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Reviewer: sahara Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/09/2011 12:18:34 PM Title: Epilogue

Uterus Dinosaur is very pleased. He has not tried to stomp on any jeeps or eat any goats since reading this.

I'm soooooo sooooo happy you were okay with my comments & worked them in where you felt they were needed. Glad to be of any help. Kind of selfish on my part since I want to gobble this story up. That may be Uterus Dino talking.

"Marie ran her fingers over the top of the closest, stirring the scent of voices in her head that wanted to talk about cabins and raw animal flesh and how a tree sounded when it dropped it's weight to the Earth. Marie felt the corners of her lips rise, crinkle unaccustomed flesh." I perked up at this. Maybe you're secretly unleashing the little bits of primitive feral goodness in all of us.

"A petal-soft palm stroking silky wood, the unique swirl set in her fingertips catching on the pine's grains, creating music for Logan's straining ears like the friction between grasshopper legs, like a rosined bow on a cello." I could actually picture him sitting on his bed, eyes closed, ears cocked, listening to her. I don't know how you do it - & believe me, when I went over this I tried cracking your code, but I still don't know how you're able to turn words into something very visual.

I'd put quotes about the ending, but I'd end up copy/pasting the whole damn thing. Like I said, I love how you approached the Smex-Lite - and that you went with the Lite version instead of the calorie heavy Full Brew Smut. Anything carnal wouldn't have felt right or true to the story or the development of the characters. So, putting the possibility - one day - spin on it was a very smart choice. And just the way it was written was the absolute perfect mix of tender and thrilling.

I didn't get to this in the email - just remembering it now, but I don't think Logan has gone soft here. He's always played it reserved with Marie throughout this & I think it holds true here. Like you said, "he knows what he's doing." He knows how to - seduce? which isn't the right word I want to use - but do it keeping her history & subsequent needs in mind. It's calculating in a way, not soft.

Sad to have this end, but I'm excited for all of the possible new bunnies that will spring up around your home ;)

i love that you're serenading your dog to that song.

Author's Response: I love your uterus dinosaur! (...Can honestly, without a doubt or hesitation, say that I have never said that to anyone in my entire life before. Three cheers for firsties!) This review made me cross my arms over my chest and fall backwards in a euphoria, hammer my heels against the floor like the happiest epileptic seizure ever. Thank you. I'm so glad you liked it....and that you picked up on the kitten-thing this time. ;~D

Reviewer: Wanderlust Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/09/2011 12:03:16 PM Title: Epilogue

Thank you for this story, for finishing this story in a hopeful way. I have to admit, at one point I had to just stop reading it chapter by chapter and just wait till you'd finished the whole thing. There was just too much tension for me to handle without closure. :) So I've been waiting to see "Complete: Yes" for quite some time. And here it is. Ahhh. Thanks.

Author's Response: I know exactly what you mean. This thing has been quite a roller coaster, but I'm glad you are pleased with the result and hope you received all you were hoping for regarding "closure". Thank you.

Reviewer: tamisnead Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 02/09/2011 10:34:24 AM Title: Epilogue

I think you came up with the perfect ending to this story. Possibly the only way it could end and feel true. Any attempt to have them fall into bed and magically be able to forget past damage would have left a bitter, false note.

Author's Response: Oh my god. This meant more to me than I could even attempt to describe--it's exactly what I was worrying/hoping to accomplish. Thank you, thank you, thank you. >hugs tightly<

Reviewer: Cherryblossom104 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 02/08/2011 5:59:48 PM Title: Chapter 20

This was one of my favorite stories ever. And now it's over. Imma cry. I don't want it to be over! ;_______; It was a wonderful story Darling! Thank you for the beautiful words and the hard work.

Author's Response: Thank *you*. I'm glad this could be anyone's favorite--the work is nothing compared to this kind of reward.

Reviewer: Oracle13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/03/2011 9:01:10 AM Title: Chapter 20

Wow, what an amazing chapter! Loved seeing Marie realize how important Logan is to her and her attraction to him. God, I felt so bad for Logan--struggling to control himself and pain he felt when she told him to stop and he had to let go.

I hope this is not the end, that you will at least write an epologue (hopefully a lengthy one too). Please don't leave it here. I hope that they can work things out and find some happiness together.

BTW, your writing is fantastic! So descriptive and vivid that it's very poetic. I hope you add another chapter and I also look forward to your next story.

Author's Response: I'm so sorry this took so long to answer--site neglected to send me the usual alert, but I was happy beyond happy to see this. Thank you; you've made a crappy day much brighter. I am working on the epilogue now; it won't be long but it should tie up a few loose ends. Should have it up by next Sunday, if not sooner.

Reviewer: Shuni Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/01/2011 3:21:19 PM Title: Chapter 1

Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeell.....

First of all, great chapter. Very emotional, both Logan and Marie.

But really, this story is not finished at all! You could write (probably you've allready done it) a fluffy epilogue, but I have to agree with one of the earlier reviewers, that wouldn't do justice to the rest of the story. There are so many thoughts that have to be thought by both of them, so much important stuff they have to talk about. I mean, Marie ran away from him because she was afraid of him. It cannot all be solved by him saving her. Nevertheless she was raped and nevertheless she was hardly able to cope with it untill now. She is so fragile and unsure of herself, she has to gain some strength and some self respect (especially when it comes to Jubes >.>)
They have to gain an emotional closeness that's not there yet because they hardly talked.
I wonder what the ending will look like and I cannot imagine how you are going to put all the development the characters (still) have to go trough into an epilogue, which doesn't mean that it might not be possible. I'm just wondering.

And at the end I hope everything I said made sense to you xD

My best wishes,
Shuni

Reviewer: litlen Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/01/2011 6:25:03 AM Title: Chapter 20

I know you love lines so here’s a few to start.....‘sections she had previously skipped with a rare, silent anger and the desire to insist, aloud, "No. That's not how it happens." She read these, and tried to understand.’ There’s so much sadness in this line, sadness for what has happened and for not understanding what is happening. How the former has seemingly ruined any chance of the latter.

‘raindrops racing their siblings on every window’ this one just because it gave such great visuals.

"If it will make him stay.", she sought for her nerve but found it shivering in a corner.’
‘when this was over she would go up to Logan's room. He was waiting for her, and she would be safe there.’ Absolutely love the contrast and the transition in Marie’s thinking that happens from the first line to the second. Both completely heart-breaking in their own way.

‘She smelled of fear, of vomit, of pain, of peaches and vanilla and ocean and of things dying and dead and his.’ This one because it surprised me! the list was long enough that the end,[ the *his*] was unexpected but unbelievably right.

This chapter had so much happening, so many details. A more in-depth, complex read than the others. Nicely linked to the statue although I’m hoping that the story we know from that point is not where you’re going as I can’t see either of the characters you’ve built fitting in with that. Looking forward to the epi. Well done x

Author's Response: It is completely, disgustingly shameful how much I love quotes. This? This will have me bouncing off the walls for hours. Thank you, Litlen. I'm glad you enjoyed it. (And no, this will not continue along the rails of X1.)

Reviewer: alesia Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 11:30:55 PM Title: Chapter 20

I really liked the way you did this. I knew we would see Magneto in some way but I wasn't expecting the Statue of Liberty. I like that you choose that, it was familiar but still different. I like how you put this together, you have kept the flow consistent throughout the piece. I like how you didn't bill this as a retelling of the movie. I am looking forward to the epilogue.

Author's Response: Fantastic--that was exactly what I was trying to get across. I'm so, so, so incredibly, extraordinarily glad you feel that way. Thank you!! >hugs<

Reviewer: i-am-the-wolf Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 8:27:55 PM Title: Chapter 20

YAY!! I was so happy when I saw this story was again in the listings -- had to go through some of the chapters as a re-cap though... memories not the best thing.

Probably my fav paragraph was this part:
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Atop the torch, wind and those blades of metal whipping around her in unnamed colors that lived at the far end of the spectrum.

When the pain obliterated every other thought, the girl found herself thinking, musing, that when this was over she would go up to Logan's room. He was waiting for her, and she would be safe there.
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But yeah, can't wait for the next chapter, even if it means it'll be the last chapter. Hope you write another fic after this one though :)

-- Wolf

Author's Response: Oh, mess. Thank you! I bounced in my seat (seriously irritating the cat on my lap) when I read this). Working on the epilogue now; will try to have it up as soon as possible. >hugs tightly<

Reviewer: annie77 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 6:06:27 PM Title: Chapter 20

"If not, I suppose is up to us to guess what happened next and Im also cool with that." No no no nooo! I was totally lying! LOL. I do want the epilogue, the smut and the very happy ending, please *I beg you* So dont you dare on hesitating with that very long epilogue!
(I wish there was something as the Youtube thumbs-up to say "The readers who agree with me thumbs up!" I know I would get quite a few! ;)
PS: and thanks for the dedicatory intention!

Author's Response: LOL!!! Alrighty then! Thank you for such ferocity. I'm about 75% for the epilogue now. (Fickle? Yes, I am.) It is wonderful to know that you are behind it.

Reviewer: Capt_Mackenzie Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 1:09:54 PM Title: Chapter 20

I am not happy to see this end. And not only b/c I am attached to the tale -- but b/c the Rogan relationship is going to go thru some seriously messy changes after this -- and with the brokenness and ineffectual people skills of both parties, it's probably going to be a slow evolution in fits and starts. I'd really hate to see all that glossed over in a little epilogue. It wouldn't do all of this previous effort justice! Why end this where the movie ended? This story is NOT LIKE the movie -- not at ALL -- and so it doesn't feel appropriate to place an artificial-type ending here! CAn't you give it another chap or two to flesh out how those two will DEAL with all this new crap dumped on them?

Reviewer: Kelly_Pickles Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 1:05:46 PM Title: Chapter 20

wow best story i've read so far

Author's Response: Really???? >sqeals with glee< Thank you! (But you must not have read Aranenumanesse or Jenn yet.)

Reviewer: Capt_Mackenzie Signed star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 12:56:42 PM Title: Chapter 20

The things Jubilee thinks ... I truly did not expect that, even of her! --and especially I didn't expect Marie to draw such a conclusion from her comments, that she should offer herself to Logan! You surprised me again and again with the way this all turned out (certainly not unpleasantly so).

The X1 scene rewrites were well-performed. I know (from seeing so many others fail at the attempt) how hard it is to keep faithful to the tone of your own writing while you're incorporating someone else's script. But you succeeded by not copying TOO MANY lines, and keeping the perspective tightly on your girl.

I like that you NEVER say the girl's name, whether Rogue or Marie, until Logan breathes it like a prayer to her dead body on the torch. I had begun to wonder if you were going to give her a different name!

Reviewer: bima140277 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 12:55:18 PM Title: Chapter 20

Wow what a chapter!!!

Can't wait for the epilogue.

Author's Response: Thank you!!!!!

Reviewer: anna_k Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 12:30:23 PM Title: Chapter 20

This is one of the best fictions I've ever read. So realistic. I felt like I was reading a novel and thank you very much for writing it.

Author's Response: Aawwwwww!!!! Thank you, I'm so proud of this--thought about this all day. :~D

Reviewer: tamisnead Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 12:23:38 PM Title: Chapter 20

I was so, so glad to log in and see that this story had been updated. I'm only sorry that I missed it yesterday. I thought you handled Marie's attempt to make love with Logan beautifully. As much as I love Rogan smut it would have felt untrue if they had simply fallen into bed and spent the night going at it like bunnies.

Author's Response: Thank you! Oh, lord. That means so much. I spent an entire week struggling with that scene. >hugs<

Reviewer: bima140277 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 11:57:34 AM Title: Chapter 19

Jubes deserves a kick in the ass.

Poor Logan... he can be such a gentleman... don't tell him I said/wrote that ;)

Reviewer: bima140277 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 11:29:07 AM Title: Chapter 18

Awww happy birthday Marie :)

Reviewer: Tamana Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 11:21:16 AM Title: Chapter 20

(Please don't freak out by this review)

First of all, I squealed like a little girl (i'm 20 though) when I saw the new chapter was up.

Then I read it. Then I fell in love with you. All over again.
So... I love you.
I have a girl-crush on you. Is that weird? It certainly isn't weird for me, because.... well... why wouldn't I fall for someone like you? You amaze me every single time you put up a new chapter. You almost attack me with all these surprises that I hit the ground so hard I pass out! Just as I think (and secretly hope) that everything's gonna be OK, you complicate things! You annoy me by your over complicated changes and twists. You're so annoying. And so annoyingly good at writing! Ugh!! I hate you. But I also love you.

I don't know how I feel about this fic. I used to love it. I think I still do. But its sad to know that this will end soon. So I'm confused, because a part of me wants you to update so I get all the answers I want, like "will everything be ok? will Marie know how much Logan likes her? will Marie ever be comfortable with *those* kinda activities?"
Then, there's the other part of me who doesn't want you to update for a long time.. cause then I can enjoy this for a lil longer.

Nonetheless, this was an amazing chapter. I love how you're portrayed Logan in this one. That its not easy for him to stop doing what he's doing; you've made him look so human - despite the fact that he's anything but that. I mean, even though he's so buff and strong and stubborn and confident, around Marie he's so not all that.. he's so human. And the fact that the girl is still afraid of those kinda touches etc. is so realistic. I can't imagine a better way to have described that.

Now back to my girl-crush.. I don't even know you, but I'm so proud of you. I'm so damn happy that I got to experience your stories - particularly this one. You, ma'am, are a VERY talented writer. Have you considered publishing works outside fanfics? Cause if you do, I'm 99% sure that you'll do a great job!

To answer your question, YES; it was worth waiting :) oh and did I mention that I love you? hahaha :D

Author's Response: Freaked out? I am incandescently happy. Completely understand what you mean, though I'm skeptical that my writing could honestly produce that response--it's how I always feel toward reviews and reviewers as spectacular as this and you. I'll be rereading this for the next decade or so (more or less). Thank you, a thousand times and fifty or so more after that.

Reviewer: bima140277 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 11:04:29 AM Title: Chapter 17

A little possessive Mr. Logan ;)

Reviewer: MoonlightStorm Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 3:31:44 AM Title: Chapter 20

Aaaaaaah, amazing! I hope we won't have to wait long to find out what happens next! :D

Author's Response: Aaaaaah, thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :~D

Reviewer: Lorelai Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 3:21:47 AM Title: Chapter 1

It's stunning. Truly stunning. You're such a wonderful writer and have such an evocative way with words. You put together words in new and fresh ways I've never seen before. I love your way of describing things, and this story especially has the power to tug at my heart and make me feel physically distressed by the characters distress. I know real life gets in the way but, like all my favorite authors, it's so hard to wait for you to update! Thanks for managing to update and for continuing to write and post even though life is stressful. You really should be published!

Author's Response: Thank you, for each and every word of this beautiful review, a hundred bajillion times. "New and fresh" is the highest praise a writer can receive, and I could not be more grateful. I'm happy you enjoyed this story, and hope you find thousands more that elicit the same pleasure.rn

Reviewer: baybelletrist Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 1:34:18 AM Title: Chapter 20

yes, his fist could indeed move faster than Scott's hand to his visor, and that Jean possessed a shockingly vast vocabulary of obscenities.

This made me laugh hysterically. Well played!

What he wanted now, to hear her organs shift and gurgle and pump, to feel her move, breath, made all other pain that had ever touched his body or his mind nothing, as if they were erased from his body's memory to fit this new colossal agony. All previous desires were gifts, now offered to replace the rejection of this one.

Oh... just... wow. This is amazing. Really this entire story has been amazing. I'm sad it's nearly over; you're still planning an epilogue, right? (Which will feature Sahara's kittens and daffodils, no doubt.)

The not-actually-smut scene worked amazingly well, BTW. I just couldn't have seen her going through with it after the trauma she'd suffered.

Thank you so much for writing.

Author's Response: I am quite partial to kittens and various floral matter, but am currently on the fence about the epilogue. Please forgive me. This wonderful review made me bounce in my seat, dance on the way to get a glass of milk from the kitchen. Thank you, thank you, thank you.

Reviewer: annie77 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/31/2011 12:58:21 AM Title: Chapter 20

One of the things I admire of your writting is that you surprise me everytime. When I thought I had an idea of how things were gonna end you create this whole chapter. A clear example is the akward situation when Logan showed his flaws and scared Marie away. I wanted to punch him in the face but at the same time the whole situation and Logan's reaction made total sense and showed credibility. The big difference between a fluffy rogan fic and a mature complex story.

Then you really got me when she was kidnapped. At first I thought it was Logan acting as if nothing had happened which made me mad, and then I thought he had lost it completly and was kidnapping her to take her to Canada with him or something lol. Just a prove of how your writting triggers actual reactions.

I also liked Jubilee's drunk scene. It clearly showed the emotional state of the girl. So she was jealous of Marie after all, because of the emotional contention she didnt have. I really enjoyed how you've portraited Jubilees' character all along. You create complex characters and work on them, and that makes us analyze their actions and interactions – sometimes with just a few words.

When I was reading the story past the half, I was expecting things start working out -somehow- but all the opposite happened. Things started to declieve, Logan/Marie relationship was in the unknown, then she was kidnapped and when I checked there was like only 50 words left. I was totally lost, I didnt know if this was the actual end of the story or not. I was like “How can this story end when everythings looking so bad?”. But let me tell you just like another reviewer said I prefer a believable ending than a forced happy one. But I can't deny I love happy endings, specially in a story like this that was filled with so much suffering from both parts.

All in all I loved this chapter though I feel like you end it in a cliffhanger. Like there are important questions unanswered: How did they survive their relationship after what happened? Could he forgive himself? Did he stay? If he didn't, how did Marie managed to stay in the mansion? Etc. I hope you write an epilogue so you can give this amazing story a more concice ending. If not, I suppose is up to us to guess what happened next and Im also cool with that.

Final words; I enjoyed this story a lot it was a long process, 6 month cant believe it but totally worth! You have an amazing talent and I look forward reading more of your stuff – rogan or original work. Thanks!

Author's Response: Oh, mess. I'd meant to dedicate this chapter to you. Darn it! Might have to go back....I'm so happy, reread this over and over. Glad you liked it--glad? Incandescently pleased fits better--and am so, so grateful that you took the time to make my day. I fully intended to write an epilogue, to tie up the loose ends and give poor Logan a little smut to nibble on, but now I'm not entirely sure. Still debating. :~)

Reviewer: DarkDragonfly Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 01/30/2011 11:42:54 PM Title: Chapter 1

Ah, I too have recently discovered Hyperbole and am too addicted, she brings up some good points about spiders.

I can honestly say the only reason I was able to stop myself from posting and demanding to know why you had us waiting so long for an update was because I was sad to see this story end but you have not disappointed as usual.

I have said this before but your writing is so detailed and vivid that I tend to not realize that Im reading not watching this story unfold.

I have really enjoyed this story and cannot wait to read your next contribution to this fandom.

Author's Response: Ohhhh my god, I know, right? Have you read her Nativity Re-enactment?Her writing just has that quality, where you're just *devouring* every word and, like a greedy parasite, only hungry for more. Had a bit of a meltdown when I reached the last of her posts.....>clears throat<....ANYWAY. Thank you, thank you. It is physically impossible to express how your words made me feel. >hugs super tight<

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