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Date: 02/09/2011 3:54:39 PM Title: Chapter 20
OK, I am in almost physical pain here, forcing myself to finish the review of this chapter before I read the last one, but if I move on I'm afraid I'll lose the quotes I gathered like precious pearls from the overpopulated oyster bed of this novella of a chapter, so I have to write now and read later. Damn!
Disappointed? No. Shocked? Yes? When I realized it was the Porn Smurf and not Logan with her in the Stink-mobile, I nearly had heart failure. I'd forgotten all about Magneto and his interest in her. Then again, after that last night with Logan, who the hell was thinking about Magneto? Not me, that's for damn sure! So, yeah, shocked pretty well covers it.
This opus is loaded with quotable quotes, but as I said before, I chose these as I was reading, copying and pasting in the review box so that I wouldn't lose them.
'but not before he caught the bewildered hurt on her face, or felt the answering pang inside him--an animal who cannot comprehend it's punishment.' Oh, glory, this is one of the most brilliant uses of that gift you have for finding the exact metaphor to illustrate a feeling that I have ever read. There's not a pet owner in the world who hasn't seen this look, but to rummage it out of your vast storeroom of images and use it here...Girl, you take my breath away.
'of air that wouldn't taste like her' Again, you reach beyond the 'good' words and stretch until you get hold of the 'perfect' words. Seven words, to be exact, seven tiny little words that zap us right back to the hell he's been living in for YEARS. How do you do that?
'a skilled pressure that wasn't and could never be enough and the certainty that something absolutely terrible would happen if it stopped'. I've read more than my share of romance novels and this is one of the all-time great descriptions of the moment of 'what the hell' that all romance heroines experience. Amazing.
'Thoughts like birds who'd flown into a storefront and now darted, fought amongst each other and battered themselves in search of the exit, while he waited for her reply.' Again with the word picture that precisely mirrors what you want us to see inside Marie's head. Hell, this happens inside my own head all the time and now, thanks to you, I have a way to explain my stuttering...'Ya know how birds that are caught indoors mash into one another trying to get out the door, well that's what's happening in my head right now. So hang on a minute while the flock settles!'
I am sorry it took me so long to finally read and review this chapter, but that 8,000-plus word count really threw me for a loop. I knew I would need concentrated alone time, which I haven't had thanks to snow storms and school closings and whatnot, but when I saw that you had posted the final chapter, I couldn't put it off any more regardless of the fact that my son and his friends are upstairs blasting their techo-beat music (and I use the term loosely) in celebration of yet another snow day.
And now, on to the finale... --Wendie
Author's Response: I think I happy-squealed for ten minutes, just seeing your name beside "Reviewer"--a very hard thing to do with a sore throat. I completely understand what you mean about the word count making you balk and the exponential distractions on your side of the screen, truly understand and sympathize...But can I just say that I've been looking forward to hearing your thoughts since the moment I clicked the "submit" button for the previous chapter, crossing my fingers every time I noticed a new review. Don't think even the infinite available space in this reply box could fit the number of "Thank You's" this and all your other reviews deserve...(Overpopulated oyster bed? Porn smurf? You've got quite the gift of language yourself.) >hugs<
[Report This]Date: 02/08/2011 5:59:48 PM Title: Chapter 20
This was one of my favorite stories ever. And now it's over. Imma cry. I don't want it to be over! ;_______; It was a wonderful story Darling! Thank you for the beautiful words and the hard work.
Author's Response: Thank *you*. I'm glad this could be anyone's favorite--the work is nothing compared to this kind of reward.
Date: 02/03/2011 9:01:10 AM Title: Chapter 20
Wow, what an amazing chapter! Loved seeing Marie realize how important Logan is to her and her attraction to him. God, I felt so bad for Logan--struggling to control himself and pain he felt when she told him to stop and he had to let go.
I hope this is not the end, that you will at least write an epologue (hopefully a lengthy one too). Please don't leave it here. I hope that they can work things out and find some happiness together.
BTW, your writing is fantastic! So descriptive and vivid that it's very poetic. I hope you add another chapter and I also look forward to your next story.
Author's Response: I'm so sorry this took so long to answer--site neglected to send me the usual alert, but I was happy beyond happy to see this. Thank you; you've made a crappy day much brighter. I am working on the epilogue now; it won't be long but it should tie up a few loose ends. Should have it up by next Sunday, if not sooner.
Date: 02/01/2011 6:25:03 AM Title: Chapter 20
I know you love lines so here’s a few to start.....‘sections she had previously skipped with a rare, silent anger and the desire to insist, aloud, "No. That's not how it happens." She read these, and tried to understand.’ There’s so much sadness in this line, sadness for what has happened and for not understanding what is happening. How the former has seemingly ruined any chance of the latter.
‘raindrops racing their siblings on every window’ this one just because it gave such great visuals.
"If it will make him stay.", she sought for her nerve but found it shivering in a corner.’
‘when this was over she would go up to Logan's room. He was waiting for her, and she would be safe there.’ Absolutely love the contrast and the transition in Marie’s thinking that happens from the first line to the second. Both completely heart-breaking in their own way.
‘She smelled of fear, of vomit, of pain, of peaches and vanilla and ocean and of things dying and dead and his.’ This one because it surprised me! the list was long enough that the end,[ the *his*] was unexpected but unbelievably right.
This chapter had so much happening, so many details. A more in-depth, complex read than the others. Nicely linked to the statue although I’m hoping that the story we know from that point is not where you’re going as I can’t see either of the characters you’ve built fitting in with that. Looking forward to the epi. Well done x
Author's Response: It is completely, disgustingly shameful how much I love quotes. This? This will have me bouncing off the walls for hours. Thank you, Litlen. I'm glad you enjoyed it. (And no, this will not continue along the rails of X1.)
Date: 01/31/2011 11:30:55 PM Title: Chapter 20
I really liked the way you did this. I knew we would see Magneto in some way but I wasn't expecting the Statue of Liberty. I like that you choose that, it was familiar but still different. I like how you put this together, you have kept the flow consistent throughout the piece. I like how you didn't bill this as a retelling of the movie. I am looking forward to the epilogue.
Author's Response: Fantastic--that was exactly what I was trying to get across. I'm so, so, so incredibly, extraordinarily glad you feel that way. Thank you!! >hugs<
[Report This]Date: 01/31/2011 8:27:55 PM Title: Chapter 20
YAY!! I was so happy when I saw this story was again in the listings -- had to go through some of the chapters as a re-cap though... memories not the best thing.
Probably my fav paragraph was this part:
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Atop the torch, wind and those blades of metal whipping around her in unnamed colors that lived at the far end of the spectrum.
When the pain obliterated every other thought, the girl found herself thinking, musing, that when this was over she would go up to Logan's room. He was waiting for her, and she would be safe there.
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But yeah, can't wait for the next chapter, even if it means it'll be the last chapter. Hope you write another fic after this one though :)
-- Wolf
Author's Response: Oh, mess. Thank you! I bounced in my seat (seriously irritating the cat on my lap) when I read this). Working on the epilogue now; will try to have it up as soon as possible. >hugs tightly<
Date: 01/31/2011 6:06:27 PM Title: Chapter 20
"If not, I suppose is up to us to guess what happened next and Im also cool with that." No no no nooo! I was totally lying! LOL. I do want the epilogue, the smut and the very happy ending, please *I beg you* So dont you dare on hesitating with that very long epilogue!
(I wish there was something as the Youtube thumbs-up to say "The readers who agree with me thumbs up!" I know I would get quite a few! ;)
PS: and thanks for the dedicatory intention!
Author's Response: LOL!!! Alrighty then! Thank you for such ferocity. I'm about 75% for the epilogue now. (Fickle? Yes, I am.) It is wonderful to know that you are behind it.
Date: 01/31/2011 1:09:54 PM Title: Chapter 20
I am not happy to see this end. And not only b/c I am attached to the tale -- but b/c the Rogan relationship is going to go thru some seriously messy changes after this -- and with the brokenness and ineffectual people skills of both parties, it's probably going to be a slow evolution in fits and starts. I'd really hate to see all that glossed over in a little epilogue. It wouldn't do all of this previous effort justice! Why end this where the movie ended? This story is NOT LIKE the movie -- not at ALL -- and so it doesn't feel appropriate to place an artificial-type ending here! CAn't you give it another chap or two to flesh out how those two will DEAL with all this new crap dumped on them?
[Report This]Date: 01/31/2011 1:05:46 PM Title: Chapter 20
wow best story i've read so far
Author's Response: Really???? >sqeals with glee< Thank you! (But you must not have read Aranenumanesse or Jenn yet.)
[Report This]Date: 01/31/2011 12:56:42 PM Title: Chapter 20
The things Jubilee thinks ... I truly did not expect that, even of her! --and especially I didn't expect Marie to draw such a conclusion from her comments, that she should offer herself to Logan! You surprised me again and again with the way this all turned out (certainly not unpleasantly so).
The X1 scene rewrites were well-performed. I know (from seeing so many others fail at the attempt) how hard it is to keep faithful to the tone of your own writing while you're incorporating someone else's script. But you succeeded by not copying TOO MANY lines, and keeping the perspective tightly on your girl.
I like that you NEVER say the girl's name, whether Rogue or Marie, until Logan breathes it like a prayer to her dead body on the torch. I had begun to wonder if you were going to give her a different name!
Date: 01/31/2011 12:55:18 PM Title: Chapter 20
Wow what a chapter!!!
Can't wait for the epilogue.
Author's Response: Thank you!!!!!
Date: 01/31/2011 12:30:23 PM Title: Chapter 20
This is one of the best fictions I've ever read. So realistic. I felt like I was reading a novel and thank you very much for writing it.
Author's Response: Aawwwwww!!!! Thank you, I'm so proud of this--thought about this all day. :~D
[Report This]Date: 01/31/2011 12:23:38 PM Title: Chapter 20
I was so, so glad to log in and see that this story had been updated. I'm only sorry that I missed it yesterday. I thought you handled Marie's attempt to make love with Logan beautifully. As much as I love Rogan smut it would have felt untrue if they had simply fallen into bed and spent the night going at it like bunnies.
Author's Response: Thank you! Oh, lord. That means so much. I spent an entire week struggling with that scene. >hugs<
[Report This]Date: 01/31/2011 11:21:16 AM Title: Chapter 20
(Please don't freak out by this review)
First of all, I squealed like a little girl (i'm 20 though) when I saw the new chapter was up.
Then I read it. Then I fell in love with you. All over again.
So... I love you.
I have a girl-crush on you. Is that weird? It certainly isn't weird for me, because.... well... why wouldn't I fall for someone like you? You amaze me every single time you put up a new chapter. You almost attack me with all these surprises that I hit the ground so hard I pass out! Just as I think (and secretly hope) that everything's gonna be OK, you complicate things! You annoy me by your over complicated changes and twists. You're so annoying. And so annoyingly good at writing! Ugh!! I hate you. But I also love you.
I don't know how I feel about this fic. I used to love it. I think I still do. But its sad to know that this will end soon. So I'm confused, because a part of me wants you to update so I get all the answers I want, like "will everything be ok? will Marie know how much Logan likes her? will Marie ever be comfortable with *those* kinda activities?"
Then, there's the other part of me who doesn't want you to update for a long time.. cause then I can enjoy this for a lil longer.
Nonetheless, this was an amazing chapter. I love how you're portrayed Logan in this one. That its not easy for him to stop doing what he's doing; you've made him look so human - despite the fact that he's anything but that. I mean, even though he's so buff and strong and stubborn and confident, around Marie he's so not all that.. he's so human. And the fact that the girl is still afraid of those kinda touches etc. is so realistic. I can't imagine a better way to have described that.
Now back to my girl-crush.. I don't even know you, but I'm so proud of you. I'm so damn happy that I got to experience your stories - particularly this one. You, ma'am, are a VERY talented writer. Have you considered publishing works outside fanfics? Cause if you do, I'm 99% sure that you'll do a great job!
To answer your question, YES; it was worth waiting :) oh and did I mention that I love you? hahaha :D
Author's Response: Freaked out? I am incandescently happy. Completely understand what you mean, though I'm skeptical that my writing could honestly produce that response--it's how I always feel toward reviews and reviewers as spectacular as this and you. I'll be rereading this for the next decade or so (more or less). Thank you, a thousand times and fifty or so more after that.
Date: 01/31/2011 3:31:44 AM Title: Chapter 20
Aaaaaaah, amazing! I hope we won't have to wait long to find out what happens next! :D
Author's Response: Aaaaaah, thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :~D
[Report This]Date: 01/31/2011 1:34:18 AM Title: Chapter 20
yes, his fist could indeed move faster than Scott's hand to his visor, and that Jean possessed a shockingly vast vocabulary of obscenities.
This made me laugh hysterically. Well played!
What he wanted now, to hear her organs shift and gurgle and pump, to feel her move, breath, made all other pain that had ever touched his body or his mind nothing, as if they were erased from his body's memory to fit this new colossal agony. All previous desires were gifts, now offered to replace the rejection of this one.
Oh... just... wow. This is amazing. Really this entire story has been amazing. I'm sad it's nearly over; you're still planning an epilogue, right? (Which will feature Sahara's kittens and daffodils, no doubt.)
The not-actually-smut scene worked amazingly well, BTW. I just couldn't have seen her going through with it after the trauma she'd suffered.
Thank you so much for writing.
Author's Response: I am quite partial to kittens and various floral matter, but am currently on the fence about the epilogue. Please forgive me. This wonderful review made me bounce in my seat, dance on the way to get a glass of milk from the kitchen. Thank you, thank you, thank you.
[Report This]Date: 01/31/2011 12:58:21 AM Title: Chapter 20
One of the things I admire of your writting is that you surprise me everytime. When I thought I had an idea of how things were gonna end you create this whole chapter. A clear example is the akward situation when Logan showed his flaws and scared Marie away. I wanted to punch him in the face but at the same time the whole situation and Logan's reaction made total sense and showed credibility. The big difference between a fluffy rogan fic and a mature complex story.
Then you really got me when she was kidnapped. At first I thought it was Logan acting as if nothing had happened which made me mad, and then I thought he had lost it completly and was kidnapping her to take her to Canada with him or something lol. Just a prove of how your writting triggers actual reactions.
I also liked Jubilee's drunk scene. It clearly showed the emotional state of the girl. So she was jealous of Marie after all, because of the emotional contention she didnt have. I really enjoyed how you've portraited Jubilees' character all along. You create complex characters and work on them, and that makes us analyze their actions and interactions – sometimes with just a few words.
When I was reading the story past the half, I was expecting things start working out -somehow- but all the opposite happened. Things started to declieve, Logan/Marie relationship was in the unknown, then she was kidnapped and when I checked there was like only 50 words left. I was totally lost, I didnt know if this was the actual end of the story or not. I was like “How can this story end when everythings looking so bad?”. But let me tell you just like another reviewer said I prefer a believable ending than a forced happy one. But I can't deny I love happy endings, specially in a story like this that was filled with so much suffering from both parts.
All in all I loved this chapter though I feel like you end it in a cliffhanger. Like there are important questions unanswered: How did they survive their relationship after what happened? Could he forgive himself? Did he stay? If he didn't, how did Marie managed to stay in the mansion? Etc. I hope you write an epilogue so you can give this amazing story a more concice ending. If not, I suppose is up to us to guess what happened next and Im also cool with that.
Final words; I enjoyed this story a lot it was a long process, 6 month cant believe it but totally worth! You have an amazing talent and I look forward reading more of your stuff – rogan or original work. Thanks!
Author's Response: Oh, mess. I'd meant to dedicate this chapter to you. Darn it! Might have to go back....I'm so happy, reread this over and over. Glad you liked it--glad? Incandescently pleased fits better--and am so, so grateful that you took the time to make my day. I fully intended to write an epilogue, to tie up the loose ends and give poor Logan a little smut to nibble on, but now I'm not entirely sure. Still debating. :~)
Date: 01/30/2011 10:41:48 PM Title: Chapter 20
Okay, here is how ridiculously invested I am in this story. Earlier this evening, I was thinking, "Damn, it's been awhile since I saw an update, I wonder when one will come?" Then later I checked and saw an update, and simultaneously thought "Yay!" and "Shit! -- if this is the last chapter I won't be able to enjoy it, knowing it's ending." Then I saw that you had not checked "Story Complete" and briefly rejoiced, and then I read the author's notes and had to decide how brief your brief epilogue was likely to be and if that could stop me from cursing at the scroll bar as it reached the end of this chapter. So, that's the little rollercoaster I went on. :-)
As for the chapter itself, I loved it and will need to read it a few times more. As much as I want shiny-happy-rainbow-smut for these two, I'm glad you went in the more believable direction. But, we still better get some good smut. Like, seriously.
So far this is my favorite line:
Rooms seemed disturbing and off, like a supermarket after hours, like a doze that any moment will end with a sudden fall and the sleeper jolting into unhappy consciousness
Author's Response: Ha! That is stupendously gratifying (have I ever mentioned how insanely jealous I am of your talent for swift updates? I hate you in a very adoring way). Am currently teetering back and forth on the issue of an epilogue, cannot entirely promise one now. Thank you, for this, for giving me such a tremendous start to my day--so much that I almost forgot it was a Monday--and for general amazingness. >hugs<
[Report This]Date: 01/30/2011 9:59:45 PM Title: Chapter 20
And she lived & they worked everything out & ditched the mansion & lived happily ever after & kittens & rainbows & daffodils!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Right?
Right.
I think any words I have to say about how I feel about this ending wouldn't be enough. This last chapter is too complex & therefore, so are my feelings about it. (None bad, I assure you. Just the problem of having a limited vocabulary). I do think that if you had tried to pack in a "safe" & "guaranteed, all-resolved-happy" ending it wouldn't be true to your story as a whole. So for any potential haters out there who want canned Rogan bliss - they can go consult their imaginations. (Sounds a lot better than "piss off", right?)
I had to start a Word Doc to keep a running list of things I loved:
"His crutches were propped against the nearest wall. When asked, Logan would say simply and indifferently that he'd been teaching the boy to fight like a man." Hilarious.
"Her serene voice was a balm to an ache you hadn't been aware of." Great & new description of a voice that has been written about a lot (myself included, mine pales in comparison to this).
"One sheet was twined around her leg” This scene was so subtle, seemless. Could easily understand what happened & it was an appropriate snippet. Perfection. Truly perfection
"…and for distancing himself from any personal association.” I don't have a verbal explanation for why I liked this, but I did.
WTFx is up with Jubilee? You warped her & twisted her in ways the comic book writers (who do some pretty crazy shit) couldn’t even dream of! Like the paradox of how she’s mocking Marie for “getting Logan to stay that long”, then crying because the poor Firecracker can’t snag anyone who’d stick around long enough for her.
“At mealtimes she sat at their preferred table, alone with the heat of an almost-forgotten spotlight” I can see what's happening in this one single sentence and feel what she's feeling.
“She read these, and tried to understand.” Another bittersweet snippet. Poor Marie.
“"If it will make him stay."” Awww & oh no filled my mind with this.
“It flustered her, made her voice skip like a pebble on concrete” Loved this & jealous because of it. You could have – anyone else would have – just left it at “her voice skipped” or some such variation, but every similie you include is so visual and spot on.
“offered her a low copper grin” Where do you come up with such evocative descriptions?!?!!? WHERE?!?!?!
“Logan felt like the shell of a grenade who's pin had been torn from it's casing and tossed carelessly away. Hard to the touch, but half of a heartbeat away from exploding, transforming it's exterior into nothing but heat and dust and shards of shards.” Again you could’ve gone w/ something simple like “Logan felt like a grenade ready to explode” but you didn’t & we all benefitted for it. Another example of how we are all streets behind you.
“The openness of Outside Beautiful and nauseating in it's endlessness” You ever read something & go "YES! YES! I KNOW WHAT THAT FEELS LIKE!!!!" That was this for me. I get that! The night sky & dark water - it's the endlessness, as you eloquently pointed out - that truly, honestly, and genuinely is nauseating
I'm sad to see this end. But endings mean new beginnings, right? Not to rush you! But you did spend 6 months on this and now your Rogan muse is free to frolic through the daisies, slicing their little petals off with adamantium claws.
Author's Response: So I take it you would be against the smutty epilogue, right? Hmmmm....quite the pickle. I'm torn. But I do wholly and inexpressibly appreciate the "canned Rogan bliss" remark, very grateful to have your support--as with everything else you've written hear. Mother of All Reviews?--Very hard to disagree. You are fantastic beyond belief and I am immensely grateful.
Date: 01/30/2011 9:16:11 PM Title: Chapter 20
wow, this story was so much more than I ever expected. It was full of such emotion. LOVED IT!
Author's Response: This means so much to me. I am indescribably glad you feel that way. Thanks.