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Reviewer: Anami Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/05/2011 5:25:49 PM Title: Chapter 2

But if she is with Victor how can she end up with Logan? Without too much dead bodies around i mean. Oh you little plot maker. Noe I'm hooked.

Author's Response: im going to make so many twists and turns. im writing the next chapter now and trust me, you going to love it. there will be more info on Victor and Rogue and Logan and her are going to start to talk and hit it off. its gonna b greatrn

Reviewer: serafim Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/05/2011 2:29:06 AM Title: Chapter 2

hmmm, wonder how its going to work out, having Victor in the mansion.

Author's Response: its going to be chaotic and u will just have to wait and see

Reviewer: Dita Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/04/2011 11:36:46 PM Title: Chapter 2

I think you have an interesting twist using Victor in the original protector role, and I'm interested to see where this story goes.

I am however having a hard time following your story because you have a tendency to use 'him' and 'he' instead of names... you need to put more name tags with your descriptions or they won't make sense to an outside reader (or they will make sense, but I have to read it over several times to get it). It can be really hard to follow who is who... and then as a reader I lose focus. :(

Hope to see more! I don't want to discourage you! I always hate giving critical feedback, but it will improve your writing a lot. And if you are posting stories...I assume you love writing, and it's always good to improve our skills. :) You have a good plot going, so good luck!!

Author's Response: thanks for telling me. im going to go back through it and keep that in mindrn

Reviewer: jnet Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/04/2011 8:40:10 PM Title: Chapter 2

Hmmm I'm not sure yet if I'm liking the direction this is going yet or not, but I'm definately intrigued and looking forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: Wytchling Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/04/2011 7:23:48 PM Title: Chapter 2

Very interesting. It feels a bit rushed though. The pacing is a little off

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/04/2011 11:33:43 AM Title: Chapter 2

I think I want to see where you take this. It will be interesting to see where the lines get drawn between 'relationship' and 'companionship' for all involved. --Wendie

Reviewer: lilmizz3vil Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 06/04/2011 9:55:36 AM Title: Chapter 2

oooooh!!! i smell trouble xXx

Reviewer: White Dove Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/04/2011 1:44:28 AM Title: Chapter 2

Ok, now this is interesting. what an fascinating story so far. I love how you are writing Rogue, Logan and Victor. Please, continue and update often

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