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Reviewer: JaqofSpades Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/26/2011 11:35:11 PM Title: Chapter 5

Oh, I laughed. I would have liked a bit more reaction from Logan - what does HE think of all the ogling - but this left me with a lovely anticipatory feeling. Especially now he know's she's not a kid :D

Author's Response: I'm glad I could make you laugh! I find that I can't write straight drama without injecting a little bit of comedy - or at least try to, anyway. Since this fic is based around Marie's perception of things there's never going to be anything from Logan's POV. So essentially, we're not going to know what the guy is thinking unless he can man up and say it. I feel like his glowering was just enough in the kitchen scene since anger is his go to emotion - he probably doesn't know what to think of Marie since she's not a kid, but she still killed Carol. Alas, we're not meant to know yet! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: JaqofSpades Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/19/2011 11:43:29 PM Title: Chapter 1

Really enjoying this one. You have a lovely deft touch and keep up a cracking pace ... but the characters are still nicely fleshed out. Particularly liking Rogue's gradual introduction to Logan ... and Carol's memories :D

Author's Response: Thanks for this! Always, always, always great to know that a new face is enjoying this (not that you're new to the site or that I can see your face - that would be weird). I'm very happy that you like the pacing so far. Hopefully, I'll be able to keep everything balanced :)

Reviewer: Capt_Mackenzie Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/18/2011 1:29:46 AM Title: Chapter 4

Lovin' the high drama in this one, and the first inklings of real communication b/w her & lOgan.

Author's Response: Usually high drama is no good for Logan & Marie, so I'm pleased that you don't hate it. Logan? Real communication? Don't let him hear you accuse him of that! Thanks for the rating & review! You made the first day of spring semester a little easier to stomach :D

Reviewer: MoonlightStorm Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/17/2011 8:55:55 PM Title: Chapter 4

Can't wait for more! :)

Author's Response: Stay tuned! I'm hoping to get the next chapter up this weekend!!

Reviewer: RebelQueen Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/16/2011 5:57:02 PM Title: Chapter 4

I am telling, this story always gets to me! Every time I read something new I end up tearing up with the emotion involved in Rogue's situation! I would love it if Jean was the first one to actually thaw out some towards Rogue, considering she did not Intend to kill Carol.

I can not wait for the next chapter!!

Author's Response: Oh goodness, I apologize for the tears! I wish I could give you a plaid shirt to sop up your leaky eyes, even if it's still attached to a growly feral mutant. Uh, *especially* if it's still attached to a growly feral mutant. I can't promise any thawing on Jean's end. I'm mired in Jean issues - we're talking years of therapy, so I can't quite break her bitchitude. I will try to deliver more nearly nekkid Logan to compensate! Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Anami Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/16/2011 8:34:30 AM Title: Chapter 4

This is a wonderful story. Especially descriptions of Marie's inner battles. And the hints of something being deeply wrong with the alpha team are great little innuendos.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're picking up the innuendos and that you like them.

Reviewer: litlen Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/16/2011 4:08:05 AM Title: Chapter 4

Great chapter, love the struggle within her mind, her battle to stay herself. You really are getting the balance right.

Love the subtle way you threw in Logan’s reaction at her wanting to wipe the slate clean. Just one line but enough as a reader to know there’s more to come between the two of them [dear god it’s innuendo time again, I have a dirty little mind, I really must work on that!]

There’s definitely concern from Logan in this chapter very well-disguised but there none the less – love the interaction between them [!] you really write it well. Looking forward to more, good job x

Author's Response: If I'm living off of reviews nowadays, then I can safely say this one is both delicious and filling. I won't be hungry for a while. I may have bounced a little while reading your thoughts, maybe made some embarrassing squee noises. "Balance" - I love that word, but I love that you think this story has it even more. Have I mentioned how grateful I am that you're on board for this little WIP ride? I am. I really, really am. :D

Reviewer: RoseSumner Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/15/2011 10:32:42 PM Title: Chapter 4

Ohhh....Myyyy.....Go--oddd!!!, Sahara! >rabid fan drooleyes roll back in head, twitches on the ground in a very, very good way<

"...wonders why she found her backbone now that she’s faced with a man who could, and probably would, remove it. Badass, hilarEEious, and poetic rolled into a spiked ball of talented awesomity. Other examples of such:


"She could live in there. Really. The damn thing is huge, which makes sense since she’s in a high-occupancy mansion."

Great, she’s going to hurl all over the mighty Wolverine. "

"She pulls away, noticing that she can only do so because he lets her."


The last lacked the hilarity but held the brilliance of the others. And I don't mean 'brilliance' as just really, really cool, but *genius*. Like Lawyer-Tom Cruise in A Few Good Men. Just a total pimp (forgive me, it was on as I was dressing for work this morning).

You have a divine knack for expressing common things in a completely fresh, "DAY-amn" kind of way. It's mindblowing. Wish I could favorite this story a hundred times. You're the best eggroll I've ever had.

Author's Response: This might sound creepy, but I'm very happy to be your eggroll. I hope you're okay with the fact that I'm a vegetarian eggroll though. If not, then I'd happily change if it means I get more awesome-sauce reviews like this. *Gobbles up your quotes. NOM NOM NOM*. You have no idea how happy that last little bit made me - the "completely fresh" bit. That's damn high praise. Muchas gracias.

Reviewer: tamisnead Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 01/15/2011 9:38:10 PM Title: Chapter 4

Not sure where you're going with this, but I'm along for the ride. Plus "Homicidial Lumberjack"? I almost spit my drink on the moniter!

Author's Response: Thanks for sticking with this! I truly appreciate that and am very happy to make room for you on this Rogan train. Watch out for nearly nekkid Logans along the ride!

Reviewer: notmyself Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/15/2011 8:53:45 PM Title: Chapter 4

Nice. Tell me how that diet works out for you, sweetness. On the topic of this hot mess though, this was incredibly fun to read. She didn't come across as out of character for the situation. She was just a bit punch drunk as they say. Thank you. I'm really truly enjoying this. I loved the understated bit about being wiped clean and Logan's reaction to it. I also love all the mount Wolverine dirty things that Carol insinuated into her mind. I would totally have done that. It amuses me even as I feel bad for Rogue. I loves itttt. Precious. Sorry. Wrong field.

~Mia

Author's Response: Oh the diet is working splendidly. I had your review for breakfast & it was quite filling, let me tell you. I'm beyond happy to know that you didn't find Marie out of character. It's hard to pin down what she would be feeling in a situation like that, so I figured "hmm, why not feel them all?" Yes, I believe Carol is the representation of every WRFA-er's dirty, dirty mind. By the way, your "precious" moment made me grin like an idiot. Please feel free to indulge in your inner Gollum anytime :)

Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/15/2011 8:40:09 PM Title: Chapter 4

i'll try to help with your diet, i love this story! i'm so curious to see what logan thinks of rogue now that he's seen what she goes through. but god, jean is such s biyatch! having another telepath run amok through rogue's mind isn't the best idea. please write more soon! i'm desperate!!!

Author's Response: Thank you for helping me with my diet. Your review is quite delicious. I completely agree with you about Jean, too. I admit that I have blatant Jean issues, but I don't want to make her a full on unmitigated bitch. Maybe Bitch-Lite?

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/15/2011 8:00:21 PM Title: Chapter 4

Hooray for a new chapter! Loved this one too. Too many truly awesome lines to quote them all, but I'll pick a few. For some reason, this struck me as really funny:

looking as close to calm as she’s seen him

Like Logan can never just *be* calm, he can just look close to calm.

Not to mention:
“Yeah.”
“Fuck.”
They were an eloquent pair.

I'm very interested to see how this develops. The Rogan stuff promises to be delicious, of course, but I'm also very curious about Logan's history with Carol. Keep posting!

Author's Response: You've caught on to my weakness - reviewers that quote! I love knowing what lines you guys liked. It's fun seeing which ones are universally enjoyed and which stood out to one person in particular. You're on to something about Logan and calmness. He's trying, but not quite there. This may be something I revisit. Thanks for reading, rating, & reviewing :)

Reviewer: litlen Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/12/2011 2:10:59 AM Title: Chapter 3

Your description of Logan from Marie’s pov – his actions, his clothes etc……an absolute joy to read! (as was pointed out to me when asked ‘what the hell are you reading that’s making you sit there with a stupid grin on your face?’)

Great chapter. Liking the prof, kinda hope he has no surprises and stays on the lighter side of dark. Logan? well Logan’s being Logan! am looking forward to Marie chinking his armour (which sounds rude but was really not meant to be !!) I know what I mean!! I like that she’s taken responsibility/blame for what’s happened, not bothering to fight her corner and it’s the prof that’s pointed out that it wasn’t down to her – hope that it will end up being Logan that rams that point home (and we’re sounding a little dirty again but i swear it’s not intentional!)

Thoroughly enjoying so far and really looking forward to the next instalment - Wolverine Mountain?....Yes please x

Author's Response: I don't know what your version of a stupid grin looks like, but I'm thrilled that I could put it on your face - even if other people now question your sanity. I can safely say that I will not delve into Dark!Professor territory. That's something that I have a hard time digesting, so I don't think I can write him that way. He has his faults, of course, but he won't be malicious in this. I'm glad you're liking Marie's personality so far. Balancing her guilt & sass is not the easiest thing, but it's got me questioning how much a person can take, what's a person's breaking point, etc. Hopefully whatever take I find will be entertaining/interesting. And please, feel free to lace your reviews with as many innuendos as possible - I enjoy every last one!

Reviewer: Cherryblossom104 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/11/2011 9:34:24 PM Title: Chapter 3

Wow. This has the perfect level of detail to capture my interest. I love all of the internal and external conflict. Jubes can be the most awesome bitch around. Wolverine is so damn cranky. And Scott has a stiff stick in his ass. I really like this story. :D

Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you're interested! I'll try to keep up the level of detail. I think Jubes would gladly wear the "most awesome bitch around" badge. And I'm happy that a cranky Wolverine didn't deflect your interest. Like I said, I'll try to keep up with the detail, especially when Logan decides to lose some clothing. I can't promise Scott will lose that stick though. I'm pretty sure he's one with his stick. Thanks for reading, rating, and reviewing. My 3 favorite Rs :D

Reviewer: notmyself Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/11/2011 8:20:30 PM Title: Chapter 3

Everyone wants to camp out at Wolverine mountain. That's why we're here, love. To see if we can't exhaust that mutation of his or die trying.

Homicidal Lumberjack collection had me doubled over laughing. Don't know why that hit me as so funny, but I thought it was hilarious and very original. I likes it. Thank you.

~Mia

Author's Response: I know, I just wanted to get a head count, figure out the logistics & the like. Best way to test out that healing mutation though, right? Who needs the medlab?! I'm glad you liked the Homicidal Lumberjack collection. I'm thinking the Spring 2011 line will feature a lot less plaid & a lot more skin ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/11/2011 6:04:06 PM Title: Chapter 3

Another awesome chapter! I don't how you manage to be so witty without taking away from the emotionality of it. It's a really neat trick. :-) All the little details are awesome, like this: "Gingerly, she sits…and finds that it’s deceptively welcoming, like the man across from her." It really puts you inside Rogue's head in a very immediate way. Love it. My only complaint is that I want more chapters faster -- you should never have spilled that you had a bunch more written. It makes me antsy!

Author's Response: Thanks! I don't know where the balancing comes from either, it's a bit of a worry making sure that the tone is just right. I'm glad you're liking it so far! Sorry I spilled the beans about the chapters! I wanted to reassure you guys that I wasn't abandoning this WIP, but I'm super hesitant to post updates because of mistakes and my worries about pacing. Rest assured, those updates will come, though. In the meantime pack up what you need for the field trip to Wolverine Mountain. Awesomeness guaranteed.

Reviewer: hobbitsdoitbetter Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/11/2011 5:34:31 PM Title: Chapter 3

hey, sorry it took me so long to get to this. have to say i really like it, like your take on the professor too. and no, i don't hate logan, he's the sort gets bent out of shape about a team-mat being killed so i get his reaction. the only advice i can give is, watch your tenses please. you jump back and forwards between present and past and it's quite jarring to read. other than that this is great, and i look forward to more. hobbits away, hey!

Author's Response: Better late than never! And you're just in time for the field trip to Wolverine Mountain! Yes, my tenses are all sorts of messed up. I'm going through the rest that's written and trying to catch every change. They're very sneaky, those changing tenses. I have no idea what possessed me to just flip them around mid-chapter and why I didn't catch them all. "Catch'em, kill'em" is will be my new motto for the rest of the fic! Uh..the tenses..not the characters. No mass die-offs here.

Reviewer: DarkDragonfly Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/11/2011 5:24:49 PM Title: Chapter 1

I was so excited to see that this had been updated and you did not disappoint, a perfect balance of unexpected humor and sadness.

I cannot wait for more, and I second the previous reviewer as I too am curious about the "Hes not Victor" chant and what Logans reaction would be to it.

Author's Response: "A perfect balance": this made me smile like a damn fool! I'm really happy you think so and I will take that compliment, wrap it in electric blankets, love it, and covet it :D The "he's not Victor" chant won't be immediately revealed, but I don't have anything devastatingly serious planned for its contents. Marie has enough on her plate and far more baggage to be aired out. Thank you for my 3 favorite Rs (reading, rating, reviewing)!!

Reviewer: Shuttlelauncher Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/11/2011 5:18:35 PM Title: Chapter 3

Great story!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: RoseSumner Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/11/2011 4:47:27 PM Title: Chapter 3

I WANT TO HIKE MOUNT LOGAN!!!!

His Homicidal Lumberjack collection?! I had to stop reading. Laughed so hard my Netbook fell--you're really making me abuse this thing. And, "...just enough to show how often she made base camp at Belt Buckle Summit." ....I think it's very important that we take up mountain climbing. Very important. Very very very. There are just somethings you have to do before you die, you know? Can you give me directions to this range? Because it...it sounds like a good one, and its best to be referred, not safe to just jump on--I mean, into--into such a rigorous hobby. So where is Belt Buckle Summit? Where is it?!

Such wonderful prose in this. Alternately side-splitting and heartrending, without either one spoiling the other. Nothing over-stated, just right and cutting right through the readers expectations.

I love "...feeling like the shy child she never was..."

and, "the melody all too familiar even if the lyrics weren’t the same."

and, "EVERYHING ELSE". Your style is amazing. So, so talented. Wish I could rate this higher than a ten. Can't wait for the next chapter, and the next and the nextandthenextandthenextandthenext...

Author's Response: Who doesn't? That said, consider yourself signed up. I'll let you know when the bus leaves & I'll email you the itinerary. You may want to leave your netbook at home if just reading about Wolverine Mountain puts it in danger ;) I'm glad you found the humor & drama was balanced in this. Thank you thank you thank you. This review was a lovely read :D

Reviewer: litlen Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/05/2011 2:25:46 PM Title: Chapter 2

You’re off to a great start, whilst reading my mind was spinning with the possibilities - different scenarios for characters/situations. What I want to happen/what should happen/what could happen/which way will you take it? and on and on and on!!!!

Don’t be tempted to rush it you’ve set this up so well, loving all of the characterization so far. I want to see/read the background story/the gradual changes/the conflict – internal and maybe external/the relationships and how they are made etc.

Am very much liking the start of your thingymajig, In fact it’s a very interesting thingymajig, so you can count me in for yet more chapter reading ( rose has a lot to answer for I can no longer call myself a ‘finished fic only reader !) - please tell me you have no plans for long drawn out spans of time between updates otherwise I may have to change my mind!

Author's Response: I was so pumped to see your review! I even popped out of my warm mountain of blankets with excitement because I know you're not a huge fan of WIPs. I'm so glad you're interested in my thingymajig (and where else can I use that phrase without sounding like a pervert?). Don't worry - I've got 9 chapters written and chapters 3 and 4 are being beta'd as we speak (er...uh, type). I'm desperately trying to kick that part of me that wants to rush this, which is why I sat on this story for about a month before posting. It's so tempting, but I'd rather flesh things out & deliver quality work to my fellow Roganites. Thank you so much for reading, rating, reviewing & generally being fantastic :D

Reviewer: RoseSumner Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/01/2011 11:20:07 PM Title: Chapter 1

Oh, dangit dangit DANGIT!!! Very long review got cut off halfway through--don't you hate when that happens?.....Anyway....And I'm not even going to ask how many chapters it will be before Logan and Rogue are comfortable with each other and/or clothes start falling off. I'm not going to beg, I'm not going to bribe, I'm not going to offer one answer to any spoiler question of my current or any future fic of mine you might read. I'm not. Know why? Because you are the writer, and we readers are only happy to accept any scraps you see fit to throw down to us...Btw, Sahara, you look very pretty today. That font looks great on you.
Dialogue is impeccable. Everything said is so believable, so *right*. You tell the readers so much about the characters and situation without them noticing that they are being told. And that's talent, the best of skills. Very worship-worthy.
You're writing is like Chinese food from a favorite restaurant. Filling, delicious, something you can't shake the craving for, will spend your last penny to get...and leaves you dying for more upon finishing. You're my eggroll, Sahara!!

Author's Response: Ugh, gremlins. I hate when they cut off my reviews too! It's the ghost of Jean! I saw her do it! Honest to Abs, I swear I did! Yeah...it's going to be *a while* before they're getting that kind of comfy w/ one another. A long while. And that's all I'll say, even if this font looks good on me today. The slate metal background does *wonders* for my complexion! You have a knack for making me giggle out loud like a weirdo when I read anything you write to me - it's a wonder I haven't been carted off to an institution. I'm your eggroll? And you favorited me? *bounces* *squees* *does victory dance in the little tiny space in my room that I've cleared as more of a walkway between the bed & the door*rnrnGracias :D

Reviewer: RoseSumner Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/01/2011 11:07:36 PM Title: Chapter 2

The walls were the same rich, dark wood with a glossy finish. The furniture, from the desk to the four-poster bed looked like antiques in a modernized way that only a lot of money could buy. A part of her that she thought she left in Mississippi noted the thick linens and started figuring the cost of the entire yardage. Xavier really was trying to kill her with kindness. Love. This. Line. But I love every other line in this chapter as well, and no less deeply. It's so rare, so magnificent, for *every* sentence in a fic, in a book, in anything to be perfect. Every paragraph is beautifully crafted,every scene is detailed without boring the reader with lengthy descriptions--a whole setting laid out in a handful of words that stick in our minds. It's incredible. You're a genius.

Jubilee is done fantastically. In character and original at the same time. Like everyone, I love the "wouldn't pee on you" thing.

Am very much continuing to enjoy BadassLogan. He's so sexy when he growls--I'd let him decorate the walls with *my* insides....That creepy? >clears throat

Author's Response: Not creepy at all. I think everyone here would just let Logan do what he does best. We'd just hope that he does it shirtless...at the very least.

Reviewer: DarkDragonfly Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/31/2010 12:16:33 PM Title: Chapter 1

Another brilliant chapter, I was so excited when I saw you had updated!

I continue to love your version of Logan/Rogue, Im really excited to see how you bring them together in the end..some of my favorite fics are ones where they start off enemies.

And Im not sure if Jubes is playing at something or just being herself but I absolutely LOVE how you have written her.

Cant wait to read more!

Happy New Year :D

Author's Response: I know, right? I'm not entirely sure what it is about them as enemies, but it's something my brain kept coming back to for a long time now. I'm glad I'm finally getting to explore that & you guys seem to like it!

Reviewer: Capt_Mackenzie Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 12/31/2010 11:55:32 AM Title: Chapter 2

So is Logan tied to Carol from his past, and close to her, like he is in the comics? That why he's so furious? ...but I'm not surprised the scent of Rogue's abject terror and more-or-less insane behavior would put him off. He's not one for kicking a man when he's down; he likes to fight someone who actually has the spirit to fight back, doesn't he? ;)

Poor Rogue. You continue to do a good job writing her state of mind while she feels totally anchorless and unwanted in the world.

I *do* hope you explain Jubes' behavior sometime ... that *was* very strange, to be sure.

Author's Response: Cap'n, you're makin' it happen. "Anchorless"!!! Gosh, that is *such* a great, appropriate word. It's the kind of word I want to sink my teeth into - if that makes sense. I actually let out a "YES!" and pointed to the screen of my laptop when I read that (luckily I was alone, no mental hospital trips for me!) I kind of feel like I should hand the reigns over to you since you've got such a good grip on this! I will address Jubes - at least my theory on her & why she is the way she is in this story....that doesn't really make sense does it? Oh well, uh keep tuning in! Thanks!!!

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