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Reviewer: litlen Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/21/2010 6:26:13 AM Title: Chapter 10

Ok first off – please no series. It’s either a complete story or not. I guarantee you we’ll all stick with this because it’s so bloody good and we’d all still be waiting impatiently for updates either way so there would be no point. Beginning/Middle/End with no repeats. jnet has pointed out two excellent longer stories as examples – and this is excellent, for those who like to get their teeth into a lengthier story the good ones are few and far between. Please let the fic take you wherever you want it to go and don’t worry about length - gaps in time and such can be accomplished without loosing any of the story. Basically if it’s finished it’s finished - if not then it’s not.

Now I’ve got that off my chest on with the chapter.

Very well done. A sensitive subject and harrowing experience handled superbly. Very brave too, not everyone would have the guts to do the details. I’m glad you did.
Little bit more background into her power in this one, it’s there if you search for it but it doesn’t scream at you, it's just quietly lying there under the surface. Great job as usual.

End ramble. (which would have ended a lot sooner if not for your end notes.)

Author's Response: Thank you!!! >glowing with pride< You're awesome<

Author's Response: Thank you!!! >glowing with pride< You're awesome.

Reviewer: Cherryblossom104 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/21/2010 4:26:19 AM Title: Chapter 10

Beautiful. I loved it!

Can't wait for their 'talk'.

Author's Response: Gracias!!!

Reviewer: jnet Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 10:41:15 PM Title: Chapter 10

With a story as wonderful as this, a large number of chapters is a good thing, means its not over before I want it. I like the longer stories. Frankenstien Effect....I never wanted this for you, for example.

Author's Response: I love you! Thank you....though Im a little puzzled--Frankenstein Effect?

Reviewer: Shuttlelauncher Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 9:59:28 PM Title: Chapter 10

Yet again you have just blown me away with your attention to detail and your amazingly descriptive writing style! I love this story so much and will continue reading even if there are a hundred chapters! Personally I like to read all stories, not just high ratings or high amounts of reviews because sometimes you strike gold like I did with this story in the beginning. Hope this helps!

Author's Response: This put tears in my eyes. Thank you so much!

Reviewer: Dita Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 9:56:03 PM Title: Chapter 10

Another great update. Totally worth the wait. I like the Logan who gets to use his claws. :)

To answer your 'over-obsessive side' - personally I like long stories. I usually search for them. So my vote is for long.

Author's Response: This was wonderful to hear. 'Tanks.

Reviewer: dulcesweet Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 8:27:52 PM Title: Chapter 10

another great chapter. a little confused at the ending not quite sure what happened?

I think it's a great fic, one of the best in a long time. However you want to handle this I think it'll will be alright. I'm always looking for updates on this story, so either way I'll still read this no matter how long you make it! can't wait to see where it goes from here!

Author's Response: I'm so sorry you found it confusing. Umm...she ran into her father in the hall, her skin switched on, and she nearly killed him. Logan fineshed the job. Thank you, a million times.

Reviewer: MoonlightStorm Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 8:18:05 PM Title: Chapter 10

Oooh, can't wait for more! And I, personally, hate series. I don't really see the need for them most of the time. I would rather have one long fic. But either way, I will keep reading. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! Im very grateful and will keep that in mind.

Reviewer: annie77 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 7:53:27 PM Title: Chapter 10

First of all thanks for 2 updates in 2 days and long ones! You're great.

This was a great chapter; though in the middle when you described what happened to the girl I felt kind of sick and I had to skip a couple of lines (then I got courage and read it all). Thing is when I'm reading this I feel like I'm inside the story and I feel what you describe so vividly, this is one of the many reason I love your writing (yes even if it made me feel sick I love it coz I know Logan will make it all better eventually).

About your last question; I don't think the number of chapters have an effect on the readers, I think whats important is the frequency of the updates and the number of reviews it gets. On the other hand I wouldn't mind if you turn this into a serie if you will. I will be hooked up with this story until the end whatever you do :D

Author's Response: Im sorry to sicken you, but glad I could do it--does that make sense? Thank you. >hugs< People like you keep me writing.

Reviewer: Oracle13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 7:45:42 PM Title: Chapter 10

Wow, another great chapter in another compelling story. It really makes my day when I get an email alert that you posted a new chapter! I'm really enjoying this story. I absolutely love your Logan and his relationship with Marie. Regarding your question about one long story or a sequel--I vote for one long story. Personally, I don't care how long a story is as long as it's good--which this is.

Author's Response: Reviews like yours make my day/week. Thank you, for your wonderfuk words and your vote.

Reviewer: sahara Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 7:43:56 PM Title: Chapter 10

First of all: again I'm running into the problem of not knowing what to say about the wonderfulness of your writing. Since anything I put down pales in comparison to your words. I looked over the previous reviews & your responses (because I'm a stalker, get that restraining order handy) - and for someone who doesn't have a personal history with this kind of trauma you are describing it perfectly.

Actually, my job is helping victims of sexual assault and when I read this I'm astounded at how well you're able to put words to something that is for the most part unspeakable. I mentioned the mind-body disconnect from last chapter, but the blinding clarity & unpredictability of panic attacks is also treated very well and realistically.

As for the bottom A/N: I think that dividing it up wouldn't hurt. I think I'm more inclined to read a series versus tackling a monster of a story. Sometimes it helps the reader with the transitions of the story too - if a lot's going to happen & there's a shift in tone (like maybe it starts out w/ awful circumstances like this & then everything starts looking roses for the characters & they heal & trust each other & kittens & rainbows...but I digress).

Also, when you described his fake-sleeping-concentration-face I totally pictured how he looked in the last pic I emailed you....except without the dripping beachy wetness.....ok time for different thoughts!

Author's Response: I'm having the same problem, trying to express how thankful I am for these beautiful reviews in a way I haven't used before. Thank you. I felt almost guilty describing an experience I haven't had, as if I have no right. You are always too awesome for words Sarah...and I was picturing the same thing!

Reviewer: bima140277 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 6:19:24 PM Title: Chapter 9

MORE!

and soon!

Author's Response: Lmao!

Reviewer: Wolverette Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 4:16:15 PM Title: Chapter 9

Another awesome chapter, beautifully written and so full of agony for the pair of them that I just want to cry myself to sleep. But wait, what's this? Oh, she's gone into his room! And wow, she actually trusts him enough to lie beside him in bed. I am now so full of hope that I just cannot wait for the next chapter! Please update soon!!

Author's Response: Not quite fineshed agony-wise just yet. Hang tight, and thank you a billion times for this.

Reviewer: Comic-cake Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 2:02:06 PM Title: Chapter 9

Firstly, I am sorry to hear about your friend. Life can be inexplicable and cruel.

“Sometimes she wished he would hurry up and hurt her, do whatever he wanted. She needed to get used to it.” – I’ve said it before, but you seem to know the words to break my heart. And there it is again. You deal with poor Rogue and her horrific experience so carefully, sensitively and unrushed, which is precisely how it should be handled.

“By the end of the program he could say how many times her eyes had watered, but not which team had won.” – I can just picture this scene, so moving.

I am SO excited that chapter ten may be up soon. I will keep checking for my alert like the crazed fan-girl I have become...

Author's Response: When I got home and saw the new review, I chanted, "Please be Comic-Cake. Please be Comic-Cake. Please be Comic-Cake. Please be--". And yay!! Thank you for being so kind. Im ALMOST done with chapter ten; I was only able to use the computer for an little while this morning. I had a dentist appointment--an hour of fingers and drills in my mouthe; the entire right side of my face is numb. Fun times. But I WILL have the chapter up today. I swear on Hugh Jackman.

Reviewer: litlen Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 9:49:20 AM Title: Chapter 9

This review is for free on account that when you convert dollars into pounds it doesn’t look quite so good!!

The first few para’s of this chappy get voted as outstanding, absolutely beautifully written, in depth and hard hitting. ‘The girl really didn't care. But she couldn't seem to send that message to the rest of her body’. Special mention for that bit because I loved that line.

This is all so new to him, so foreign - he doesn’t understanding why he’s doing it yet he wants it, craves it even, is even bribing for it - ‘A rather expensive cinnamon bun when he'd brushed his lips across her knuckles and she hadn't pulled away.’

I’m intrigued by the nightmare, could be hers or his. But, ‘He didn't see the shocked look that came over the girl's face and would have misinterpreted it even if he had.’ - would like to think she has a better understanding of what he is/can be compared to the way he is with her. No doubt I’ll find out but you really do get me thinking up all kinds of scenarios which is hard for the brain so early in the morning!

(Really tried not to do another rambling review – I guess I failed.....again....will try again with chapter 10 ) which btw cannot be posted soon enough :)

Sorry about the loss of your friend x

Author's Response: I will be greatly disappointed if you don't ramble--it makes me happier than Yogi Bear with a hundred picnic baskets...I'm very glad the opening came out well; I wrote and rewrote it several times. Good job on her dream--I don't think anyone else really picked up on that. Thank you so much! I hope you enjoy chapter ten.

Reviewer: lilmizz3vil Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 7:53:21 AM Title: Chapter 9

:-D xXx

Author's Response: Lol. Gracias.

Reviewer: ellebell Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 3:32:16 AM Title: Chapter 9

*click*

Well worth the wait.

Sorry to hear about your friend xox

Author's Response: Thanks, I really appreciate that. >hugs<

Reviewer: Cherryblossom104 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 3:27:25 AM Title: Chapter 9

HOLY SHIT! She actually got into the bed with him? That is a huge ass step for someone who has gone through what she has. I really can't wait to read the next chapter. I hope she learns to trust him fully, it would be a real shame if she didn't.

Author's Response: Thanks! I really hope you enjoy the next chapter!!!

Reviewer: mina113er Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/20/2010 12:42:36 AM Title: Chapter 9

I don't want dollar, I just want another chapter.
It's 6.30 in France, everybody sleep and I'm reading your story with a coffee. It's gonna be a good day.

Author's Response: Thank you for making me smile at the computer screen. You have a real talent for that.

Reviewer: tamisnead Signed star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/19/2010 11:04:58 PM Title: Chapter 9

I was really happy to see this update, please update again soon, I can't wait to see where this is going.

Author's Response: For once I'm actually able to give you "soon". >happy dance< Thank you!

Reviewer: Freespirit Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/19/2010 10:47:45 PM Title: Chapter 9

Hey Rose!!

Great chapter! I really loved it.
Fav' line: " All of his pre-programed comforting techniques were those of an animals, and required the skills of his flesh."

I love the Logan you're painting in this story and all the tenderness he so grudgingly develops for our Girl!

Can't wait for next chapter!!

Free

Author's Response: Keep leaving reviews like this and I'll be forced to track you down just so I can hug you in person. Muchas Gracias and a virtual hug.

Reviewer: Silvereyes Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/19/2010 10:41:52 PM Title: Chapter 9

Sorry to hear about your friend... but you still managed to pound out another amazing chapter. Don't know if I could have done it. Loved how this one ended. Glad to see she's trusting him again.

Author's Response: >hugs< Thank you. I am so very glad to know you liked it.

Reviewer: sahara Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/19/2010 8:51:26 PM Title: Chapter 9

Oh Em Gee. Those first sentences. That's just...well...I can't tell you how great just those first sentences were...you used up all the good words & I've got none left to tell you how much your writing rocked in this chapter.

I deeply appreciate how dead on your description is of the mind-body disconnect someone would experience after what Marie's been through.

"Hiding when protests hadn't helped her. Logan pretended she was nuzzling him." Some of my insides actually ached at the last line.

And the lines about recovery, drawing into herself like anyone who grew up there would do. Then...then you threw in the line about the crops & a looting army....that's up on my list with the very first sentences of this chapter. Brilliant. Your best writing in this chapter. Really. This is pretty gritty & I love that you're digging deep & just going there.

(Sorry about the multiple deletes & resubmits of this review - the site is being weird for me)

I'm sorry about your loss & tough couple of weeks. I'm hoping some reviews & thoughts of nakie-Logans help crack a smile now & then.

Author's Response: The site gremlins (or maybe it's the ghost of Jean?) always have it in for you, don't they? Even though they/she don't seem to like seeing you succeed in posting, I'm always ecstatic. Thank you so very much. You have a gift for making me bounce in my chair.

Reviewer: DarkDragonfly Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/19/2010 8:31:53 PM Title: Chapter 1

I am so sorry for my previous insensitive comments, I am so sorry to hear of your friends passing.

Once again, this story is just wonderfully written and I was so excited to see the update in my email.

I am a rape/abuse survivor and I have held my tongue on making any comments to the fact but I have to say you do a very accurate job of portraying the inner turmoil of the situation.

Author's Response: Oh, no. Don't be! I was very happy when I got your review; I'm always terrified that people will lose interest when I do not update right away. I just wanted you to know that there was a real reason for my lack of a post. Thank you to the infinite degree....And I am so, so, so sorry to hear that. I'm glad you think I've handled her situation appropriately; I would never wish to undermine/disrespect such a traumatic event. Personally, it's not something I have ever been through--though this feels almost horrible to say. I did not want to-what's the word?-misrepresent myself.

Reviewer: Wicked Signed star star star star [Report This]
Date: 09/19/2010 8:23:46 PM Title: Chapter 9

Wonderful. Seriously. I really can't find anything in this story that I don't like. Dependent Rogue works for me in this case (and normally I have issues with it) - but this is probably because I know just how much rape can traumatize a person. And Logan is behaving so gallantly. Really - well done on all accounts. Rogue's reaction is completely believable, Logan's care for her not at all OOC in the world you've created, and the writing nearly flawless. Thanks for the update! And I'm sorry to hear about your friend. Take all the time you need to mourn - we totally understand!

Author's Response: I've been sitting here (when I should be typing up a certain something else) trying to think of a way to write thank you, since you cannot hear my happy screams. But there's nothing suitable for just how grateful I am. Thank you. >hugs very, very tightly<

Reviewer: annie77 Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 09/19/2010 8:23:21 PM Title: Chapter 9

Aw shes trusting him finally, loved the last part!! Pleaseee update the second part tonight? :) Thank you!

Author's Response: Thank you!!!! >hugs< I'll try my very best, but I think it'll probably be tomorrow. The screen is starting to blurr...

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