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Reviewer: JaqofSpades Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2011 11:19:14 PM Title: Chapter 9

Is that meant to be cliffhangery? Because it sure feels cliffhangery. Like Rogue's hanging off a cliff - right *there*. But maybe its not a bad thing, Rogue! Maybe you just need to JUMP. Have a fabulous break ...

Author's Response: No, not meant to be cliffhangery. The only cliffhanger I think I've written in this is the stairs scene. For this chapter, Marie's parting shot was just that - the end of their conversation. She really has no insight on this situation beyond what she just told Logan at that point. Maybe some theories, but nothing concrete to go on. I think she also wanted to let him know, in an underhanded kind of way, that he has a part to play in all of this - him, Scott, Jean, & Carol. That's something that I'll be going back to. (& thanks, my break - while disappointingly free of feral mountain men, was nice!)

Reviewer: hobbitsdoitbetter Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2011 6:10:09 PM Title: Chapter 9

hey hun, loved this. as always i enjoy how human and sympethetic your marie is, even when she's kind of being a brat. can't wait to find out what carol's up to as well... hint, hint...

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you! *Bounces* You have no idea how happy it makes me that you're digging my version of Marie & don't want to smack the brat out of her. Sometimes I don't know if she's coming off as too annoying & childish. Then again, I can't exactly force some poorly contrived maturity onto her at this point with no explanation. She'll slowly get there....I hope.

Reviewer: Sidfictishous Signed star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2011 3:25:18 PM Title: Chapter 9

Great addition I like the depth of the conversation and can't wait to actually find out what 'Blonde' wanted/wants from Marie and by golly just how they handle the head case problem.

Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you're a patient person because a big reveal isn't happening anytime soon. Bits & pieces of what's going on will be leaked out as slowly as the relationship will build between Marie & Logan. It's not so much wanting to drag everyone along - I don't want rabid Rogan fans at my door with torches & pitchforks - I just can't reconcile a rapid, full force relationship between these two or just dump a crap pile of exposition in one go. I've actually written something along those lines & had to scrap it. It was crap. Even the plot bunnies wouldn't go near it.

Reviewer: DarkDragonfly Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2011 2:43:06 PM Title: Chapter 1

Do you know how much I love your updates??

I love them so much that every time you post a new chapter I go back and reread the one before it first so I can make it last longer...thats how much I love this fic.

Author's Response: Do you know how much I love reviews? I do. Love them. I *live* off of them. So tasty and fat free! Aww, I love that you reread. Makes me feel like an ass for not updating for so long. I'm working on rectifying that. Don't know how just yet, but reviews like this motivate me. Thanks!

Reviewer: Melancholy Rogue Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2011 2:22:50 PM Title: Chapter 9

Very nice chapter. I loved the little "you going crazy again?", "you lurking in the dark again?" lines. :)

Author's Response: I love banter. I just wish I was as good at it as hobbitsdoitbetter. She needs to teach a class on Witty Rogan Banter. Until then, I'll keep trying my hand at it ;)

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2011 1:28:47 PM Title: Chapter 9

Oh, hey, Rogue! Where've you been? I've missed that sass.

I like it that she's finally speaking up for herself in a way that doesn't involve tantrums (even if the one from Chapter 7 was completely understandable).

Author's Response: For real! I find that I can't have a completely down & out Rogue. Sure I like to indulge in those fits of self-pity for her, but I can't completely give up the sass, which becomes a hard balancing act. Also, writing Sassy!Rogue without going into tantrum category can be a fine line to tread. To Logan, I think his tolerance for any kind of sass falls into tantrum category right off the bat. The more time he spends around Marie, I think the more he'll learn to see it as her having a backbone and not being a brat....she'll still have her bratty moments though. Don't we all?

Reviewer: doctorg Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2011 1:16:11 PM Title: Chapter 9

Out of town and on my phone so I can't c&p my favorite lines, but another great chapter and a very subtle and believable shift in the relationship between Rogue and Logan from animosity to irritation to understanding. Have a great break, and find that fanfic-lovin' mountain man with wifi!

Author's Response: You're still a better person than I am - I went out of town & dropped off the grid for the most part. Hence getting to all of these lovely reviews a *week* later. I'm a bit ashamed. I'm glad you're seeing subtlety in their relationship & hoping you like it (pretty please!). I know a slow build isn't everyone's cup of tea. On a sadder note, I did not find any feral mountain men in my wilderness exploration :(

Reviewer: litlen Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/09/2011 8:57:24 AM Title: Chapter 8

I love the visuals you give the reader - ‘She’s close enough to see that the fourth button on his red plaid shirt is going to need reinforcing.’ We were there, in the shower, being towered over and seeing that damn fourth button straining!! It’s the little things that keep me happy ;)
I also love the little extra’s, the ones that appear out of nowhere – ‘she realizes she hasn’t had so much as a single thought about the Wolverine killing her all day’
‘is filled with nothing but homicidal tendencies’ exactly how I’d feel, not at getting up early cause I do that every day but at the meditating part!
Oh and loved the way you wrote Rogue's confusion ‘when she – uh, Mystique – was holding me to her – to…to Carol –‘ etc. so to sum up I basically loved it all – good job!

I’ve still got questions but hey ho – today I’m chilled so take your time, I’m sure I’ll find out soon enough! [make the most of it - next week I’ll be back to pleading for updates!!]

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm finding that I'm having a bit of a hard time writing really visual scenes & mixing in the exposition needed in dialogue sometimes, so I'm glad this turned out okay. Very appreciative of your level of chill. I hope my next update can catch you at another chill time because I think the next few chapters are Rogan-Lite. *ducks for cover*. I promise to amp things up after some much needed exposition! Promise! Hey, lookie...LOOK! Logan will even be shirtless! GLORIOUSLY SHIRTLESS! No! Put that chair down! How am I supposed to write if you hit me with it?!?!

Reviewer: RoseSumner Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/06/2011 9:51:02 AM Title: Chapter 8

Okay, I'm not going to lie.... I would totally be late on purpose for that meeting-in-the-garden. Mmmmmh....Punishing Logan.

I read this last night, but sleep deprivation kept me from reviewing--am surprised I was capable of such wise decision making. You might have logged on to find a review consisting of nothing but: "gleeeba libd cupcaaadfjljf rahr squeeee......"(

Author's Response: Thanks for emailing me the rest of your review. Jean's ghost can go re-drown herself instead of screwing with our posts. I agree with you though, I'd be hiding behind the petunias & chanting "take it off, take it off" like the perv that I am. Don't you worry, I just wrote some more shirtlessness, reflecting my overwhelming shamelessness. :D

Reviewer: DarkDragonfly Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 10:19:08 PM Title: Chapter 1

I literally started squealing and bouncing in my chair when I saw your update and lady, you did not disappoint.

I'm once again floored at the level of detail you are able to pour into your words...so amazing...and screw spring break..I will duct tape your wrists to the keyboard if I have to in order to get another chapter!!

Author's Response: Squealing & bouncing is what I do when I get awesome reviews like this. Duct tape my wrists, huh? Uh...well, I'll see what I can do so that doesn't happen.

Reviewer: jnet Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 9:48:30 PM Title: Chapter 8

Just read this for the first time tonite. I'm enjoying it very much and hope to see more soon. You said you have 12 chapters written, but I'm only seeing 8 on here. Get with the posting darn it! :)

Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad to have you on board! More will definitely be coming soon. I'm hoping to get one more chapter posted before I leave for spring break. As much as I want to feed you lovely reviewers with Rogan goodness, I desperately need the epic amounts of time I take to write. Having a few chapters stocked up helps with the pressure & let's me go back & make changes with fresh eyes.

Reviewer: Capt_Mackenzie Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 8:51:40 PM Title: Chapter 8

hee hee hee! The opening scene with Logan was seriously fun. It took me by surprise but, by the scene's end, I was wondering why I was surprised: it's such a typical Logan thing to do, really. Someone's in the middle of a temper tantrum? --Shock them back into a saner perspective!

Cute "thinking cap" visualization. I'd never thought of that, but it's true.

I'd love to see where you're going to take this concept from "A Study in Scarlet". It sounds like it's going to play an important part in the plot, farther down the road.

Author's Response: Yes! You have no idea how happy the "typical Logan" part of your review made me. I can only hope that I can capture Logan in my writing. He, like most of the X-Characters, has his quirks, but showing that in original print without falling back on a caricature is hard. And yes, the Wolverine does not do temper tantrums. And double yes, Marie is a fan of throwing them. I love the quote I found & used in Chapter 5 from A Study in Scarlet and I'm trying my best to work it in as well as I want to.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 8:05:24 PM Title: Chapter 8

Love this:
Her poorly timed thoughts remind her that it’s the furthest she’s ever gotten with a guy.
Great chapter. The shower scene with Wolverine didn't quite live up to the potential there (kidding, of course) but I appreciate the slow build. Can I hope that you find your mountain man *and* he's a fanfic fan and encourages you to write more, and faster? They get wifi in the Columbia River Gorge, right?

Author's Response: Ah yes, her thoughts don't really help her out where Logan's concerned. That'll be happening more & more since scientific studies show that increased exposure to the Smexiness that is the Wolverine is correlated to decreased cognitive functioning. Wait, you're a Dr., you already know this! I know, I know - there's an X-Rated version of that shower scene playing out in some dirty corner of my mind with a "bow chicka bow wow" soundtrack. Hey, you keep hoping & maybe I'll find that mountain man - I *have* thought about that. And yes, my hotel has WiFi ;)

Reviewer: tamisnead Signed star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 7:54:48 PM Title: Chapter 8

Still really enjoying this story, I can't wait to see how Wolverine and Rogue interact next.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really glad you're still along for the ride! Don't throw something at me, but the next few chapters might be Rogan-Lite. There's some other things I need to take care of & explore, but after that they go toe to toe more & more. Just hang in there! Please!!

Reviewer: Melancholy Rogue Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 7:35:05 PM Title: Chapter 8

Aww, what a great chapter. I loved Logan and the little shower scene. And, I could just see him in Ro's garden. Tease indeed. ;)

Be safe on your trip! :)

Author's Response: I've been dying to get this shower scene to you guys & see what you all think. Granted, there's a whole 'nother shower scene playing out in the gutter of my mind....but that's not this story ;)

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 6:35:09 PM Title: Chapter 8

I like it. It's such a turning point for Rogue; until now she's been reacting rather than acting, just the way I imagine she would. This chapter is the first one where she's trying to really assert control over her own life. I like heroines with agency. :)

Author's Response: Yeah, she's been a bit of a brat. Who better than the Wolverine to put her in her place? She's treading a fine line between standing up for herself/making sure she doesn't get screwed over & ....well, being a brat.

Reviewer: Sidfictishous Signed star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 6:17:20 PM Title: Chapter 8

Great addition and I love the way this played out. Humor and angst...Is always a nice combo.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm never sure if I can balance the two.

Reviewer: skybound2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/26/2011 10:51:23 PM Title: Chapter 7

*feeds the monster* I LOVE the way that you describe Rogue's break in the kitchen, and the awkwardness beforehand between her and Scott. They both feed into her blow at the Professor near the end perfectly. You can really FEEL her frustration with the situation, and the tension between them all is perfect. Awesome update!!

Author's Response: Oh thank you! I was just about to go to sleep when he came out looking for new reviews! Phew, that was a close one. I might have to start sacrificing people in between reviews & updates :O I'm really, really happy that you liked that scene - I was unsure about it. Expect more tension - I'll try to balance it out with some smexiness. Logan's long overdue for a shirtless scene...

Reviewer: Anami Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/26/2011 4:45:20 PM Title: Chapter 7

Did I mention how much I DON'T like Jean? And Rogue with the attitude is a Rogue I like. Wolvie, do wake up.

Author's Response: Who DOES like Jean?No one here, that's for sure. I don't want a needlessly bitchy Jean in this, but I'm not going to be kind to her either. Trust me, Wolvie's awake....Marie? Not so much...

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 02/24/2011 2:01:33 AM Title: Chapter 7

Oh, now that's just mean. Mean. With a cliffhanger like that, it's no soup, er, Hugh for you!

(pleasewritemoresoonthankyou)

Author's Response: I know. I'm a terrible person, but please, please don't withhold the Hugh! I'll start going through withdrawal symptoms. Honest to goodness tremors & tweaking. How can I write the rest of this story like that?

Reviewer: RoseSumner Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 02/23/2011 8:12:54 PM Title: Chapter 7

Alright, so I was prepared to tell you how much this chapter rocked, that it might be my third favorite (you just can't beat those first two, you just can't)chappie of all time. I was ready to present a list of all the reasons this was worth my happy-scream when I saw the update, provide the evidence of your awesomeness via easy-to-find-but-not-so-easy-to-choose quotes--until I reached the last line. No. No. NO. >stamps foot< Ar you kidding me? Are you kidding me?? You can't leave it there. You just can't. You can't. It's...it's illegal. See that sign Sahara? This is a no smexy cliffhanger zone..And I...I forbid you. Yeah, that's right. I. Forbid. You.

>crosses arms, stares down, lips wobbling faintly

Author's Response: *Tosses candy at you*. Hey! You! Fine, fine don't look my way. No, not even if I have a nearly nekkid Wolvie on a leash. Oh now you're interested? SYKE! That's what you get. Yeah, looks like we're going to descend into a passive-aggressive writer-reviewer situation....okay, okay really we can work this out. I promise - no, hear me out - I promise to make it up to you. Honest To Abs. Just - just stick around for a bit, okay? You know I've got some good scenes planned up ahead! Who's the one who bombards you with Abtastic pictures? That's right.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 02/23/2011 7:53:31 PM Title: Chapter 7

Ack! Cliffhanger much? Was that a Carol-attack or a Wolvie-attack? Loved this chapter, especially the idea of l'il ol' Marie shooing Wolverine away from her. Keep writing!

Author's Response: Just a bit of a cliffhanger. More of a "stairhanger"? Har, har. Maybe it was a ninja attack? Wild packs of Peruvian dogs? Anything is possible! They are mine to play with! Muahaha...right. Ahem. Not to rub salt in the stairhanger wounds, but if you love the Rogan sass in this, then get amped for the next chapter! :D

Reviewer: Sidfictishous Signed star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 02/23/2011 7:16:56 PM Title: Chapter 1

okay...Wierdness...I reviewed earlier but it didn't take. I love this and I like the differences you have brought to this version of the characters. Love this story and waiting impatiently for more.

Author's Response: Weirdness is that I completely missed this review! Please don't smack me, I have no idea how I didn't see this. I'm going to stick with RoseSumner's theory that the ghost of Jean haunts this sight & screws with our ability to post things. I hope you'll stick around & that you like where this is going!

Reviewer: hobbitsdoitbetter Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/23/2011 4:40:09 PM Title: Chapter 7

hey hun, really loved the current chapter- it's nicely paced, i love the dialogue and i really want to know what's going on. like that you're taking time with your set up too. and i've said it before but i'll say it again: i love your version of professor xavier. hobbits away, hey!

Author's Response: *Bounces*. Yay, I'm glad you like the pacing. That's something that I'm constantly worried about (second to tense - I've kind of put that one to bed...with a little Benadryl help). You love my Xavier? *Bounces even more*, *tosses candy at you & hope I don't hit your eye*. I promise he will never delve into Evil!Xavier, but I'm more than willing to lay his humanity, faults & all on the table. Ye be warned.

Reviewer: Capt_Mackenzie Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 02/23/2011 12:09:08 PM Title: Chapter 7

My bet is that's Wolvie tumbling her down the steps, not Carol. Although Jubesie might do it, too.

I loved her temper tantrum! It's about time she stands up for herself! Everything about that kitchen scene was a lot of fun.

Author's Response: Hmmm, we shall see. Maybe it's the Ghost of Christmas Past? No? You're not buying that theory? Not even a little? Okay, you're right, it's the Ghost of Christmas Future (Christmas to Come? Screw it - I hate that story). Yeah, MarieMuse has been itching for a tantrum. In fact, prepare yourself for more tantruming. Yes, I just made up a verb.

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