aw. Sha bebe! (as the Cajuns say) Very sweet ending.

I kinda didn't like the part where (once again) you tried to just copy-n-paste the X1 movie dialogue. There were some places where, yes, the symmetry/irony of certain lines felt great, but not ALL the lines fit the new situation you had written. Watch out for those things! I suggest, next time you're tempted to write such a scene, that you go back an hour or two after all the editing is done and read JUST that small section of dialogue ... to help you get the sense of how well that scene stands alone, and to help you see it with "fresh eyes", so to speak, as much as possible.

And, I found it quite remarkable how quickly Logan got his energy back -- one minute he's struggling to walk across the medlab, the next he's traversing the entire length of Xavier's vast lawn & gardens without even leaning on Marie for support, and energetically pacing back & forth! Hee Hee. I think you get what I'm saying. It may sound like I'm nit-picking, but I'm doing it for your benefit. Overlooking small but important details disrupts the logical continuity of the events in each scene, and weakens your whole story. I know you can do better b/c you definitely have talent! All you lack is the care to spend enough editing time to catch these things! Don't be in too much of a hurry to post ... we're willing to wait for high quality!

Still, this is a smartly-written tale overall. Your big strength, as I've said before, is to get across your characters' feelings. Just take care to balance the sappiness with some good plot points as you have more or less managed successfully thus far.

I realize it's been a long time since you've touched this story. Please don't abandon it now!

You did it a LOT of justice! awesome! I loved every word ... well, OK: the middle parts, the early section of the action scene, and the part where Mystique comes in -- THAT part could stand to be re-worked, especially to add some believable rationale why Kitty & Kurt didn't, for example, just use their mutations to pull everyone out of there, or why they all couldn't simply run OUT the door if it was possible for Logan to run IN! And for why they had to wait to destroy all the Sentinels b4 shutting the program down. You *could* have exercised your creative juices to fill in those important plot holes; your creativity elsewhere in this story proves that you are perfectly capable. You just didn't take the trouble to do it! That was a bit of laziness showing thru in your writing style, and it's not the first time I've seen it this story, so that's a weakness of yours.

However, a great strength is your ability to write affecting scenes! You can make ppl feel very strong emotions right along with your characters in moments of drama both mild & intense, and you used the skill to great effect here.

hahaha! I actually saw this one coming. But boy, you sure do have a Dark Phoenix-type stewing under this roof. I don't like those sadistic versions of Jean, b/c really, why would someone like Scott fall in love with her if that's the kind of person she was?

"Well, you can tell her my heart belongs to someone else"

That line right there that you twisted into your own way had tears running down my face. Literally. That was how it was supposed to be damn it! Just writing that had me so happy I am sooooo happy!

haha anyways!

Great addition to the story and I knew he would be understanding of everything. Nice to see that they are starting to connect even more as Logan and Marie realize their love for each other.

ahhhh *big sigh*

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Let me tell you, every time that part comes up in the movie I always imagine him saying that to Marie. You are right, that is how it was supposed to happen! I'm glad that I could make you happy. Our favorite couple has a long way to go before they can find happiness though. Their whole world is about to be turned upside down!

I love the idea of an independent Marie, someone who wasn't found by Logan but recruited by Magneto first-you really manage to balance her southern personality well with her angst and her personal trauma without making her sound emo/suicidal.

Running with the anti-emo sentiment I really love those few chapters in there where Logan is discovered as taking money from Xavier to hang out with Marie. It was a logical idea which you flourished with detail beautifully. You make it really easy to see the look on Logan's face and the pain that Marie feels you kinda feel too. I think it was realistic situation where he storms off because he hoped she'd figure out on her own the depths of his sincerity.

Now for the big enchilada, this current chapter. There have been many versions of the "Marie touched Logan and Logan gets his memories and madness ensures" scene. I would have to tip my hat to you in regards to this scene. Again, the detail was fantastic but what really made this chapter stand out as unique was the way you added Logan giving her a pep talk as she tried to make her way through the mingled memories. It was a refreshing touch to see an in depth struggle of her memories as well as Logan saying "you can do it just fight."

I can't wait to read the next chapter...oh and I love this title.

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks so much for the awesome feedback! I too love an independent Marie. In this story, it may seem that she is holding back a bit from the sassy southerner that she is, but it's on purpose. She's a ninteen yr. old girl who went from loving parents that ended up despising her, to being a part of the brotherhood, to now living in a home where no one really likes her. And on top of all of this, is a world that doesn't except her. Anyone who would go through that would be standoffish and not very confident. Don't worry, our girl will get there. The one thing I wanted to see in the movies, as much as I wanted to see Logan and Marie get together, is what it was like for Marie when she touched Logan. If she takes peoples memories and abilties then she had to have faced the Wolverine. Imagine having this killing machine in your head and yet having the man in there too. I wanted to show Logan and Wolverine seperate yet one in the same...LOL! It gets a little confusing when I try to explain, but I'm so glad you liked what I did with it. And again thank you for pointing out the title, I totally missed that! LOL

My Place In This World

The word This should be capitalized...

Other than that, and other than the fact that the characters are all completely OOC this stories okay

Author's Response: ok, this=This, there ya go! As for the characters being OOC, well I'm just writing them exactly how they should be in this story. That's why we call it an AU right? See, the good thing about writing fanfiction is...you can write whatever and however ya want. Thanks for taking the time to comment! :)

UGGGGGHHHHHHHH U suck!!!

How can you let it end there!!! I hate cliffies with a passion >=/


but yeah it's safe to say that I really like this story haha PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!! I gotta know what happens next!!!!!

Author's Response: LOL, please don't kill me! I hate them when reading a story, but they are kick a$$ to write! I'm glad you are enjoying this story.

Great. I love how you mix it with the movie elements.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you're catching all the little bits and pieces of the movie. I'm having a ball writing the story.

Oooh, so much angst! Poor Marie indeed! I'm hoping you have the next chapter up soon; I can't wait to see how Logan makes it up to her.

Author's Response: I know...I love writing angst! I am working on the next chapter as we speak! Logan will make it up to her in the only way he knows how!!:) Thanks for the comment and for reading.

I love your story so far. Very original. :D Things were going so good for Rogue in this chapter and then...WHAM!

Can't poor Rogue catch a break?! It's heart breaking really, how screwed up things are for her in this fic. I can't deny that it makes for a good read though. But still, I'm a happily ever kind of girl...hint, hint.

I've always been a huge fan of the underdog, so I'm hoping that things are going to get better for Rogue soon in this fic. They will, right?

Oh, and don't be ashamed about having Jean issues. I've got some pretty major Jean issues myself! Comic Books, cartoons or movies - just never liked her. Not at all.

Rogue and Wolvie though are two of my all-time favorite characters. SO please hurry up get them together! I'm begging you. :D

Author's Response: Thank you sooo much for the great review!! I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I hate to be so hard on Rogue but it will make it worth it in the end. I am also a happily ever after girl, but Logan's gotta get his act together and it's going to be hard after what he just did. As for Jean....I hated the witch the first time she walked into Xavier's office in X-men 1! As for Rogue and Wolverine...they are such a great fit. I think my husband gets tired of me when I go on one of my rants about how perfect they are together..LOL! I just don't get why the writers of the X-Men movies don't see what we see! I guess we are smarter!

You've got feat stuff working in this story. I love the alternate journey through Rogue and Logan meeting. Find a good, thorough beta to clean up the punctuation and misspellings, and you'll kick some ratings butt!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for the kind review. I'm glad you are enjoying it. As for the beta, I'm new to this whole writing thing on W/R and I have no clue where to go for a beta! LOL, guess I should have figured that out before I started writing huh? I'll search around and find one...thanks for the advice!

Ooooh. So sweet the way they are coming together. Can't wait fir the next one.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the comment. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I love these two characters, as does everyone else on here. The sweetness is fun to write, and there will be more to come.

Do go on. And fast, please. And make Jean and the rest sorry!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Don't worry, Logan will handle them!