/2007 4:01:32 AM Title: Chapter 10: Shock, Figuring Things Out and Proper Introductions
Neither knew of an easy way to break the news to Jamie and of coarse it would have to be soon, what with her early inquiries about not having a father and Logan’s eagerness for a proper introduction to his progeny.
I found a typo, there is 'of coarse' instead of 'of course' - that I saw it is a miracle ;)
Gonna delete this later.
Author's Response: I'm not gonna delete your comment. I'm gonna fix the typo, thanks for pointing it out... I always have problems with words that sound the same.
[Report This]Date: 02/03/2007 3:49:26 AM Title: Chapter 10: Shock, Figuring Things Out and Proper Introductions
*runs around looking for the next chapter*
Evil, such an evil cliffhanger!
Author's Response: sorry, it wasn't meant to be... I just didn't have enough to say after that. It seemed like as good a place as any to stop.
[Report This]Date: 02/02/2007 8:52:30 AM Title: Chapter 9: A Father's Destiny
Awww she is so cute.
[Report This]Date: 02/01/2007 3:54:48 AM Title: Chapter 8: Introducing Jamie...
Ok now we know who is boss *giggles*
[Report This]Date: 01/31/2007 3:53:51 AM Title: Chapter 7: Knots, Fire Hazards and New Starts
HOW DARE YOU! i was all settled in for a nice story, and then it just stopped! #sniffles and pouts#
Author's Response: sorry about that, but it's not done (as listed). there will be more and lately i've been updating frequently so no worries, i would so not leave my readers hanging as an ending.
[Report This]Date: 01/30/2007 4:34:13 AM Title: Chapter 7: Knots, Fire Hazards and New Starts
Awwww a tiny girly version of Logan, must be a handful but adorable.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Date: 01/29/2007 9:49:15 PM Title: Chapter 7: Knots, Fire Hazards and New Starts
Wow. Spring must be in the air. Is it just me or have baby fic's been running rampt lately? I'm not sure this Logan can handle it, though. He seems...slightly unstable. But it's very interesting for him to meet Marie this way.
Author's Response: I love babyfic... the little x-kids are so cute ;) Have you ever seen how the artists draw them in the comics? And Logan's just finding his way... he's not ready, but then again he's not the type of guy that abandons his own either.
[Report This]Date: 01/27/2007 4:27:13 AM Title: Chapter 6: Tying Up Loose Ends
So where is the next chapter?
Author's Response: if you're talking about my group message, that was bouncing or something, so it may have got there later... hence no new chapter. If that's not what you're talking about then I'm working on it. Probably by tonight or tomorrow. Thanks for asking and liking the story so much :)
[Report This]Date: 01/25/2007 1:19:21 PM Title: Chapter 5: The End of Corruption... Finally
OMG that was funny! I was literally laughing out loud when I read his speech! Great reveal. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks, I have my years of bullshitting on research papers to thank for that speech... the words just came to me.
[Report This]Date: 01/25/2007 3:58:08 AM Title: Chapter 5: The End of Corruption... Finally
Good, good, good I'd really like to see the shocked face of David.
[Report This]Date: 01/24/2007 3:47:37 AM Title: Chapter 4: The End of Corruption... Almost
Can't wait to find out where you're taking this.
more please
[Report This]Date: 01/24/2007 1:21:23 AM Title: Chapter 4: The End of Corruption... Almost
Ok I am finding this writing style a little confusing. the story is interesting but i would love a little more detail.
[Report This]Date: 01/23/2007 7:36:41 PM Title: Chapter 3: Baltrium to the Rescue
Yay Logan got away!!!! interesting story! update soon!