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Reviewer: litlen Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/09/2011 8:57:24 AM Title: Chapter 8

I love the visuals you give the reader - ‘She’s close enough to see that the fourth button on his red plaid shirt is going to need reinforcing.’ We were there, in the shower, being towered over and seeing that damn fourth button straining!! It’s the little things that keep me happy ;)
I also love the little extra’s, the ones that appear out of nowhere – ‘she realizes she hasn’t had so much as a single thought about the Wolverine killing her all day’
‘is filled with nothing but homicidal tendencies’ exactly how I’d feel, not at getting up early cause I do that every day but at the meditating part!
Oh and loved the way you wrote Rogue's confusion ‘when she – uh, Mystique – was holding me to her – to…to Carol –‘ etc. so to sum up I basically loved it all – good job!

I’ve still got questions but hey ho – today I’m chilled so take your time, I’m sure I’ll find out soon enough! [make the most of it - next week I’ll be back to pleading for updates!!]

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm finding that I'm having a bit of a hard time writing really visual scenes & mixing in the exposition needed in dialogue sometimes, so I'm glad this turned out okay. Very appreciative of your level of chill. I hope my next update can catch you at another chill time because I think the next few chapters are Rogan-Lite. *ducks for cover*. I promise to amp things up after some much needed exposition! Promise! Hey, lookie...LOOK! Logan will even be shirtless! GLORIOUSLY SHIRTLESS! No! Put that chair down! How am I supposed to write if you hit me with it?!?!

Reviewer: RoseSumner Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/06/2011 9:51:02 AM Title: Chapter 8

Okay, I'm not going to lie.... I would totally be late on purpose for that meeting-in-the-garden. Mmmmmh....Punishing Logan.

I read this last night, but sleep deprivation kept me from reviewing--am surprised I was capable of such wise decision making. You might have logged on to find a review consisting of nothing but: "gleeeba libd cupcaaadfjljf rahr squeeee......"(

Author's Response: Thanks for emailing me the rest of your review. Jean's ghost can go re-drown herself instead of screwing with our posts. I agree with you though, I'd be hiding behind the petunias & chanting "take it off, take it off" like the perv that I am. Don't you worry, I just wrote some more shirtlessness, reflecting my overwhelming shamelessness. :D

Reviewer: jnet Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 9:48:30 PM Title: Chapter 8

Just read this for the first time tonite. I'm enjoying it very much and hope to see more soon. You said you have 12 chapters written, but I'm only seeing 8 on here. Get with the posting darn it! :)

Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad to have you on board! More will definitely be coming soon. I'm hoping to get one more chapter posted before I leave for spring break. As much as I want to feed you lovely reviewers with Rogan goodness, I desperately need the epic amounts of time I take to write. Having a few chapters stocked up helps with the pressure & let's me go back & make changes with fresh eyes.

Reviewer: Capt_Mackenzie Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 8:51:40 PM Title: Chapter 8

hee hee hee! The opening scene with Logan was seriously fun. It took me by surprise but, by the scene's end, I was wondering why I was surprised: it's such a typical Logan thing to do, really. Someone's in the middle of a temper tantrum? --Shock them back into a saner perspective!

Cute "thinking cap" visualization. I'd never thought of that, but it's true.

I'd love to see where you're going to take this concept from "A Study in Scarlet". It sounds like it's going to play an important part in the plot, farther down the road.

Author's Response: Yes! You have no idea how happy the "typical Logan" part of your review made me. I can only hope that I can capture Logan in my writing. He, like most of the X-Characters, has his quirks, but showing that in original print without falling back on a caricature is hard. And yes, the Wolverine does not do temper tantrums. And double yes, Marie is a fan of throwing them. I love the quote I found & used in Chapter 5 from A Study in Scarlet and I'm trying my best to work it in as well as I want to.

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 8:05:24 PM Title: Chapter 8

Love this:
Her poorly timed thoughts remind her that it’s the furthest she’s ever gotten with a guy.
Great chapter. The shower scene with Wolverine didn't quite live up to the potential there (kidding, of course) but I appreciate the slow build. Can I hope that you find your mountain man *and* he's a fanfic fan and encourages you to write more, and faster? They get wifi in the Columbia River Gorge, right?

Author's Response: Ah yes, her thoughts don't really help her out where Logan's concerned. That'll be happening more & more since scientific studies show that increased exposure to the Smexiness that is the Wolverine is correlated to decreased cognitive functioning. Wait, you're a Dr., you already know this! I know, I know - there's an X-Rated version of that shower scene playing out in some dirty corner of my mind with a "bow chicka bow wow" soundtrack. Hey, you keep hoping & maybe I'll find that mountain man - I *have* thought about that. And yes, my hotel has WiFi ;)

Reviewer: tamisnead Signed star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 7:54:48 PM Title: Chapter 8

Still really enjoying this story, I can't wait to see how Wolverine and Rogue interact next.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really glad you're still along for the ride! Don't throw something at me, but the next few chapters might be Rogan-Lite. There's some other things I need to take care of & explore, but after that they go toe to toe more & more. Just hang in there! Please!!

Reviewer: Melancholy Rogue Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 7:35:05 PM Title: Chapter 8

Aww, what a great chapter. I loved Logan and the little shower scene. And, I could just see him in Ro's garden. Tease indeed. ;)

Be safe on your trip! :)

Author's Response: I've been dying to get this shower scene to you guys & see what you all think. Granted, there's a whole 'nother shower scene playing out in the gutter of my mind....but that's not this story ;)

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 6:35:09 PM Title: Chapter 8

I like it. It's such a turning point for Rogue; until now she's been reacting rather than acting, just the way I imagine she would. This chapter is the first one where she's trying to really assert control over her own life. I like heroines with agency. :)

Author's Response: Yeah, she's been a bit of a brat. Who better than the Wolverine to put her in her place? She's treading a fine line between standing up for herself/making sure she doesn't get screwed over & ....well, being a brat.

Reviewer: Sidfictishous Signed star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2011 6:17:20 PM Title: Chapter 8

Great addition and I love the way this played out. Humor and angst...Is always a nice combo.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm never sure if I can balance the two.

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