The Wolverine & Rogue Fanfiction Archive
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I've HAD more than 4 hours sleep, this is DEFINITELY readable and as for coherent, that's neither here or there for the masses, it's a decision made by the individual reader. *I* think it's very coherent, very bright in that I kept getting flashes of pictures and people and scenes in my head as I wrote. It's not a "bright" piece, as in happy, but it's an excellent one. Bravo!
The elegance of your words amazes me. I came into this expecting another gritty post-apocalyptic story, and found poetry in images painted with words. Well done!