You must login (register) to review.
Reviewer: thaty Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2009 8:29:21 PM Title: Chapter 19

Hey, just read it again.

And this caught my atention: “Bobby warned me not to trust you"

WOW!!!! What was that about? O.O

I can't wait for the rest of the story!!!!

Author's Response: lol. you don't miss a thing, do you? :P

Reviewer: Aussie_Dream Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2009 6:11:11 AM Title: Chapter 19

I'll beta for you! Double bonus 4 me... and you get it all FREE!!!

lol - 'Tho I must admit... I was far too enthralled in the story to care about (or really even notice) any spelling mistakes. You're doing a great job all on your own... which is pretty hard when you're the one writing it.

I'm not sure I liked the ending of that... even tho it was inevitable. Very sad. But there's hope for the others yet... :D

Author's Response: i'll keep you in mind for a beta as well. i'll get in touch with you if i decide i need extra help.
it's great to hear that you're still enjoying the story! and even though i'm sure you're slightly fibbing about the typos (i've caught many after having already posted!), i thank you anyway.
the next chapter will be up soon. you know, in a few days. not, um, hours.

Reviewer: nikkibelle Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/12/2009 1:43:39 AM Title: Chapter 19

*heavy sigh*
thank you for teary eyes at 6.30 in the morning, lol.

anyway this was epic(yeah it's so lame of me to use that word but i've only had one coffee yet, and your rogue knows what that means!)
the drama, the drama!! *gasp*

it was so brave of her to admit she'd planted the calls and stuff, but ooohhh it totally messed her and logan up...especially after what he's been through with that other girl...poor him. and poor her too... *heavy sigh numero deux*

lol @ the pookie/pukie thing though ^^ did you see 13 going on 30?

mhmm i want a peanut butter sandwich now. we don't even have peanut butter though. i don't even like it. lol.

have a good day =)
(and not another crappy evening, i don't think you or your readers could take that lol)

Author's Response: no, i have not seek 13 going on 300. I take it there was a reference to pukie/pookie?
i just left a review response to another person where i practically dittoed your PB sentiments. I swear I've got to get some PB soon!
and yeah, Marie knows how to mess up things really nicely for herself. I suppose now she has to figure out how to fix all of her mistakes. sigh. what's a girl to do?

Reviewer: Dita Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 10:12:16 PM Title: Chapter 19

So sad... don't know how you're going to fix this mess.

Author's Response: you mean i have to fix it?? :P

Reviewer: August Dawn Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 9:53:26 PM Title: Chapter 19

Wow, that was a fab chapter!
Maybe you should go solo pity drinking more often ;-)

Really loved how Marie had to face up to all her sneakiness. I hope she has to do a lot of crawling before Logan takes her back.

I was really sad and *disappointed* in her ;-) that she hadn't made her mind up to ask Logan to the family dinner until she heard how successful he actually was. I don't know how you can have her make up for being so materialistic!

Author's Response: i have a definite love/hate relationship with this story. i'm not completely happy with how all the characterizations turned out, especially Marie. But i molded them all in one fashion and to change them into something else would leave my mind whirling too much. this is all still new to me and i'm not comfortable/practiced enough to do anything about it right now. and again, all of this is happening in the span of 2 weeks in the story. people just don't normally change over night. maybe i'll be able to redeem her by the end of the story, or maybe i won't. but i'm not going to stress about it because this is a light, cheezy fic. :)

Reviewer: manda-dee Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 6:23:28 PM Title: Chapter 1

GASP!!!!!

THIS IS ME GASPING!!!!

I love and hate you all at the same time! HOW COULD YOU DO THAT!?!?!?!?!?!??

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!

IF I WEREN'T SITTING WHEN I READ IT I WOULD HAVE FALLEN OVER!! AH!

I'm reeling! I'm honest to god reeling right now! HOW COULD YOU!?! THE WHOLE THING!!! EVERY BIT OF IT!!

This whole part:

“Um. Well.” I took a deep breath. “My parents never paid attention to me. But then they did, only it was because of Bobby. Except I didn’t find out until I broke up with him. So I thought I could get him back and they’d notice me some more. There was one problem. He’d started dating you.”

I WAS LIKE: HOLY SHIT THAT IS A HEARTY HELPING OF TRUTH!!!

OMG!! THEN WHEN THEY WERE DRIVING HOME!!!!! Oh. My. Ga-

The way he quoted McGyver and the way he said about the NY chick he chases after and everything!!! I was dyyyying!!

Oh jesus woman you better update like fast! Like yesterday, like in the next five minutes!! HOLY HELL!!! HOW COULD YOU DO THAT!!

YOU MUST CONTINNNNNUUUE!!!!!!!!!

I need to go, I'm very dizzy now I need more of this story like a heroin addict in search of opiates in the dessert of sobriety.... I'm gonna go lye down and breathe slowly- update in the mean time so I don't die of deprivation, huh?

Author's Response: LOL. i've been laughing my butt off for the last minute straight after reading this. i would apologize but you're just too damn funny when you're impassioned and you know it. ;)
by the way, "like a heroin addict in search of opiates in the dessert of sobriety"-- great line. And, um, you haven't died yet have you? because then i'd feel really guilty. maybe you found a paper bag to breathe into? well, jeez, now you have me worried. keep breathing! the chapter is in the process of creation!

Reviewer: Wytchling Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 4:40:03 PM Title: Chapter 19

Oooh Harsh chapter. I think it's a good thing that they're getting everything out in the open though.

Author's Response: it was a long time in the coming. but things can only look up from here, right?

Reviewer: New Moon Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 2:21:25 PM Title: Chapter 1

::whimper::

I know he had to find out but surely he can't believe everything they have now is fake. Does it matter in the long run WHY they had the first date in light of all that came after?

Author's Response: lol. aw, you're such a romantic at heart, aren't you? but you know, i have a good feeling about these two kids and their ability to work their problems out. ;)

Reviewer: thaty Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 2:04:08 PM Title: Chapter 19

First of all, sorry you had a bad night! Hope you are doing better now!

You know, I came here today just to look up for things and you had updated!!! Then I saw that it was a big chapter (more than 5,000 words!!) and that there would be some drama.
Wow! Gotta tell you: I love some angst!!! And I was missing it in this story!!! It was about time everyone find out! Amazingly, I was happy while reading it, because I love the characters to suffer before a happy ending...hahahahaha

It was my favorite chapter so far, I kept reading it slowly, enjoying every moment, afraid to get too soon to the end!

I loved the discussion with Jean, I feel just like her, always having to be the perfect one, the one that does everything right, that can't disapoint anyone!

You know, what makes your story so good, even for a no-powers one, is that it is very real, you kept the essence of the characters, and above all, because you are a really good writer. You know how to keep it interesting, and make us want more when a chapter is over! The story is very well developted, you don't forget characters, or situations, everything fits perfectly.

I'm really anxious about the next chapter (as always), although I'm having a bad feeling that this story will be over soon!

PS: I'm not gonna offer to be the beta because english is not my first language! Oh, I'm from Brazil and I just foud out a place that sells peanut butter *_* Now I need the boyfriend!!!

Author's Response: i am doing much better today! And I completely agree about the angst. I love a story with a good bit of dirt in it, but considering how I've tried to keep this one fairly light, I didn't feel like I could make it *too* angsty and still be able to get away with it.
thank you VERY much for the kind words about the story. i could honestly sit here and write about 2,000 words in response to all that you said but that would be just too much for you, i'm sure. ;) The next chapter should be out in the next couple of days. It got really busy for me recently but it should all slow down soon and give me time to put into the next chapter.
hooray for finding the peanut butter!! you know what? I don't even love it, to be honest. I like Reese's candies, but I probably only have a PB (and honey) sandwich about once a year. However, since writing some of these chapters I have been craving PB like you wouldn't believe! I've seriously got to go buy a jar soon before i explode. And yes, I need a boyfriend, too. let the manhunt begin!

Reviewer: lovers_fade Signed star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 1:59:43 PM Title: Chapter 19

nooooooooooooo.
well, whatever about Jean - I less than care.
but no, Logan! no! dangit.
please tell me you're not going to leave us hanging for like a week after this.

Author's Response: heh. okay. for the record-- i had NO intention of letting you guys hang like this for a week. But the last few days have been rather busy and I haven't even worked on the next chapter yet. But I will soon! Just keep the pitch forks at bay in the mean time, alright? :D

Reviewer: Rogue1189 Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 12:42:01 PM Title: Chapter 19

omg noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
how could you????????????????????????????


well I did expect him to find out I knew it would happen but that doesn't mean I have to accept it haha

Now he needs to listen and stop ranting she already admitted to it and it was all genuine and she loves him!!!!!!

ugh I have to go find a one shot fluff to calm me down haha

Author's Response: haha--- it all had to come out eventually! just think, all of this was like pulling a shard of glass out of your skin. once it's out the body can heal. We all know L and M will figure something out. Won't they? ;)

Reviewer: askita Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 12:37:33 PM Title: Chapter 19

I'll do the beta thing! (and it has nothing to do with getting a sneak peek at the rest of your stories. LOL) I enjoy betaing. Now... on to the review.

I completly forgot about the phone thing. And even through poor Marie's inner turmoil, I couldn't stop grinning. Then, once I realized what this meant (about the same time Marie did mind you) I had to keep the tears in. I did a better job than her. But I was totally sad. THe with the whole Jean thing, I felt just like Marie again. I love Jean again turning the tide on Marie, and I've been there so many times with my younger siters. Great chapter, you've got me choping at the bit, waiting for more. Send me a PM if you're intrested.

Author's Response: hey! thanks for the beta offer. I will keep you in mind if/when (ha!) i do another story. I've gone solo this far, I might as well finish SoA by myself. ;) in regards to SoA--- you can't deny that Marie had it all coming in this one. she deserved to have her ass bitten a little (and not in the good way). haha.

Reviewer: rhiannon_avon Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 11:54:45 AM Title: Chapter 19

Murphy's Law strikes just when everything seems to be going right: comes out that Marie tried to break up Bobby and Kitty, Logan finds out that Marie was using him (at least at first), and Jean goes off the deep end.
Marie should have just found a way to stay home, although everything would end up coming out anyway.

I don't know if I've mentioned it in previous reviews, but I love this take on an AU story. I've only read one other story on this site with no powers that I really enjoyed, so I was surprised to find another one. You still have all the characteristics that make the characters the characters, so the story works well.

Sorry to see that you had a bad evening, hope that things start going your way today. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: the last couple of days have gone much, much better. :) and thank you for the compliment on the story. what other AU story did you read that you liked? if i haven't read it before I'd like to. hope to have the next chapter out soon...

Reviewer: nikkibelle Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 9:29:12 AM Title: Chapter 18

...and done with the last 2 chapters ^^

18 was so funny, I loved how everyone just suddenly showed up at her place (as if to ruin her night on purpose. gasp!)
good thing they got rid of them though, hehe.

oh and: the peanut butter? genius!!

can't wait for the next chapter! =)

too bad about your lack of boxing teachers. didn't spot one yet either, lol

Author's Response: for the record, the whole revolving door fiasco has happened to me quite a few times. i swear i'm one of those people that if i didn't have bad luck i'd have no luck at all. *sigh*. But hell, it makes for great story telling later!
rn
rnsorry you haven't found your boxing instructor yet. but don't worry. it'll happen. in the mean time, fix yourself a peanut butter sandwich and relax with some good WRFA reading. ;)

Reviewer: New Moon Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 9:18:13 AM Title: Chapter 1

This is debatably OT but you need to know that my big, handsome husband got to enjoy some peanut butter while the kids had an overnight with the grandparents and he LOVED it. Heh.

Author's Response: oh my god-- this just made my day! I'm grinning like a fool over here. :D don't you just love some of the neat ideas you pick up from fanfic? Just a few years ago i discovered a nifty little trick using toothpaste... but that would definitely be TMI to go into detail. ;)

Reviewer: nikkibelle Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/11/2009 4:03:01 AM Title: Chapter 17

it's official: I'm addicted to your story =)
I'm on chapter 16 now...been reading on-stop since 2 days ago: before school, after school, at night, hell even in school haha. I just can't stop ^^

so, yeah, I just wanted to tell you how much I love this. (and that's it's very strange to be reading smut in the school library, especially when it's this good =P )

I love the M/L dynamic the way you write it; it's hot and romantic and everything, all at the same time.

*off to go to class and then to the gym to find hot boxing instructor to go out on a date with*

Author's Response: oh, yeah--- snagged another unsuspecting reader into my clutches! haha, j/k. Thank you very much for the wonderful feedback. I love reading a story all in one go and i know all about addiction. 9 years ago i was doing the same thing in school. You know, not learning. Just reading my fanfic. Jeeze, did I have my priorities in order or what? :P good luck on the hot boxing instructor hunt! Since starting this story, i've tried looking in my area. it ain't happening. haha.

Reviewer: askita Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/10/2009 11:35:05 PM Title: Chapter 18

Loving this! Sorry I haven't been reviewing, I just got around to reading it all, (which is always great to do in one shot) because I ws on vacation. Im kinda back now, but don't know how much fic writing I'll get done. I try to work on my originals when the hbby is home. Which he will be until April 4th. *grins* That's a good thing cause if you've ever read any of my LJ, I don't get to see him a lot. YAY! I want more, and I definately want to see them at the party. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: hey! i was wondering where you were. thanks so much for the feedback, it brightens my day to hear that someone read this and had a good time in doing so. Next chapter will be up soon. I need to go back through it and attempt to correct errors (i never fully succeed) before posting. Thanks again and yay for having the hubby back home!

Reviewer: thaty Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/10/2009 8:02:40 PM Title: Chapter 18

You know, the first thing I do when I get online is to come here and check up for updates! I'm soo adicted to this story! Although I can't understand the MacGyver fascination...hahahahaha

You are a really great writer. The story is very real, even for an AU without powers! And you developed the characters pretty well.

And you got me craving for peanut butter!!! And I have *never* eaten it! There is no such thing in my country :o(

I loved this chapter, it was the funniest! And I loved how Logan and Scott met. Your Scott is great!!!
Is there something going on between him and Jean?! Very nice!! Can't wait for the party!!!

I'm looking foward to next chapter! Please don't take too long!

Author's Response: lol @ the MacGyver fascination. I tell ya-- to explain the MacGyver fascination would take way too long to explain. But I may have to do that one day!
so glad you're enjoying the story still. I still cringe whenever I post a chapter because I, myself, have a hard time liking AU stories. like I said to someone else, I must be doing something right to please you all. And whatever it is, I hope I don't lose it!!
peanut butter is a staple in American children's lives. Where are you from? I will have to smuggle you in a jar. ;)
again, i'm happy that you liked this chapter. and I can't tell you if there's anything going on between Scott and Jean. you just have to wait and see! haha

Reviewer: Wolf CrescentWalker Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/10/2009 3:07:20 AM Title: Chapter 17

*on the floor*

This is so freakin' hot, it's unreal.

Author's Response: lol. smut seems to be a hit amongst this crowd. ;P

Reviewer: manda-dee Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 03/10/2009 3:03:52 AM Title: Chapter 1

::SIGH:: And now...the longest review ever....

"But I wasn’t insane. I was horny."

Its like 3 am and I just laughed ridiculously loud when I read this chapter- great scene.

Now, when I first started writing fanfiction it wasn't W/R so my first stories are elsewhere but I just wanted to say I know what you mean about posting for the first time and agonizing over whether or not the chapter will meet up to the readers expectations, and anxiously waiting for reviews and yada yadda yadda, but I just had to tell you- stop worrying! You're really good, impressive even when you consider this is your first W/R story and I have a confession to make when I read it was going to be a no powers story, I was like, eh : /

But this story blew me away and it blew everybody else away too- I mean you have so many reviews and it really hasn't been a very long time so they've accumulated pretty fast and you're doing a great job and I can't wait to read more!

I'm fresh out of baked goods, no time to bake, pre-midterm week ...blah-anyway I'm trying really hard to update.... and I started a new fic.... I know I'm going to fanfiction hell a place chuck full of unfinished stories and spelling mistakes and bad plots with phony dialogue but I cant stop writing L/R fanfiction...maybe I just need a life? lol

Anyway can't wait for your next update, anxiously awaiting!

Author's Response: 20 points to you for picking out my favorite quote in the story! When I wrote it i didn't think anything of it, but then i went back to re-read everything and i laughed at that candid Marie-thought. How much more succinct can one get?

rnthank you again for the review. i love the long ones, they give me more insight into what the reader is thinking. And I know what you mean about AU/no powers. I'd be the same way. In fact, I am the same way but I did this fic anyway. What was I thinking?? O.O I'm very greatful that I'm doing something right, though, and that people are keeping the flames away! I am absolutely in love with this forum because of the people here (oh, and of course the plethora of great stories).

rngood luck with your midterms. don't stress out too much. but remember that you've got people here still waiting on more updates from you--- and what is more important? School or FanFic? I'll give you a hint: it's not school. ;)

Reviewer: New Moon Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/09/2009 11:45:04 PM Title: Chapter 1

Peanut Butter has officially become sexy to me. This is such a great story, by far my absolute favorite foray into AU ever.

Author's Response: woah, major compliment! so glad you're enjoying the ride and that picked up a kinky new like of Peanut Butter along the way. haha!

Reviewer: rhiannon_avon Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/09/2009 10:27:19 PM Title: Chapter 18

Poor Marie!! All she wants is a night with Logan and has to deal with the revolving door at her house. Too bad. I like how Logan and Scott get along though, I always like those stories better. And I love Logan's line about generals and training, it fits great.

Looking forward to the next chapter. =)

Author's Response: thank you for the review. i like it when Scott and Logan get along, too (even grudgingly). I'll have the next chapter up and out soon. :)

Reviewer: lovers_fade Signed star star star star star [Report This]
Date: 03/09/2009 10:22:03 PM Title: Chapter 18

I love this story.
and there is nothing else to say, except: updates do brighten my day. :]

Author's Response: hah, glad to hear you're liking it and i'm glad the update yesterday brightened your day. I'll have to do that again soon, huh? ;)

Reviewer: Wytchling Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/09/2009 10:03:19 PM Title: Chapter 18

That was great. Can't wait for the party Chapter!

Author's Response: thanks. it's coming. at some point. you know, whenever i sit down to write it.. which uh, should be soon?

Reviewer: Rogue1189 Signed star star star star half star [Report This]
Date: 03/09/2009 6:21:11 PM Title: Chapter 18

hehe I hate when people get in the way of an exciting night with the bf haha .....and I will never look at peanut butter the same way again haha =P

Author's Response: in regards to the peanut butter? you and me both! while grocery shopping last night I made a pit stop at the PB aisle and just stood there looking at the jars. I think some of the passerbys thought I was crazy. ;)

You must login (register) to review.