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[Report This]Date: 02/13/2011 9:22:38 AM Title: Chapter 3
Aargh! I'm going to be stalking this site for your next chapter! So much of this was great, but I especially loved this description:
His mouth pulled into a too-thin line, and jaw ticking every few seconds. His fingers twitching around a cigar that isn't there. She sees his eyes darken, and his nostrils flare. His gaze scanning her quickly, before it flickers towards the exit, like he's got somewhere else he'd rather be. Like he's just waiting for her to give, for her will to bend to his, so that he can get a move on.
Author's Response: Hehe! I'm actively working on the next two chapters, so hopefully you won't have TOO long of a wait until the next one is up. As for that section that you pointed out: THANK YOU! I fussed with that one a little bit, just trying to get the right emotions to come across, so to know that it stuck out for you is awesome :-D I'm REALLY glad that you are liking this!! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!!! (My apologies for my abuse of the exclamation point in these responses ;-P)
Date: 02/07/2011 6:26:39 AM Title: Chapter 3
Am actually loving the two stories running together here, maybe because you’ve made it easy on us, it’s not too complicated with the first half/second half theme to your chapters! It’s working really well. Have to say that chapter 2 seemed lacking in something compared to the prologue and chapter 1 - personally too much repeat wording that didn’t work for me in first 3 paras of after: day 5, other than that I’m not sure what it was and I’m really not helping because I can’t put my finger on it! That is not to say that it wasn’t good because it definitely was, it just seemed a little ‘less’ than the other two! However, chapter 3 was right back kicking and screaming greatness – bring on the next instalment I’m definitely hooked on this. Well done x
Author's Response: "Am actually loving the two stories running together here, maybe because you’ve made it easy on us, it’s not too complicated with the first half/second half theme to your chapters! It’s working really well." *wipes brow* You have NO IDEA how good that is to hear. I keep wondering if the format might be throwing people off, and maybe it is to a point, but to know that at least some of you lovely folks think it is working is a real load off. So, THANK YOU for that. "Have to say that chapter 2 seemed lacking in something compared to the prologue and chapter 1 - personally too much repeat wording that didn’t work for me in first 3 paras of after: day 5" I'm sorry for that. I really am. I was very much trying to convey the kind of rut that life seems like to Rogue. How it's just a case of going through the motions for her at that point, and that she really doesn't want to bother with it at all. Maybe I went overboard with my attempt to make the reader feel that way though, so, my apologies for that! Glad that this chapter came back "kicking and screaming" for you though!! That is a wonderful compliment. I will certainly try to maintain that level of momentum in the next parts. (I've said it before, and I will say it again, thank you for taking the time to read and comment, it means a lot to me.)
Date: 02/06/2011 11:56:41 PM Title: Chapter 3
Waaaaii!!!! I want to know more!
Loving how this is going to far! I love damaged Rogue fics!
~Anji
Author's Response: More to come, promise! Thrilled that you like, and that I am feeding your damaged-Rogue-fic needs :-D Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!!!
Date: 02/06/2011 9:10:15 PM Title: Chapter 3
First- I hope you are feeling better.
Second- My gosh, how I loved that they finally kissed. Simply just too emotional NOT to. (swoon)
Third- Amazing chapter. I adore this story.
Author's Response: First - Aww, thanks! Slow recovering, but it IS happening. The nice thoughts are appreciated :-D Second - Yay!! Glad the scene worked for, I figure we are about half-way through the story, so a kiss was in order ;-P Third - THANK YOU!! I'm so happy you are enjoying it so far.
[Report This]Date: 02/06/2011 9:09:23 PM Title: Chapter 3
This is really good. I love the structure you're using, with its back-and-forth through time. It parallels Rogue's mental state and also builds suspense very well.
Author's Response: THANK YOU! I'm glad that the structure is working for you, and not coming off as a distraction. I was hoping it would work exactly as you are saying it is, so that makes me insanely happy to hear!