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[Report This]Date: 01/22/2014 10:34:58 AM Title: Chapter 1
That was great! You have GOT to write the third chapter where we see Logan get chewed out by a little old ban! Pleeeeease?
Date: 12/01/2009 3:06:11 PM Title: Chapter 1
I love that Marie is truly striking out on her own and trying to live a 'normal' life. Eliza and Don are wonderful, warm characters. They do your aunt and uncle proud. I can't wait to see how Don and Logan get along! --Wendie
Date: 09/19/2009 12:38:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
You may be a rookie as a writer, but I'll bet my keyboard you read -- a lot. Your imagery is very well done.
'she gives him a watery smile.'
'he could smell the salt of her tears...'
Excellent.
Now all you have to do is get a handle on the whole punctuation thing and you'll be golden!
Author's Response: The keyboard is safe as houses. One thing I must thank my mum for is the fact I had to read a book every two weeks growing up b/c now I can't live without them.
Date: 09/11/2009 6:41:43 PM Title: Chapter 1
im happy that you posted this story. It takes alot to post your first one! tahnks. I look forward to the next chapter
Date: 09/11/2009 6:16:13 PM Title: Chapter 1
Its sad, but I like it. I look forward to the next chapter.
some helpful advice though...
Watch your tenses. You switched from past tense to present tense more than once most stories read better in the past tense... Check your grammar as well. I see more than one sentence started in lowercase letters. Add more details, the more you describe something, be it feelings or appearance the better it is... and put a line between the dialogue sentences. its hard to read when they have no separation.
Author's Response: Thank you for the advice very it's welcome
[Report This]Date: 09/11/2009 3:51:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
You're off to a great start. I can't wait to read more.
How long is it going to take for Logan to get fed-up and just go after her? :D Knowing the Wolverine, I don't think it'll take very long. :D
Author's Response: My bet is he will get his ass in gear soon
Date: 09/11/2009 3:16:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
Complete? No. I like the sound of that. Because I would really like to read more.