I agree wholeheartedly with White Dove. There is good raw material here, especially the bit about Bobby not being all she had cracked him up to be. With more detail and truer dialogue, it could really be as 'amazing' as you said it was in the review you wrote for yourself. Hey, we all crave reviews; why else would we post our efforts on these pages? But 'sweetening the pot' is a fast way to earn yourself the disrespect of your fellow writers. I'm going to give you the benefit of the doubt as I figure this is your first story, or at least the first one you've wanted to share. You get points for sharing, but leave the reviewing to those of us who didn't write YOUR story, OK? --Wendie

Author's Response: umm, sorry? your stories aren't exactly "good" either you know

ok.. like the idea of Rogue having bobby and not having him live up to her expectations and then getting to have Logan and he blows her mind. But this is very short on the details which makes it seem like we are in a marathon racing to the end. Logan's dialogue didn't really seem like the language he would use either. Maybe in the next chapter add more details and make the language more gritty and less flowery for Logan.

Author's Response: Thank you. this is my first story and i appreciate your review. but maybe rogue inspires the softness in wolverine.