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Reviewer: Tasa Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/05/2010 11:56:30 PM Title: Chapter 17

Wow! I couldn't imagine doing all that work to get to a computer to write like you did - that's dedication. Thank you!
I don't want this to come to an end, please don't let it end! pleasepleaseplease.
Also, I'm a little slow, but I can't quite catch what the book part with Erik was about. =(
Though, as others have also mentioned, "It was hard to tell which of the two girls better handled their loneliness." That line? Killer. It really made Jubilee sound less like a jerk, and more like someone that needs a hug too.

Awesome writing, as always. *heart*
(you may have received two notifications for this, I deleted & re-posted to fix a typo)

Author's Response: I'd worried that some people would be confused. Sorry! It's my fault making it clear enough. He dropped the book to startle Marie, try to activate her mutation. Thank you!!!! >hugs<

Reviewer: askita Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/05/2010 4:34:01 PM Title: Chapter 17

Oooo.... I like this. Bobby is the erfect distraction/annoyance for this Wolverine. Stupid Erik, makes me want to beat him in the head with that book. I love it. Defiantely more whenever you can.

Author's Response: Thank you very, very much.

Reviewer: askita Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/05/2010 2:38:56 AM Title: Chapter 13

I liked the meeting, and I dislike the professor. but i like fics where he's not a paragon of goodness. I can't believe a man in his position would be so. *grin* Great job!

Author's Response: Yeah. I used to be a big Chuck fan, til one day I thought, *What if??* And I could never go back.

Reviewer: askita Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/05/2010 2:09:06 AM Title: Chapter 11

So, i like it. I'm a litle wary, because my favorite stories don't involve the X-Men in these situitations, but I don't feel like it won't work for this one, so I'm also kinda excited. Off to the next chapter.

Reviewer: sahara Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/04/2010 11:55:58 AM Title: Chapter 17

Am more than happy to provide you with *days* of procrastination. It's the very least I can do.

"Like a glass wall had fallen between himself and almost everybody else...." This and the following lines I really liked. I had this image in my head when I was reading the scene and it's like your words *knew* that during the set up & then laid it out perfectly in worded form.

"Heat sitting smugly on his shoulders." Smug is so right here. You find the most perfect words for even the tiniest of sentences that still pack a punch of description.

"Breathless after only fifty yards or so. Pussy." and "He didn't like how the boy stuck out his chest, as if hairless was a thing to be proud of." Lol-ed for real at these two lines. Thoroughly appreciated the subtle shout out to The One True Chest. *Bows head, gives thanks for it*

I realized early on while reading this chapter that the way you write is like overdosing on something really really good (like chocolate lava cake..droooooools). Your descriptions, words choices, usage, & construction are just *too* good. And it's seamless, not overworked; it doesn't read like you're trying to hard to make the words do what you want them to do (even though I know you have a permanent dent in your head from the desk bangage while writing). So I hope that makes sense.

I also had to point this out: "Drover her in his pickup so she wouldn't have to sit with the others in the van." I know you meant drove, but Freudian slip maybe? ;p Someone been watching Australia, hmm? This just proves that you're brain is All Jackman, All The Time. *No Rest For The Obsessed!!!!!* I *love* it and I'm proud to serve in the SCC along side you. *wipes tear*

Author's Response: This review made me genuinely "WOOT", and I'm not much of a wooter. Thank you for bringing out the woot in me, Sahara. Am always grateful and happy to hear your thoughts on a chapter. >hugs<.....And was totally thinking of you and the SCC when the hairless line was being scribbled. ;~D

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/04/2010 11:24:45 AM Title: Chapter 17

Congrats on the new hardware! And you have certainly used it to great advantage with this chapter. I detected a much lighter tone in this than in most of what has come before, but your descriptive powers and your character insight are still, as always, razor sharp. One line in particular reached out and clocked me right across the chin:

It was hard to tell which of the two girls better handled their loneliness.

Love that interpretation of Jubilee's attitude. I wonder which one of them will be the first to try to bridge that sadly unnecessary gap.

Jean's jealousy is obvious and I'm glad it's cost her, but I'm sorry it had to affect Marie as well. And that scamp Erik...Naughty, naughty.

I am fascinated to see how the whole 'Bobby' issue plays out. Lord, there are so many layers to that 'triangle' that it could make a whole other story. Her need to connect in a 'healthy' way with a boy her own age...Logan's conflicted emotions -- does he let her explore those feelings with no interference from him, even though it will kill him to hold back? Or does he hover and intimidate out of a forbidden jealousy he can't acknowledge even to himself? And how will he stand the wait for all the years between now and when she's legal?

Oh, the anticipation... --Wendie

Author's Response: Your chin? Ouch. No ice in my fridge, but here's a bag of peas. Fanfiction can be so brutal sometimes, can't it? Thank you for the stupendous review (very rare adjective for me, saved for only special occasions--am more of a awesome/great/pimpalicious kinda girl). >hugs<

Reviewer: askita Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/04/2010 2:49:41 AM Title: Chapter 7

That was great Really, quick and awesome vengance is always fun. And then they emotion is really very bueatiful.

Author's Response: Super mambo gracias!!!!!!

Reviewer: askita Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/04/2010 1:48:25 AM Title: Chapter 2

I love it. *fangirl squee*

Author's Response: Every time somebody says the word "fangirl" I just about lose my mind with all the bouncing around 'n squealing. Gracias.

Reviewer: askita Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/04/2010 1:38:13 AM Title: Chapter 1

This is a really good start And personally, one of my favorite themes. I'm not going to be reviewing constantly, since I'm so behind, but I'll be doing it periodically. Or when a line strikes me.

Author's Response: Thank you. I am grateful for each and every word of each and every review, always.

Reviewer: annie77 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/04/2010 12:51:21 AM Title: Chapter 17

Aw Logan is so cute! Really I love him being so cranky around everyone and so careful and nice with the girl at the same time. And the fact he doesn't even know why he acts that way (or he doesn't want to think much about it) is just great! your Logan is my favorite ever. And I just noticed lately the last parts of your chapters are my favorite too, coincidence? I don't know, it is too late in the night to make any sense lol.

Great job as always and congrats on the new laptop!

Author's Response: The last parts of the chapters are normally my favorite parts as well, as long as the inspiration holds. It's where I'm starting to dig my teeth in--so of course that's where it has to end. I loved this, and I'm so glad you feel that way. Thank you very uber muchas super much.

Reviewer: notmyself Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/04/2010 12:40:49 AM Title: Chapter 17

Thank you for writing.

~Mia

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. <3

Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/03/2010 10:51:57 PM Title: Chapter 17

another wonderful, beautiful chapter! i love how protective, possessive and wonderful logan is with her. she better not get with bobby! but jean, grrr, such a martyrdom complex. please update again soon!

Author's Response: >bounces, hugs< Thank you. This was the first review I read this morning, and it put a great big smile on my face. >hugs again<

Reviewer: Tasa Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 12/01/2010 11:47:58 AM Title: Chapter 16

Oh my god you can't leave it at this! This is tortureeeeee.
I haven't been lurking, I promise. I let a few chapters build up so I could get a good dose of Rogan-y goodness. Mmmm. Can't wait for more. :D
Also, either I'm blind, or that image link didn't work again. :

Author's Response: Don't worry, I think (hope) everybody will be satisfied by the time this ends. And judging from the surprising length of certain scenes, its now looking like two or three chapters. :-) Thank you uber much; I'm happy that you like it....and you're not blind, I just can't get the link right. :-(

Reviewer: justanji Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/29/2010 3:27:26 AM Title: Chapter 16

Ooooooooohhhhh *squee*

Author's Response: Lol. Thank you.

Reviewer: Cherryblossom104 Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 11/25/2010 11:50:23 PM Title: Chapter 16

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE tell me that the reason nothing was happening is because Logan is the only person she trusts!

Author's Response: Uh-uh. Nope. Not telin'. You'll never get it out of me. Never!

Reviewer: WitchBaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/24/2010 2:41:04 PM Title: Chapter 16

amazing!!!! so cannot wait to see rogue and logan's relationship develop further, from guardian to friend to eventually more!

Author's Response: Thank you!! You'll be seeing a whole lot of that in the next chapter. ;~)

Reviewer: notmyself Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/23/2010 3:13:16 PM Title: Chapter 1

De nada, querida.

~Mia

Reviewer: Oracle13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/23/2010 3:10:58 PM Title: Chapter 16

I can't tell you how psyched I was to see that you posted two chapters. I really love how Logan is so sweet and protective. The closet scene was just awesome!

Now about your comment about how you're going to wrap up this story in one or two chapters, I don't think anyone's going to disagree with you if you decide to write MORE than 1-2 chapters. Hell, I'd be happy if you wrote another 10-50 chapters! Like another reviewer said, don't rush it, I don't want to miss anything either.

Author's Response: I'm very glad you liked it. Though, if it weren't for the computer glitch it would have been only one (albeit long) chapter. It was great that it could be split so smoothly. Thanks a bajillion!

Reviewer: doctorg Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 11/22/2010 11:44:46 PM Title: Chapter 1

Here's a weird kind of compliment, because of you I will only read stories marked as completed now. It's killing me to get so into a story and characters and have to wait, even though you are awesome about updating! My heart dropped when you said only a few more chapters...um, no. I don't want this one to end. I think you've got at least 10 more chapters to go, right? right? ::crickets::

Anyway, in honor of the update I went back and read the story from the beginning again, and it is truly awesome. I am not a visual person at all, and yet your stories are so lushly descriptive I see not only the images, but the emotions, so clearly when I read. I don't know how you manage to make individual moments so rich with detail but still keep the plot moving at such a pace. You just give us these elegant little faceted gems of moments that are so dazzling we don't need a lot of transition between them. It's truly an amazing skill.

In other news, I love Protective!Logan, but am interested to see if Marie gets back a little of the core of strength you know she had to scrape by in her pre-Logan world. I know you want to get her to legality too, but don't skip past too much -- I want to hear everything!

Author's Response: Its so amazing to hear anyone say those things. There's gotta be some kind of medicene to bring down my head's swelling. Tylanol, maybe? Something stronger? Thank you uber much. And I'll keep the last bit in mind.

Reviewer: sahara Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/22/2010 10:30:05 PM Title: Chapter 16

Okay I totally didn't catch the significance of the "It's my turn" thing until I read Moviemom's & then litlen's reviews. Oh man, just.....oh man. Wow. You snuck that right in there. And it works so well and just....I'm not really thinking this review out. I'm pretty much at the "OH MY GOD OH MY GOD HOW DID I MISS THIS>?!?!!?!>>@!#@**#*U#*T#HB#T*!!!!!"

I feel like us readers are on the most epic, Rogan-filled scavenger hunt.

I'm bouncing.

Author's Response: >screams a little, hugs< Thankyouthankyouthankyouthankyouthankyouthankyouthankyouthankyouthankyouthankyou! I love you!

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/22/2010 10:09:53 PM Title: Chapter 16

OK, I really feel like an idiot here. Thanks bunches to Litlen for pointing out your total awesomeness with 'It's my turn.' As soon as I read those words in her review I immediately understood the significance that I missed when actually reading the chapter. (I'm going to plead 'distraction' on this one -- My son and his friends have turned my house into a war zone, complete with Nerf guns and camo gear as I read this. And my daughter insists on interrupting me every other paragraph...What's a mom have to do to get some reading done around here?) Anyway, those words hit me like a brick. I actually gasped, "Oh, my God!" and didn't care who heard me. (I don't think anyone did, but still...)

Talk about your post traumatic stress disorder! A typical teen argument, delivered in all innocence, is like a bomb going off in her gut. No different than a war veteran flipping out over the 'pop' of a burned out light bulb or the 'bang' of a car backfiring. And you just slipped it in there...called no special attention to it...just told the story with your usual -- but brilliant -- awesome honesty. --Wendie

P.S. That extra pair of hands you see helping you and litlen shove B, J and J off the cliff? Those are mine...

Author's Response: Thank you very, very, very much. Its amazing how well you see everything the writers here are trying so hard to say. Its incredible. Have a great Thanksgiving! And as for the kids-thing, one word: Nyquil. ;~D

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/22/2010 9:39:34 PM Title: Chapter 16

YIPPEEEEEEEEEEE! Don't know what caused her meltdown. Don't really care. SOOOOO happy that he's immune to her skin! And I am positively over the moon that he's got some kind of 'Marie radar' going on.

I also dig how you sneaked in that little parenthetical reference to how she's more aware of 'the expectations of normal society' than she realizes. If she can harness that, she might begin to feel more like she 'fits in' than she does now. Not that Logan gives a rat's ass about her fitting in -- not unless it's important to her. It will be interesting to see if she takes her cues from him on that score, or if he takes his cues from her.

Congrats on setting the bar for reviews higher and higher with each amazing chapter. --Wendie

Author's Response: >hugs< *lightbulb* Thank you for this, for everything, and for the scene you just inspired.

Reviewer: notmyself Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/22/2010 9:18:53 PM Title: Chapter 16

Oh frabjuous day! Many thanks for the two awesome chapters.

~Mia

Author's Response: Have now adopted frabjuous. Gracias!

Reviewer: Moviemom44 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/22/2010 9:13:23 PM Title: Chapter 15

Geez, I'm sorry Jubes is so unfriendly toward Marie, but I totally get how Marie, through no fault of her own, really can't give someone like Jubes much to work with. Here's hoping they work it out.

I love your description of how Marie deals with the ever-present Logan -- how she 'relied on (his assistance) as unthinkingly as oxygen.' I wonder if it's dawned on him yet that the connection runs both ways -- and on many levels.

On to Ch. 16. Love the double shot of deliciousness! --Wendie

Author's Response: Thats very insightful, and grin-inducing at the same time. Thank you. Question...How do you feel about the POV shift to Marie? Do you think it will harm the story if the rest is only through her eyes?

Reviewer: sahara Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/22/2010 8:51:45 PM Title: Chapter 16

I know you said there'd be tweaking with Jubes, but day-um....chica's a bitch!

"He always smiles so eagerly at her." You're dead on with this line. I hate the kid, but I like the description.

Oh, by the way. WTF?!?! What happened at the end?! He can touch her!!! You are so lucky I haven't figured out how to crawl through my computer screen, missy

Author's Response: Yeah, umm...I'm (Courtney) having a lot of fun with Jubilee. Never read the comics, but I hope I'm not totally insulting the canon-devotees. Thank you so much!

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