Well, a shift from personal drama to external drama. Looks like you're incorporating bits of the comics, too. I'm interested to see where you take this.

Author's Response: I didn't mean for it to switch like that, and I was a little afraid that I'd completely messed up my story, but I think I can make it work. Usually, I don't like when viewpoints change so much, but there's so much information I have to fill in that writing it only from Marie's perspective is impossible. Thanks for the review!