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Date: 12/02/2011 1:15:48 PM Title: The Message
Sorry, real life has sucked lately so I have been incredibly late with posting my reviews. I've been avidly reading just not avidly reviewing.
This was a great follow up to the last chapter. I love how connected Logan and Marie are to each other. It was great seeing Logan and Marie share a sweet quiet moment before having to deal with Shaw's latest gambit.
Speaking of Shaw's gambit, that was really well done and unexpected. His treatment of Bonny and Melinda was shocking and very much in keeping with his character. You did a great job in showing that he is dangerous, pure evil and someone who can and will carry out his threats. You really delivered a threat that was malevolent and believable too.
On a side note, I really liked how you subtly referenced Logan's history with Japan when you threw in the Japanese word for beast. Really nice touch there.
Author's Response: Aw, it's so sweet of you to come back and review! So sorry that RL is sucking for you. I'm glad you liked this chapter, and that you thought Shaw's gambit was believable. It seemed a little supervillain-y to me, but...oh well, he kinda is one! I'm glad you liked the Japanese term too -- thank you, Google!
Date: 11/20/2011 10:57:30 PM Title: The Message
Okay, once again I immediately clicked "Next". But then I saw your admonition and felt guilty (thanks, Mom, for raising me with Catholic guilt...) and had to return. Ugh, Shaw. What an ass. I really hope that Rogue is the one who takes him out.
Author's Response: Thanks, Ebony's mom! I'll take guilt-fueled reviews. ;-) Yeah, Shaw is quite a jerk. Hope you found his demise satisfying. I expected to have Rogue kill him with glee, but when it came down to it it just didn't seem in character for her to do so. Oh well, he still bit it.
[Report This]Date: 11/14/2011 9:15:57 PM Title: The Message
Tonight seems like a wonderful night to sit back with a glass of wine, forget about the 3.4 trillion looming deadlines I'm supposed to meet, and finally catch up a little bit on this story. *happy sigh*
I'm always amazed by how lush and vivid your imagery is. Really, the word choice, the details you choose to include, even the tone in which it's written just combine to create such a realistic scene. The opening few paragraphs of this chapter, especially, just kind of left me awestruck. It's a gift, really, to be able to write so prettily without it coming off overdone or purple-prosy. I don't understand how you do it!
She pulled back a little with a gasp, the tingle of her mutation sending a delicious shiver up his spine. He tightened his arms around her, pulling her up against his skin again. “Easy, darlin’.”
This was probably my favorite line. So cute!
Uhhh.... and then the rest of the chapter. Not so cute. Poor horsey. Poor Melinda :(. Ugh, Shaw is just despicable (no offense, Kevin Bacon. I love you.)! I can't wait to see how they take him down.
Author's Response: Aw, you're such a lovely reviewer...so I'm not going to nag you to put down that glass of wine and get to work on The Private Dance and Feral...even though I really want to. ;-) I'm glad you liked this chapter...I did worry that I was getting too overblown with my description. I just kept adding more adjectives every time I read it over again. I'm glad you liked that line...it seemed a little like Logan to develop a bit of a fetish around Marie's skin. Yeah, Shaw is pretty bad. Poor Bonny indeed, and poor Melinda.
Date: 10/30/2011 9:39:59 AM Title: The Message
I hate to say this, but if I were the one extracting vengeance, I'd do worse to Shaw for killing the horse than the girl. I cannot wait to see what end you have in store for He-Who-Needs-Killing-Worse-Than-All-Other-X-Villians-Combined. I also loved the image of Logan swinging constantly between joy and panic. I remember walking that razor's edge all the time when my kids were little and just learning to walk. Still, I suspect neither Logan or I would trade it for the world. --Wendie
Author's Response: Yeah, for some reason poor braw Bonny was much harder to kill off than Melinda. Probably because Melinda put her damn hands on our Logan, and must be punished! I think you're very accurate, in that Logan is kind of coming off a decade of numb self-involvement -- even having friends was so new to him, so having an actual loved one to care about and fear for is frankly terrifying in its newness. It probably doesn't help that Marie is throwing herself into harm's way every chance she gets. But hopefully he will realize in the end that the reward is worth the price as well.
Date: 10/29/2011 2:31:51 AM Title: The Message
Um...HOLY CRAP!!! I don't know that I could have handled a chapter bigger than this one if it stayed that intense through out. The reactions of the team are going to be interesting.
I love the descriptive language in this chapter. Great work.
Author's Response: Thanks! It's funny, I kept reading the first part over and over before I posted, and every time I did I added more adjectives. By the time I read it over the final time I'm like, "Wow, I shoved like five adjectives into every sentence!" I was worried it would be really distracting, so "descriptive" is an awesome compliment. Thanks again for the review!
Date: 10/28/2011 10:28:30 PM Title: The Message
"it was like having another heart, beating outside his body, exposed and vulnerable."
What a fantastic line. Can't wait for the next chapter. The suspense is great.
Author's Response: Aw, so glad you liked that. Ages ago when I was in high school I read all the James Bond novels, and Bond said something about how having a woman tagging along with you was like having to protect another heart. He was all irritated about it, but It really stuck with me, so I "stole" it a little. I think Wolverine has (with good reason) never much reason to worry for himself, so having to worry for someone else must be a new and terrifying experience.