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Reviewer: Mini Funk Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/11/2013 1:41:35 PM Title: Spectator Sport: Logan

I like this story. One little thing, however: you are continually switching between third person point of view (author/narrator's point of view) and first person point of view (Logan's point of view)... Makes it kind of hard to follow the story. Might be a good idea to be a bit more consistent and the point of view you're writing, yeah :-)

Otherwise, good job!

Reviewer: ct_xfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/21/2009 7:14:09 PM Title: Spectator Sport: Logan

Great beginning!! Nice set up, the anticipation is palpable. Only problem is the switch between first person and third person..a little confusing.

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