Hey there!

I'm really enjoying your story so far, and I haven't reviewed before because since there was nothing useful for me to offer it would've been rather pathetic of me to keep saying, "Loving this!" over and over once (maybe twice) per chapter.

I must say though, this chapter made me LMAO several times.

Logan's internalization especially.

I haven't been into the fandom for awhile now, but just had a hankering for some fic, and I'm glad I found yours. Back when I was into reading it (oh, a year or so ago), I would've loved to see a good fic that dealt with Wolvie and Gambit both vying for Rogue, and this is working itself out very nicely.

So anyway, the only critique I could come up with to comment on for this particular chapter was Gambit's line at the end there. I lived in New Orleans for 3 years (went to law school at Loyola -- right next to Tulane, which you mention -- and if you're still writing this, I would hope you mention Loyola, because there's a serious rivalry and I'll be a little peeved if you don't...Loyola is SOOO much better than Tulane, anyway! ;-P ). Anyway, as I was saying, I lived there for 3 years and one of my best friend is Cajun -- serious Cajun to the extent that when her grandmother (Cajuns call her "maw maw") talks to me too fast, I can't hardly understand her.

So yeah...the point being, the line should be "Laissez les bonnes temps rouler."

I also don't know how familiar you are to New Orleans slang, but people will also use other endearments other than "chere" and "petite", things like, "bebe", and "boo". And also, "cher" is not pronounced like the name, it's pronounced like, "shaa" by actual Cajuns, although I remember Gambit from the old X-Men cartoons pronouncing it like the French "cher" so I don't know if there's a difference there. I think there's some distinctions between "town Cajuns" (those that live in New Orleans and such) and "Bayou Cajuns." My friend's family are "Bayou Cajuns" and they use "shaa" and there's some other difference, like when I lived in New Orleans I got used to saying I was going to "make groceries" but she and her family say they're going to "make a [grocery] bill".

Another few terms and things I remember that you might like to pepper your story with:
"Yea, you right!" = in my experience, used like an "damn straight" elsewhere.
"F'true" = used like, "I ain't lying." when someone says, "are you kidding?" or "really?"
"ya mam n' dem" = used to inquire after someone's family.

And, that's all I can remember.

Sorry if it's presumptuous of me to offer this! You're doing a good job so far, but I wanted to offer you some options for the future if you haven't finished the story and if you feel they're useful! :)

Author's Response: hi emania, first of all glad you're enjoying the story, that's always nice to hear. especially one like this, because if the reader doesn't get behind it then it falls flat :-) as for the stuff about the Cajun dialect, i have to admit that i'm not terribly familiar with it. i'm irish so most of what i know about American idioms comes from TV or movies. (i actually have to catch myself using words like tap instead of faucet or fringe instead of bangs. hopefully little gets through). I have also never doubted that the way Gambit speaks in the comics bears very little resemblance (lol) to the way the actual Cajun community in the United States uses english. the language i use in the story reflects the comic books, which aren't realistic at all (you should look at how they used to write the irish character Banshee's dialogue); it's also why certain words are spelled phonetically. i can of course bear in mind what you have told me and i will, but i don't think that anything i write without first-hand experience of New Orleans like yours would come out realistically. my best hope is matches with the comic book world, which is the one i am more familiar with. Again, thank you for taking the time to review and point this out to me; i will bear it in mind, i'm just unable to make any promises. thanks again and hobbits away, hey!

Gasp! Drama!

Holy hell, woman! Of all the counter attacks I might have imagined Remy would launch...THAT was so far beyond the realm of possibilities it was totally in another universe. You really are the Queen of Twists.

The dance lesson, as anticipated, was enormously entertaining -- and proof, once more, that there really isn't anything he wouldn't do for her.

I ain't sayin' it'll be pleasant, but I am anxious to read about Logan's chin bouncing off the floor when Remy's surprise arrives... --Wendie