Hmm. The bare bones of the plotline have some interest to them, but I'm sorry to say that the characterizations don't ring true to me at all. Nor does the dialogue; when I read your dialogue, I just don't hear the movieverse actors speaking in the least. Finally, I would highly suggest that you find a beta reader. I know your story has the warning, but the very large number of typos and misused words (there/their/they're) is quite distracting.

Author's Response: To Baybelletrist,rnThank you for reviewing to let me know what your thoughs are about my story. You have given me something to think about as I reread over the piece. I'm sorry to hear the story is not to your taste. Thank you for at least giving it a chance. I'd also like to thank you for bring the typos to my attention. I am going to try, and be more careful in the future.

Oooooooh, who is the father??? And how could Logan chose Jean?? And...Oh, too many questions buzzing in my head to think clearly. So I count on you to answer them without asking (evil snicker). Pray continue.