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Reviewer: manda-dee Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/01/2009 7:27:07 AM Title: Today's Triad

I read this story mostly to prove a point to myself and it was right on.


THIS is ridiculous- and I almost never flame stories- but seriously- It's Logan and Marie but just barely, you spend more time describing how Ms. Marvel "eats Marie's pussy while shoving a finger up her ass" then you do about anything Logan and Marie inspired. You don't describe anything concerning the two of them you just merely say "he was there five months and falling in love with her more every day" no other explanation and then you have two huge scenes describing Sarah and Marie and with a two line sentence of "It was a dare. Sarah -dared- him to make a move on Marie to see if she'd respond. Oh and respond she did." you start talking about Logan fucking Marie and Sarah with absolutely NO detailed description of how that event came to be.

Now A) I want you to realize I don't have a problem with gay Marie, it's actually kinda hot in certain aspects- like there's a great story written by November Tuesday which explores Marie with another women and that IS a great story.

B) I just want to say if I had read through this 8,000 word disaster and thought that you had skimped details on Logan and Marie because you lacked the ability to elaborate with verbal detail then I would hack it up to you being a poor writer and wouldn't bother com,plaining because you'd figure it out eventually yourself. However that's not the case, you're actually a semi-good writer and you don't need any help in the descriptive department either, and thats why it pisses me off that you posted this story here, which as I've previously stated scraps by as Logan and Rogue just barely and should really be posted on another website since it spends far more time describing Rogue and Sarah and only a little time describing Logan. Truly the entire thing is Sarah and Rogue and at absolutely no time is it stricly just Logan and Marie, you fast forwarding to a Marie whose pregnant after everyone dies and never mentioning anything about how or what is just another example of you skimping out of the Logan and Marie goods and you should really post this story somewhere that isn't a Logan and Rogue website.

I don't think your a bad writer but I do disagree with this story and I think you should throw in a warning if you intend to keep it up that this isn't going to be a story chuck full of Logan and Marie.

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