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I like this story. One little thing, however: you are continually switching between third person point of view (author/narrator's point of view) and first person point of view (Logan's point of view)... Makes it kind of hard to follow the story. Might be a good idea to be a bit more consistent and the point of view you're writing, yeah :-)
Otherwise, good job!
Great beginning!! Nice set up, the anticipation is palpable. Only problem is the switch between first person and third person..a little confusing.