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Date: 01/31/2011 9:25:34 AM Title: Chapter 5
Sat down and read through this story this morning (sleep, who needs sleep?) and I am LOVING the AU world you have built here. The inner voice you have for Rogue is perfect. I love the little commentary she has going at various times.
Logan is also very well done. His initial anger at Rogue was believable, and in character; as is the way you are detailing him slowly coming around in regards to her. (Also, love how Jubilee is obviously his sidekick in this one. Nice little comic references all around.)
Lastly, for whatever reason, I just ADORE his reaction to learning that she is 21. I can really see the expression on his face there, and it's kind of hilarious :-)
Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: I love that you love all of those things! (See, I'm not picky). I plan on throwing out some more comic references here & there if it suits the plot. I wasn't too sure about the age-revealing thing. It's hard not to give too much away and step inside Logan's head, which the POV of this story has no business being in. But yes, I'm sure that at Marie's admission Logan's libido perked up & went "Oh yeah?", while his rational side went "Oh shit." Glad you're liking it!
Date: 01/28/2011 9:19:43 PM Title: Chapter 5
I just wanted to let you know I am really enjoying this. This Rogue is just amount the right mix of brass and shyness for her background. I think that Carol is really interesting as well first as the rightnous aggressor and now as the source of selective information. I think I know what she is hiding. It will be interesting to see I am correct. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thank you for dropping a line & letting me know what you think about things so far. I'm super happy you think Marie is balanced out in this. I'm also very curious about your theory ;)
Date: 01/28/2011 10:16:23 AM Title: Chapter 5
‘I can't promise regular updates’ :( ‘I've got nearly 12 chapters written’ :)
Love reading Marie’s thoughts no matter what tone they take - sarcastic, humour, inquisitive, questioning, confrontational etc. there’s a mix of everything and I’m glad you’re taking the time to really show the reader what it’s like and how it is to function as/be Marie. The confusion in remembering which parts are her, the guilt/usefulness at knowing what she shouldn’t, how hard it is just to be, let alone doing it where she is etc.
Nice to see an increase of interaction between the two of them in this chapter, look forward to more (yeah, yeah I know it’s gonna be a gradual thing but I look forward to it none the less!)
Like the way you’re giving us glimpses of her life before without jumping completely away from the story to cover it.
“It is a mistake to think that that little room has elastic walls and can distend to any extent. Depend upon it, there comes a time when, for every addition of knowledge, you forget something that you knew before.” Love this because instead of thinking that she’s gonna lose herself, if she really thought about it this is the way out for her – she just needs to learn how to separate what she wants to keep and what she doesn’t. Enter stage left the prof. and his wisdom in the brain dept.
Roll on the next instalment x
Author's Response: I know, bad me. I didn't want you guys to think I just up & ditched you! My muse likes to take a lot of time off, but luckily I sat on this story for so long before posting, I've got quite a nice chunk written, which comes in handy during the semester. I'm thrilled you love the mix and that you don't think I'm dawdling by drawing things out so we can see all of the facets - not just to Marie, but with quite a few other characters as well. Sometimes I have to actually remind myself to put some Rogan goodness in because I get so caught up in the plot involving other characters & I don't want to relegate Logan to be the one who "rescues" Marie out of every situation. Does that make sense? You have me bouncing: I'm over the moon happy that you liked the little quote I threw in. The scene was already written before I found it & I couldn't believe how well it fit. I'm very interested in your take on the matter, too. True, that choice could be a way out for her, but there's a whole host of other things Marie has to work through before she can make a call like that. And of course I'm going to throw all of those problems at her. Will the Prof be able to help her on this one? Hmmm, we'll see! ;)
[Report This]Date: 01/28/2011 3:06:22 AM Title: Chapter 5
I'm really enjoying the character interactions here. Thanks for writing!
Author's Response: And thanks for reading, rating, & reviewing!
Date: 01/28/2011 2:16:42 AM Title: Chapter 5
So, I just read all 5 chapters in one sitting and actually said "WHAT?!?!?!" aloud when there wasn't a "Next" button for me to push at the bottom of the page. lol
I so love this story. Poor Rogue, that girl just never catches a break.
And, I'd be spilling my soup too if I saw a half naked Logan walking into my kitchen. (Shhh.. don't tell my husband... lol)
Seriously, this is a wonderful story and I anxiously awaiting the rest!
Author's Response: Don't you hate when that happens ;p Don't worry, you're secret is safe here since we'd all have that same reaction, I'm sure. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 01/27/2011 9:21:29 PM Title: Chapter 5
hey hun, just wanted to say how much i enjoyed this chapter. liked what you did with introducing the junior x-men and thought you got Storm down well. Am really looking forward to the next chapter :-)
Author's Response: I don't know if the choice of tense was any better than the previous chapters, but I'm glad you liked this. The next chapter is already off to the beta! Thanks for reading & reviewing :)
[Report This]Date: 01/27/2011 9:18:43 PM Title: Chapter 5
Oh, and the final scene deserves a round of applause all on it's own (three cheers and a bowl of lotion for a *glistening* Logan). Adored the entire dialogue between Logan and Storm--who you do particularly well, by the way.
Am crazy in love with the lines,
“She is eighteen. You two have had this conversation before. In fact, you’ve had this conversation with just about everyone. Loudly, too. It’s her decision.”
And, "
Something pounds against the counter, either Logan’s fist or the beer he grabbed from the fridge.
And about a thousand others, but I know how much you just *hate* those long, over-adoring reviews. ;~D
Author's Response: Quotes! Quotes! Quotes! Why is it that I covet these so much? Three cheers & a bowl of lotion, huh? Is that for Logan's enjoyment? Because if we're going for ogle-worthy Logan, I'm thinking something that isn't as absorbent. Is there any way I can believably work in a bottle of massage oil to this story? Maybe a gratuitous scene of him doing some yard work & then cooling off with a a quick spray of the hose? Oh damn.....I just woke up the chained-in-the-closet-smut bunny again...why does it insist on using stuffed animals in the donation pile to *show* me what it wants me to write? *IT'S SO WRONG!!* I'm going to just re-read your review a hundred times to get smut bunny's reenactments out of my head.
[Report This]Date: 01/27/2011 9:10:55 PM Title: Chapter 5
Question: Do you think Chris Hansen will make an appearance in our plot to obtain a certain NOM-inspiring feral, and, if so, will Hugh Jackman be in the back room and, if so, approximately how many nanoseconds to you think it will take us to reduce Mr. Hansen to a goopy pile of once-limbs and fecal matter?
Anyway...Another incredible chapter from an incredible writer of a magnitude that will later be studied like fossilized evidence of the Cambrian Explosion by future extraterrestrial archeologists and/or dolphins (who will lead the food chain after the revolution).
This chapter was such a marvelous treat to wake up to. (I dropped our emails like a flatulantly-inclined date when I noticed the update). You have the most wonderful sense of humor, laugh-out-loud lines that the reader can never predict. Fantastic character inflections and traits so fresh but so fitting, as ever.
And I know I say this every time, but your Logan--besides being prime material for the wake-up-with-a-smile dreams--can't be more perfect, more in tune with the Wolverine we all want to sink our teeth into. You're unbelievable, and I can guarantee that we will all be chewing our fingernails waiting for more.
Author's Response: I don't think Chris Hansen will give us a problem. True story: he came into a bar I worked at while I was in college, a bartender recognized him & asked him to do his "why don't you have a seat" line & he was happy to oblige. Considering he probably gets that all the time, it was nice that he was cool about it. So I'm pretty sure he'd look the other way in our case - he'd be off the clock, y'know? On another note, I don't deserve this beautifully written review. I deeply appreciate every word, particularly the "fresh and fitting" ones. Delivering a dream-worthy Logan is the least I can do for you.
Date: 01/27/2011 8:12:56 PM Title: Chapter 5
Still loving it! Lots of great lines, but I'll pick one I particularly loved:
The goddess inclines her head and unlike so many of the nonverbal head gestures she had been given in the past few days, this is more of a “won’t you accompany me?” and less of a “hop to, underling.” Marie appreciates that now that she has experienced the difference.
Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks! I love when reviewers point out what they loved. And honestly, just the simple "keep writing!" was enough to brighten my day!
Date: 01/27/2011 3:26:42 PM Title: Chapter 5
I love it so far. Its really interesting and your view into Marie's mind is great.
The only complaint I have is about the tense you are using. Or rather the multiple ones. lol some times you are using present tense and sometimes past tense and it is a little distracting to me. Stories read a lot better in the past tense.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're liking it so far and I want to thank you for sticking with it despite my errors. I flipped back & forth between past & present tense all throughout the first 4 chapters & when that was pointed out to me I chose to continue the rest in present simply because there were certain scenes that I just couldn't write in past tense. It's been a really hard decision - one that I'm still flip flopping on, so if my next update takes longer it's due to my indecision in regard to tenses & any subsequent overhauling of the 5 chapters posted so far. Probably more than you wanted to know, sorry for the rambling. Thanks again for the review :)
[Report This]Date: 01/27/2011 10:01:30 AM Title: Chapter 5
Wonderful story so far! Can't help but agree with JaqofSpades, would like to see a little of Wolverine's thoughts. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: I could have been more liberal with Logan's reaction, but I feel like his glowering during the kitchen scene was enough. In this fic there won't be any explanation of his *thoughts* because it's centered around Marie. So she's going to have to be like the rest of us non-telepaths & guess what the Wolvster is thinking, which is going to be hard since the only emotion he's comfortable showing is anger. Thanks for sticking with this story and reviewing!
Date: 01/26/2011 11:35:11 PM Title: Chapter 5
Oh, I laughed. I would have liked a bit more reaction from Logan - what does HE think of all the ogling - but this left me with a lovely anticipatory feeling. Especially now he know's she's not a kid :D
Author's Response: I'm glad I could make you laugh! I find that I can't write straight drama without injecting a little bit of comedy - or at least try to, anyway. Since this fic is based around Marie's perception of things there's never going to be anything from Logan's POV. So essentially, we're not going to know what the guy is thinking unless he can man up and say it. I feel like his glowering was just enough in the kitchen scene since anger is his go to emotion - he probably doesn't know what to think of Marie since she's not a kid, but she still killed Carol. Alas, we're not meant to know yet! Thanks for the review.