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[Report This]Date: 12/16/2010 11:43:20 AM Title: Chapter 2
Marie is such a little minx!! :)
Logan and her are so perfect for each other.. Ah, and of course, your story is just perfect too!
Date: 12/09/2010 4:28:23 PM Title: Chapter 2
Marie is so creative in ways of using a chair! Seriously, I admire that girl. Scott as a maid? Well, I suppose when you live with Dr. Gray...I kind of like him, actually. I always enjoy scenes when he lives Jean for somebody else. God, I'm such a *****
Author's Response: I don't think you're a ***** because I agree completely about Scott needing to get out from under Jean's thumb. Of course, Jean has never been my favorite person though, so there you go. Logan just thinks he is way too uptight and needs to let things go, even if they aren't perfect.
[Report This]Date: 12/09/2010 3:46:53 PM Title: Chapter 2
Oh, yeah, it worked alright. I literally laughed out loud through most of it -- Scott the 'good little maid'; Fire him? Call his mother?; Marie's first email --*still laughing*-- I'm guessing either Jubes or Kitty snapped that photo; they're the only two who could do it and expect to live through Logan finding out. I am LOVING this!
Two quick 'constructive criticisms':
I'm guessing you meant '...a perfect capture of the facets of Marie...', not faucets. She's got many attributes, but water taps are not among them. God, don't you just hate it when Spell Check refuses to read your mind?
And might I suggest putting the emails into italics or something to set them off? It took me a minute to get that 'Fine. Fine. Fine.' was the start of her second email and not him talking to himself.
Either way, I can't wait to see what she does next! --Wendie
Author's Response: Thanks for the suggestions! I'm gonna work on fixing them so hopefully it will be easier to understand for the next chapters. Also, facets was what I was going for... I guess that's what I get for writing at 4 am...