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Date: 07/05/2011 1:06:46 AM Title: Chapter 10
Really like this still, reread it tonight. Would love to see an update when you get a chance.
Author's Response: Done! Thankyouthankyouthankyou for re-reading & sticking with this. :D
[Report This]Date: 04/24/2011 5:28:40 PM Title: Chapter 10
Uhhh...I am really enjoying this!! I hope you update soon... very soon!!! hehe *thumbs up* x
Author's Response: Hey, thanks! Unfortunately no updates for a month or so. April has been really friggin' unkind to me so I haven't been able to write or do anything to this story. I know I'm a few chapters ahead, but I looked at what I have written & it's crappy. I won't have time to do re-writes until this killer semester is over & I'm 100% in good health again. I'm so glad you're liking this though & I hope I can re-work the next few chapters so that I give you guys quality stuff. Hang in there! I haven't forgotten about this. Promise!!!
Date: 04/10/2011 5:01:36 PM Title: Chapter 10
ooooo more please! logan and marie the only ones on that floor? oh the possibilities!
Author's Response: Sorry it's taken me so long to get to this! Writing has been halted, but I have NOT forgotten about this story. Life just handed me a dump truck full of lemons that I still don't know what to do with. Once I figure that out the first thing I'll move on to is this monster of a story. And yes, Logan & Marie are all alone on that floor. The possibilities indeed!
Date: 03/27/2011 9:17:50 PM Title: Chapter 10
Like it. Am sticking. Simple.
I really enjoyed the piano scene - it made immediate sense to me that a piano would MEAN something to her, and the mediatative nature of playing an instrument as a means of calming and centring herself - it's perfect.
Weird coincidence - my nearly six year old is a bit of a prodigy, and has just learnt to play that refrain, and I now hear Ode to Joy every morning before school - except our digital piano IS turned on:)
Take all the time you need - I'll be here for about a zillion years the way my piece is going ...
Author's Response: Oh will you still be sticking after all this time? I'm an ogre. No really, I am. For neglecting you all for so long. Life, in a word, has been shit. Therefore my funtime writing has taken a hit. Not a fatal hit, but a pretty serious one. Once I finally manage to clean the shit up I will get back to this story. You have no idea how happy I am that you liked the piano scene. Oh You have no idea how much I love you for that comment! Ode to Joy was my first "real" piece on a different instrument, but I can even play that EEFGGFEDCCDEEDD, etc on my niece's mini piano toys....before she steals them from me...
[Report This]Date: 03/26/2011 10:30:39 PM Title: Chapter 10
Is it getting redundant for me to remark on how I thought the previous chapter was my favorite (and the previous's previous), but this one proves me wrong? Lord, I gobbled this up this morning. From the very first line, being on time to work was suddenly very low on my list of priorities.
Exceptional Nightmare scene, a favorite of us Rogan fans. Love his coming and leaving, and how he didn't stay the whole night. Such superb, realistic steps taken to join our pair.
And the piano scene--you were right, it fits perfectly. It is perfect. Possibly one of the best, most beautiful Rogan scene of any story of any writer of any time. I adore this. You are incredible, exceptional. Wanted to scream when I reached the end--can't wait for the next.
Author's Response: Oh Rose. Your review has been left out here in the cold. Just waiting. FOR A FUCKING MONTH!!!! HOW DARE I? Well you know exactly what's been going on so a sound lashing I will not receive from you.
[Report This]Date: 03/26/2011 7:35:46 AM Title: Chapter 10
To start, this was just heartbreaking:
They had made a deal, one that she’s becoming so used to making in order to get from one place to another, that she can easily just shut down during. She’s getting to the point where she would even forget to turn her emotions back on well after she scrubbed her gloves clean.
A lot of people incorporate this kind of thing into Marie's backstory, but your description of her stunned belief about how things didn't go as "normal" is particularly poignant.
And Logan's reticent caretaking is just...aw. You know that he's been there, and that he knows he would hate being fussed over, but his quiet support is so ... yum. And how he went to get a shirt. I'm so glad they're neighbors. ;-)
LOL at Muscular Meditation Muse. I love her sense of humor.
I really like the music scene, and think it works exceptionally well. It would make sense that music would give her a little peace from the battle in her head -- not just immersing herself in an overlearned activity and soothing herself with something familiar, but using different parts of her brain.
I'm so sorry about the writer's block. For both of us! But what you're producing is great, so I'll be patient no matter what the process is.
Author's Response: Wow Ima diiiiiiiiiiiiick. It took me a month to get to my reviews. Wow, didn't think it would be that long, but then the gods of April shit all over me. I've been in a maelstrom of shit all month! Thanks you for the patience (which you're going to have to keep holding onto & the review!)
[Report This]Date: 03/26/2011 5:53:42 AM Title: Chapter 10
I love the assumptions! How Logan never seems to do or say what she thinks he will. Really nice comparison between the girl she touched who’d got drunk and Logan, just one of a million little extras that add depth and intelligence to your writing, the whole scene after her nightmare was simply gorgeous. Also loved with a capitol L the use of music, how she’s tried to use it to keep her sanity. Used to only hearing it in her head for so long anyway the fact that the piano didn’t make a sound was genius, definitely no need to worry at all about this scene it reads just fine and fits perfectly.
Ok so to sum up, still loving it, still impatient but what the hell we all know that’s never gonna change! If you need time then take it, this is far to good to rush or give up on - we’ll wait [and you won’t hear that from me very often!]
Author's Response: YOu are too kind. I bow down to your kindness, especially since it's been a month! I'm a terrible person. My many current struggles will be touched upon whenever I can update to let you guys know that I never abandoned this thing. Imagine reading all of this with my imagined voice in your head mumbling this through a curtain of beer tears. That will be better.
Date: 03/26/2011 1:38:05 AM Title: Chapter 10
love the new update, the plot's really heating up in the last couple chappies. i'm curious to see if you'll do a logan pov sometime. personally, i'd love to see some insight into what was going on in his mind during some of the things you described from rogue's pov. like his 'straight jacket' face or the 'cold shower' face. are those faces er, correctly labeled i guess. like, is he really thinking 'god she's crazy' with the straight jacket look and is he really angry with the shower look?
anyhoo, rambling over. love the story, love the update. great job!
Author's Response: You're my 100th review!!! You get...uh...shit I'm out of candy. How about a little secret instead? About that Logan POV - consider it kind of done. After much thought & consultation with my oracles I've decided that another story I wrote, "She's Lost Control" is going to be incorporated into this one further down the line. It's a scene that I can definitely see taking place in the world I've created with Loyalties, now I've just got to flesh it out & write it from Marie's POV. When the time is right I'll change the description of "She's Lost Control" to explain that it's Logan's POV of chapter whatever in this story. I know, I know - that's not exactly what you meant by a Logan POV. How about I ship you some cookies? Once I find some...
Date: 03/26/2011 12:06:24 AM Title: Chapter 10
hey hun,
liked this, as always.can only offer my cure for writers block, which is doing nothing on the story for a while and then coming back to it fresh. (if we readers have to wait, we have to wait). as for the piano scene, i though it worked well, it reads nicely and it's set up so that you get the feeling it's going to be important later on. the only thing i found a little jarring was the nature of the first flashback; you seem to be describing a fairly serious sexual assault (and death) and since none of the other references to rogue's past are this, well, graphic, the tone of it makes the whole chapter much darker than anything else so far. as i said, i found it a little jarring but that's probably just me. the story's going well however so give yourself a break. and if all else fails, get some red wine, some icecream and spend some time with your feral muse... i recommend the cage scene in X1 if you want to get your juices flowing, creative or otherwise... great chapter again, thanks for sharing and hobbits away, hey!
Author's Response: Yeah, I've been doing a whole lot of nothing on the Loyalties front & that's all I'm gettin' - Nada. I was hoping to run into some inspiration in the wilderness, but no dice. I guess the beginning of the scene was my fault on a couple of fronts. I threw in a while back an exchange between Xavier & a pissed Marie about what she had to do to survive on the road & that she might rather die than go back to that kind of living - but it was subtle. I didn't explicitly say what it was that she did to get by. Also, it was a while ago & I take forever to update so it seems even longer. The plan the entire time was to make this part of Marie's backstory, but I suppose I should have either been a bit more explicit before, or put something like this in earlier (problem is I don't see Logan helping her out like this any earlier. Conundrum). At first, I did make the trucker die, but then I remembered that from the get go Carol was the only person that Marie had ever killed (I think that's in Chapter 1), so I had to amend it so that he was not quite dead - this is why I need a ton of time btw. writing & posting!
Date: 03/25/2011 11:14:59 PM Title: Chapter 10
Aww, I liked it. The bathroom scene (though it was mentally and physically bad for Marie) was sweet. Logan, in all his badass-ness still playing nurse maid. Gotta love him! :)
Author's Response: Nurse Maid Logan! Here bunny, bunny, bunny. Syke. Yeah I forget if I had an ulterior motive for that scene or not, but I like it too!
[Report This]Date: 03/25/2011 11:12:05 PM Title: Chapter 10
I'll write a more detailed review later, but for now I'm very sleepy and I'll just say -- yay! So glad you're back! And this chapter was unbef*ckingbelievably awesome.
Date: 03/25/2011 11:03:22 PM Title: Chapter 10
Hey, you're not an a-hole of any flavor. Writing takes time. (Though I will admit that when I got the notice that you'd updated, I got very happy. :) )
And the piano scene seems to work fine to me. I like that you've left her an out. The relationship with Logan is building slowly, but to me it reads well: not too fast, not too slow. Nice!
Author's Response: You might want to re-assess that "not an a-hole" thing now that it's taken me a month to get back to you.......only to say that this in on hiatus for a bit. I will come back to it after I get real life issues straightened out. Promise!