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Reviewer: DarkDragonfly Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 07/11/2011 8:25:49 PM Title: Chapter 1

I feel like a jerk for prodding you for an update :( Had know idea what you were going through and Im so sorry.

However, I am super excited your back and was so fucking stoked to see this update that I paused my new episode of Trueblood (SOOOOKIE, BEEEEEL) just to read this and was not disappointed.

Hope your real life gets back on track and I will be first to sign that petition..seriously..

Author's Response: Oh don't. I feel like a jerk for not updating when I've had these next few chapters sitting on my hard drive. I just haven't gone back to them with everything that's happened & then my beta got busy. Nothing really tangible keeping me from updating though. It's hard to explain. I don't deserve those of you who've stuck around, but I am beyond thrilled that you're here! And I'm bowled over that you paused True Blood for this!!!!! Really! I can't promise the same for anyone else here. I heart me some True Blood bad. Although I'm Team Eric...with a side of Alcide. Greedy? ;)

Reviewer: serafim Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/11/2011 6:51:59 PM Title: Chapter 11

I'm here. :)

Your update at least gave me the excuse to re-read your story again, which, I must say, was EXTREMELY enjoyable.

SOrry to hear about life knocking you upside the head - hopefully things are getting better.

As for this story - it's so good, and I have to really commend you for returning to it after all your lows. I loved the interaction with both Pyro and Jubilee, very realistic. You've got me all "thinky", wondering what's going on with Carol...

Author's Response: Yay! Best roll call turn out ever! You re-read the entire thing?! Holy crap! That makes me smile so much my face hurts :D I have to apologize for getting you all "thinky". "Thinky" is terrible. I promise to balance it out with Wolverine hotness in the near future!

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 07/11/2011 6:39:55 PM Title: Chapter 11

Girlfriend, you are so not getting rid of me. ;) I'm really glad you're back. Lately every time I've looked at my Favorites page, I've seen "Loyalties" there and wondered how you were doing and if things were going more smoothly for you. I'm so sorry to hear that you lost a relative; that's hard. (My grandfather died at the beginning of July, so... I feel you, as Jubes might say.)

As for the chapter, I like it! Yay for repairing her fledging relationship with Jubilee--I love those two as BFFs, you know? Sending Logan off on a mission was smart, as it gave you room for Rogue to have some breathing space and time to figure out her own stuff. The thick plottens, hurrah.

Marie sees the high road, registers it in all its sunny glory, and chooses to ignore the hell out of it.

This line? I kind of want to hug it and squeeze it and pet it and call it George. Hee!

Author's Response: It's good to be back! Let's hope I can keep this up, huh? I'm so sorry for your loss. It's..well...it's just hard. Plain & simple. It feels like everything should stop, but it doesn't. Quite difficult. I'm glad I can provide a few minutes of distraction with an update. Who doesn't love Jubilee? I can't keep her & Marie apart. She's too much fun to write & provides some great development in the Roganverse sometimes. I'm sooooo glad you liked that line. It was nabbed from real life when dealing with petty relatives during some family drama. Naturally it had to go into the fic ;)

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/05/2011 1:06:46 AM Title: Chapter 10

Really like this still, reread it tonight. Would love to see an update when you get a chance.

Author's Response: Done! Thankyouthankyouthankyou for re-reading & sticking with this. :D

Reviewer: DarkDragonfly Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 07/03/2011 4:44:32 PM Title: Chapter 1

Just re-read the story because I am desperate for an update *puppy dog eyes*

Author's Response: I know. I'm a complete & utter ass. Life turned less than exceptional in the Spring & now I fear that my beta has drowned in a pile of her own work. Search & rescue missions have been under way for my muse and my beta for quite some time now. Trust me, I haven't forgotten about this piece and have no intentions of leaving it unfinished. It was a matter of getting my life back on track & now waiting for my beta to catch her breath. It truly helps to know that people still read this and are interested. Thank you!

Reviewer: replaying Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/03/2011 12:09:59 AM Title: Chapter 1

I really love where this story is going. The dynamics between all the characters and the Carol story-line is fresh.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm terribly sorry you stumbled upon this during a time of personal unrest in the author's life. I haven't given up on this monster of a story. Just need some time. I'm thrilled that you find this plot to be original. That's definitely a big fear when tackling anything in a fandom pairing that's what...eleven years old by now?

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/25/2011 1:49:21 AM Title: Chapter 1

Nah, you're still not an a-hole. Life happens. Hope you can get it all sorted soon and with minimal pain and suffering.

Author's Response: Oh I'm pretty sure I'm an a-hole considering I haven't been able to update. I just hope that when I do I won't get pelted with too many rocks ;)

Reviewer: DarkWing Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 04/24/2011 5:28:40 PM Title: Chapter 10

Uhhh...I am really enjoying this!! I hope you update soon... very soon!!! hehe *thumbs up* x

Author's Response: Hey, thanks! Unfortunately no updates for a month or so. April has been really friggin' unkind to me so I haven't been able to write or do anything to this story. I know I'm a few chapters ahead, but I looked at what I have written & it's crappy. I won't have time to do re-writes until this killer semester is over & I'm 100% in good health again. I'm so glad you're liking this though & I hope I can re-work the next few chapters so that I give you guys quality stuff. Hang in there! I haven't forgotten about this. Promise!!!

Reviewer: velvetemr73 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/10/2011 5:01:36 PM Title: Chapter 10

ooooo more please! logan and marie the only ones on that floor? oh the possibilities!

Author's Response: Sorry it's taken me so long to get to this! Writing has been halted, but I have NOT forgotten about this story. Life just handed me a dump truck full of lemons that I still don't know what to do with. Once I figure that out the first thing I'll move on to is this monster of a story. And yes, Logan & Marie are all alone on that floor. The possibilities indeed!

Reviewer: JaqofSpades Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/27/2011 9:17:50 PM Title: Chapter 10

Like it. Am sticking. Simple.

I really enjoyed the piano scene - it made immediate sense to me that a piano would MEAN something to her, and the mediatative nature of playing an instrument as a means of calming and centring herself - it's perfect.

Weird coincidence - my nearly six year old is a bit of a prodigy, and has just learnt to play that refrain, and I now hear Ode to Joy every morning before school - except our digital piano IS turned on:)

Take all the time you need - I'll be here for about a zillion years the way my piece is going ...

Author's Response: Oh will you still be sticking after all this time? I'm an ogre. No really, I am. For neglecting you all for so long. Life, in a word, has been shit. Therefore my funtime writing has taken a hit. Not a fatal hit, but a pretty serious one. Once I finally manage to clean the shit up I will get back to this story. You have no idea how happy I am that you liked the piano scene. Oh You have no idea how much I love you for that comment! Ode to Joy was my first "real" piece on a different instrument, but I can even play that EEFGGFEDCCDEEDD, etc on my niece's mini piano toys....before she steals them from me...

Reviewer: RoseSumner Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/26/2011 10:30:39 PM Title: Chapter 10

Is it getting redundant for me to remark on how I thought the previous chapter was my favorite (and the previous's previous), but this one proves me wrong? Lord, I gobbled this up this morning. From the very first line, being on time to work was suddenly very low on my list of priorities.

Exceptional Nightmare scene, a favorite of us Rogan fans. Love his coming and leaving, and how he didn't stay the whole night. Such superb, realistic steps taken to join our pair.

And the piano scene--you were right, it fits perfectly. It is perfect. Possibly one of the best, most beautiful Rogan scene of any story of any writer of any time. I adore this. You are incredible, exceptional. Wanted to scream when I reached the end--can't wait for the next.

Author's Response: Oh Rose. Your review has been left out here in the cold. Just waiting. FOR A FUCKING MONTH!!!! HOW DARE I? Well you know exactly what's been going on so a sound lashing I will not receive from you.

Reviewer: DarkDragonfly Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/26/2011 3:05:12 PM Title: Chapter 1

Sigh, you make it so hard to be upset with you..

Even though I would have loved a longer chapter you more than made up for it with this superb chapter...I was hoping and waiting for a more intimate look into Marie and her past and you delivered once again, the piano scene was perfect and actually pretty close to one that I have been wanting to see in a fic for a while.

You play Marie's sassy attitude and vulnerability side by side so perfectly and Logan's gruffness just makes a wonderful contrast to her as well.

Cant wait for more from you...ya know...no pressure...lol

Author's Response: There's no excuse for not getting to this sooner. Other than the shitstorm that happened to be my life immediately following my last update. I couldn't touch anything Rogan for a while. Needless to say, I'm terribly sorry. Going back to these reviews has helped immensely and I hope to be able to update sooner rather than later. I just want to make sure that after all this time I give you guys something that's sub-par.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/26/2011 1:03:38 PM Title: Chapter 1

Sorry, I meant in my review, I said "belief" when I meant "disbelief." It doesn't let me edit. Sorry to be confusing. At least you get three reviews out of it! ;-)

Reviewer: doctorg Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/26/2011 7:36:24 AM Title: Chapter 1

belief = disbelief

Author's Response: huh?

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/26/2011 7:35:46 AM Title: Chapter 10

To start, this was just heartbreaking:
They had made a deal, one that she’s becoming so used to making in order to get from one place to another, that she can easily just shut down during. She’s getting to the point where she would even forget to turn her emotions back on well after she scrubbed her gloves clean.

A lot of people incorporate this kind of thing into Marie's backstory, but your description of her stunned belief about how things didn't go as "normal" is particularly poignant.

And Logan's reticent caretaking is just...aw. You know that he's been there, and that he knows he would hate being fussed over, but his quiet support is so ... yum. And how he went to get a shirt. I'm so glad they're neighbors. ;-)

LOL at Muscular Meditation Muse. I love her sense of humor.

I really like the music scene, and think it works exceptionally well. It would make sense that music would give her a little peace from the battle in her head -- not just immersing herself in an overlearned activity and soothing herself with something familiar, but using different parts of her brain.

I'm so sorry about the writer's block. For both of us! But what you're producing is great, so I'll be patient no matter what the process is.

Author's Response: Wow Ima diiiiiiiiiiiiick. It took me a month to get to my reviews. Wow, didn't think it would be that long, but then the gods of April shit all over me. I've been in a maelstrom of shit all month! Thanks you for the patience (which you're going to have to keep holding onto & the review!)

Reviewer: litlen Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/26/2011 5:53:42 AM Title: Chapter 10

I love the assumptions! How Logan never seems to do or say what she thinks he will. Really nice comparison between the girl she touched who’d got drunk and Logan, just one of a million little extras that add depth and intelligence to your writing, the whole scene after her nightmare was simply gorgeous. Also loved with a capitol L the use of music, how she’s tried to use it to keep her sanity. Used to only hearing it in her head for so long anyway the fact that the piano didn’t make a sound was genius, definitely no need to worry at all about this scene it reads just fine and fits perfectly.

Ok so to sum up, still loving it, still impatient but what the hell we all know that’s never gonna change! If you need time then take it, this is far to good to rush or give up on - we’ll wait [and you won’t hear that from me very often!]

Author's Response: YOu are too kind. I bow down to your kindness, especially since it's been a month! I'm a terrible person. My many current struggles will be touched upon whenever I can update to let you guys know that I never abandoned this thing. Imagine reading all of this with my imagined voice in your head mumbling this through a curtain of beer tears. That will be better.

Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/26/2011 1:38:05 AM Title: Chapter 10

love the new update, the plot's really heating up in the last couple chappies. i'm curious to see if you'll do a logan pov sometime. personally, i'd love to see some insight into what was going on in his mind during some of the things you described from rogue's pov. like his 'straight jacket' face or the 'cold shower' face. are those faces er, correctly labeled i guess. like, is he really thinking 'god she's crazy' with the straight jacket look and is he really angry with the shower look?

anyhoo, rambling over. love the story, love the update. great job!

Author's Response: You're my 100th review!!! You get...uh...shit I'm out of candy. How about a little secret instead? About that Logan POV - consider it kind of done. After much thought & consultation with my oracles I've decided that another story I wrote, "She's Lost Control" is going to be incorporated into this one further down the line. It's a scene that I can definitely see taking place in the world I've created with Loyalties, now I've just got to flesh it out & write it from Marie's POV. When the time is right I'll change the description of "She's Lost Control" to explain that it's Logan's POV of chapter whatever in this story. I know, I know - that's not exactly what you meant by a Logan POV. How about I ship you some cookies? Once I find some...

Reviewer: hobbitsdoitbetter Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/26/2011 12:06:24 AM Title: Chapter 10

hey hun,
liked this, as always.can only offer my cure for writers block, which is doing nothing on the story for a while and then coming back to it fresh. (if we readers have to wait, we have to wait). as for the piano scene, i though it worked well, it reads nicely and it's set up so that you get the feeling it's going to be important later on. the only thing i found a little jarring was the nature of the first flashback; you seem to be describing a fairly serious sexual assault (and death) and since none of the other references to rogue's past are this, well, graphic, the tone of it makes the whole chapter much darker than anything else so far. as i said, i found it a little jarring but that's probably just me. the story's going well however so give yourself a break. and if all else fails, get some red wine, some icecream and spend some time with your feral muse... i recommend the cage scene in X1 if you want to get your juices flowing, creative or otherwise... great chapter again, thanks for sharing and hobbits away, hey!

Author's Response: Yeah, I've been doing a whole lot of nothing on the Loyalties front & that's all I'm gettin' - Nada. I was hoping to run into some inspiration in the wilderness, but no dice. I guess the beginning of the scene was my fault on a couple of fronts. I threw in a while back an exchange between Xavier & a pissed Marie about what she had to do to survive on the road & that she might rather die than go back to that kind of living - but it was subtle. I didn't explicitly say what it was that she did to get by. Also, it was a while ago & I take forever to update so it seems even longer. The plan the entire time was to make this part of Marie's backstory, but I suppose I should have either been a bit more explicit before, or put something like this in earlier (problem is I don't see Logan helping her out like this any earlier. Conundrum). At first, I did make the trucker die, but then I remembered that from the get go Carol was the only person that Marie had ever killed (I think that's in Chapter 1), so I had to amend it so that he was not quite dead - this is why I need a ton of time btw. writing & posting!

Reviewer: Melancholy Rogue Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/25/2011 11:14:59 PM Title: Chapter 10

Aww, I liked it. The bathroom scene (though it was mentally and physically bad for Marie) was sweet. Logan, in all his badass-ness still playing nurse maid. Gotta love him! :)

Author's Response: Nurse Maid Logan! Here bunny, bunny, bunny. Syke. Yeah I forget if I had an ulterior motive for that scene or not, but I like it too!

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/25/2011 11:12:05 PM Title: Chapter 10

I'll write a more detailed review later, but for now I'm very sleepy and I'll just say -- yay! So glad you're back! And this chapter was unbef*ckingbelievably awesome.

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/25/2011 11:03:22 PM Title: Chapter 10

Hey, you're not an a-hole of any flavor. Writing takes time. (Though I will admit that when I got the notice that you'd updated, I got very happy. :) )

And the piano scene seems to work fine to me. I like that you've left her an out. The relationship with Logan is building slowly, but to me it reads well: not too fast, not too slow. Nice!

Author's Response: You might want to re-assess that "not an a-hole" thing now that it's taken me a month to get back to you.......only to say that this in on hiatus for a bit. I will come back to it after I get real life issues straightened out. Promise!

Reviewer: Gidget Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/23/2011 1:26:41 PM Title: Chapter 9

I'm reading this for the first time, and I am really loving it. I am a sucker for 'Rogue defects from the Brotherhood' stories, and I like where this one is going. Plus it's still being updated, which is nice - because usually the stories I really like are abandoned. I go through fits and starts with W/R fan fic, lol - so I am shocked that I remembered my login information for here in order to leave this review - but I wanted to tell you home much I was enjoying it. I hope you'll update soon :)

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! Rogue defecting has always interested me - even though she doesn't quite "defect" in this one. She's not pro-Brotherhood like the original comics-Rogue. I'll try & keep with the updates, honest. Working through writer's block, but I've got some ideas stored up to hopefully get everyone through. I hope to see you around these review-parts again!

Reviewer: litlen Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/13/2011 10:23:54 AM Title: Chapter 9

Ok, you are *so* lucky I’m still chilled otherwise there could have been hell to pay, you really know how to put in a full effect ending that had I not still been ‘chilled’ would have left me screaming in a very impatient way at you the screen and the world. However, I am still layed back and at peace with having to wait for the next tiny snippet of your masterpiece [a fact that surprises even me!] Very much [patiently] looking forward to you amping it up to your heart’s content! x

Author's Response: Ah yes, a chilled litlen is a good litlen. *Pats you on the head, gives you another sedative cookie*. Sorry about the lateness of my response & the uh....*ducks behind something*...further lateness of another update. School & writer's block have captured me. The conditions here are terrible. I didn't know what hit me. One minute I was walking out of the airport, the next I'm in some dark room that miraculously has wifi with more midterms and papers waiting and a missing muse. The food here is also crap. Who serves gruel in lockup anymore? I'm working on an escape plan...honest!

Reviewer: Capt_Mackenzie Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/13/2011 1:57:32 AM Title: Chapter 9

well if you don't come back, why should you care if I leave something? You'll never read it!
*grins*

OK, OK. So: nice Brooding!Wolvie here. Lots of hinting around and not much else this scene; I think this was just some clever anticipation-builder -- a teaser, if you will -- to keep us from pestering you for the next updates which apparently aren't going to come any time soon!

But it was a thoughtfully written & thought-provoking conversation our 2 protagonists were having.

Author's Response: I came back! No worse for wear. Just a bit jet-lagged. Who doesn't love a Brooding!Wolvie? He does it so well. I can't say for sure that teasing is my motivation here. It's more me wanting to make the build up of whatever happens between these two believable. They're not going to be around each other all the time, there's no real defined reason for that *yet*. So I don't want to - and can't make myself - force that. Even though I'm a few chapters ahead, I've got a case of writer's block & school starts up again tomorrow so we'll see about the updates. I'm working on it, I promise! Setting up traps to catch my muse right now!

Reviewer: RoseSumner Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2011 11:32:51 PM Title: Chapter 9

If you get eaten by a mountain armadillo before we get the rest of this story, I will kill you. What? No--no, I don't care how illogical that is. Shut up. Did you hear me? I. Keeeelll. You.

I say it (or think it) every time, but this may be my favorite chapter. Such a sublime conversation between our couple, such a exquisite portrayal of Mr.NOM. I wanted to squee at his every line. I love your Logan. I want to do horrible things with him and a few favored ice cream toppings.

This story moves at such a glorious, perfect, but tortuously slow pace. Imagine how epic it will be by the end--I can't wait to rereread it from there. Your writing is so visceral; the reader can see each seen in bright color, each sentence adding fresh paint, fresh depth to the image.

Like everyone else, all your other fans, I cannot wait for the next.

Author's Response: Oh hey! Look! Not eaten! I might as well have been since I've got a full blown case of writer's block. Eaten, not eaten - the story is not progressing either way. Maybe it's from packing & unpacking, but I have no idea where I put my muse! I'm glad you like my Logan. His is a characterization that's kind of hard to get down. He just wants to grunt! I'm all like, "you *can't* just grunt! You have to say *something*!" And what does he do? Grunts. Ugh, men. Very happy you even sort of like the pace. I'm worried that it's dragging and you all want to kill me. I promise I've included more Rogan interactions in later chapters...even if it's not what you're looking for... *ducks*

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